Once there was a girl who had just moved to 54 Fetta rd, Liverpool. Her name was Ryann and she was on her way to her new school. She couldn’t wait to make new friends and meet her new teachers. When Ryann arrived at school, she was feeling a bit left out because she had no friends. 1
After a few days at her new school, she noticed a group of people in the corner of the playground. She remembered when she started at her new school that some kids warned her not to go over to them, but she was curious why. So ignoring the warnings, she went over and greeted the people. Ryann asked if they could be her friends. The group said only if you steal Mr. Minks reading glasses, who was their English teacher. So Ryann went of to steal Mr. Minks reading glasses. First, she went over the hill into the main hall and into Mr. Minks classroom. There laying on the desk was his reading glasses. Just as she went to grab the glasses she heard someone coming, she quickly took them and ran to hide. A few seconds later, the doorknob turned and the Janitor came in. Ryann said under her breath “That was a close one”, once the janitor had left Ryann quickly sneaked out of the classroom as quiet as a mouse. Ryann ran over to the group and they couldn’t believe she did it. Therefore, they had to keep their promise so Ryann was accepted into their gang.2
Within a couple of weeks, Ryann was a changed person she was not the person who she used to be. She was on detention every day, doing things such as throwing paper airplanes at the teachers, making fun of students that wore glasses or had braces and that was just the start. Ryann kept getting into fights and started punching anyone who thought they where better than her. She had turned into a bully. This went on for months, until the teachers suspended her until they could think of a plan to stop her before she got out of control. 3
Later into the school term, they thought of a plan. The plan was to build a room with no windows and only one door. It was called the punishment room. It was pretty ordinary to a normal person that was nice but to a bully, it felt like prison with a happy colour blue painted on the walls “Be Happy” posters every where and amongst all that was a desk and a Blackboard. When the punishment room was completed, Ryann was allowed to come back to school. Everyone knew it would not be long until Ryann was caught doing something and they were right she was found beating up a first grader. When Ryann walked in the room, she screamed she yelled and for sure, the teachers Mrs. Happy had earplugs in her ears. After a couple of hours, Ryann gave in. That is when Mrs. Happy was going to do her magic. Mrs. Happy taught Ryann how to be a good friend, to do the right thing and not to be a bully. 4
In the following months Ryann slowly became herself again found two good friends called Gannett and Gabriella, And the gang that made Ryann a bully got expelled. Ryann had a great time at her new school and couldn’t wait till the next year.5
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Comments
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Good job.
A little hard to read with some grammar and spelling mistakes, but still good, don't worry.
So, yeah. You also combined some sentences, yet it was a little choppy at some times.
Still. You did a good job.
If there's more coming, alert me because this is something that I will definitely read!
Good luck in my contest! -
I think that this was really good for the beginning of a story. That is, if you're planning on a continuation? You should continue the story, I think.
Keep up the great work. Welcome to the site, Poka-dot-sock. (I think you should spell Poka like Polka)

