Pain was only 18 when he met Pleasure, she was 28. He said my father taught me how to make any woman feel great. Pleasure said, I'm not just any woman you fool, You look kind of young, shouldn't you be in school? I graduated in May but I can make your day. Come on over to my place. We can drink some wine or bump and grind . How I love a man that speaks his mind, was all that she could say. So they took a ride and pain's thinking dang she fine I'm bout to get laid. All the while little Ms. Pleasure's thinking of ways to get paid. They got so drunk they did it on the couch and never made it to the bed. He licked her bigger than the average button, while she gave him some head. She got a call and had to leave, but said she would return. When he went to the bathroom, he tried to pee, it really burned. 1
One year later his face is on the paper one lesson learned. Rap it up, only in god you trust. Or you too may wound up in an urn.2
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RapItUp! Safe sex, Or wait until Marriage.
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Thanks a lot for understanding. After reading what you thought the first time I even wrote rapitup or wait for marriage in my author's comments. May god bless you too!
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Hey,
What you wrote here makes me think, and isn't that the point?
I am sorry if I came across as preachy, but I just wanted to bring up another outlook.
I do understand that when you are dealing with situations that seem hopeless, anything that might save lives is worth a try.
Much love and God bless,
KT
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Some men do teach their children about sex. I can state this because I have quite a few in my family that does. I don't think it's perverted for me to have written it in this form because the end states the consequences that could result from careless action. No, condoms don't protect against everything but it does help to cut the risks down considerably. And even though we should trust god's plan unfortunately we don't always go with that. There are many monogamous relationshionships where one partner has AIDS but doesn't know. I was just tryig to shed some light on this Situation. But thanks. for stating your opinion.
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Thank you very much!
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“He said my father taught me how to make any woman feel great”
I did not know that fathers taught sexual technique to their children???
I think your message here is definitely “safer sex” when you tell us to wrap it up (wear condoms.)
I have to tell you that there are many diseases that condoms do not prevent, and a condom will not always prevent ANYTHING.
You do not down the act itself, as a matter of fact here it is titillating.
This is a perverted view of sex. Unfortunately, it is common.
I understand this is a different genre, but the message is clear.
What about practicing responsible monogamy?
If in God we trust, then we would wait until marriage trusting that His plan is the right one…
Oh well…
Good luck in the contest.
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I liked the way that you personified pleasure and pain, rather than just describing this from two ordinary individuals points of view. I guess pain didn't consider itself as such in the beginning, but the potential is there for us all if we act as casually about sex.
Although rhyming, the format you have used does mean that it still reads pretty well.
Thank you for taking the time to enter my contest
Kat xxx
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