Konoha Academy__________________________________Suzuki Inuzuka
Class 5b______________________________________________10/19/071
Aim:How can we write an auto biography?2
F-3
Well for school today were writing autobiographys.so il be telling you about me I guess.enjoy4
Suzuki Inuzuka:5
eyes: brown6
hair:brown7
likes: dogs and everything about them8
dislikes:unjustice9
family: inuzuka duh..10
fav food: super spicy Curry Ramen(i made it up myself)11
me in my own words:12
uhhhhhh what to write........13
okay lets see.like my cousin,i wear face paint,but i just h14
ave single black stripes goin down my face.i usualy wear a olive green konoha vest,a black konoha shirt,matching gloves,and my favorite black jacket that flows in the wind and stops at slightly below my hips. i am a lover of all spicy foods.i really love my dog Kibani and if anyone harms him they WILL die.i also love all dogs,especialy Kibanis cousin,akamaru.my cousin is his owner,kiba.i look up to him as the Inuzuka clans pride.ive made my own,signature jutsu called the Metamorf jutsu but youll have to see that another time and hope u can live to tell about it.i am espesialy tireed todayyy i have made sum spellin mistakes i know.uhh i think i have enuff written here so im going to hand it in and hope for the best!
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A contest entry
- Prologues And First chapters by Ayesha Raees.
190 points, ended November 20, 2007, 25 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
I am the leaf villages number two,hyperactive knuckle head ninja!!
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I could have sworn I replied to this....well...OFF TO THE NEXT PART...but first I need to hitch a ride...JOEL!
Joel: After BBQing me and leaving me to be stabbed with a pencil you still want me to give you a lift? I don't think so.
Me: TOO BAD! *jumps on Joel's back and kicks him in sides* To part two now, damn it! -
How have I not seen this before, especially being (unofficially) an Inuzuka myself??? O___o
I love it! I really like Suzuki, and I think she's got lotsa potential! Realistic character, though really, all inuzukas have the red marks on their cheeks. For her not to would make her like....shunned. But yah,I somewhat agree with Ayesha Raees. Add more. The outline/survey format's good, but add to it. Maybe fix some grammatical errors. If you leave the lower case and the spelling mistakes and junk, it makes it look junky. Like a myspace photo. But you've got something better than a myspace pic >.< So keep it up!
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though this wasnt what i was looking for
but the introduction of a naruto character was fine i guess but if you have introduced the character as well started up with the story line, it would have been good...
i have a lot of experience when it comes to fanfictions, and beleive me, yours is not the only one that i have come to introducing a character in this way...
but its a suggestion, always describe the character in a way that will make the reader really excited. eg. i wrote something below, try writing it like that:
I look out of the window, bored as hell. The sun was shining perfectly and the clouds were just perfect. And even though i know i was zoning out, i did not care because i really hated creative writing and Iruka-sensei were not going easy on us. It was not my fault i sucked a spellings... i mean- How can it be?
I think is glaring at me but what the heck! My brother (kiba is it?) did the same thing and i think i am better than him in every way...
a girl can dream right?
"INUZUKA!!!"
I jumped at the sudden yell and looked around frantically, making a few girls laugh and some boys smirk, and saw Iruka shaking his head at me.
After fifteen minutes of him lecturing me, he atlast went again babbling something about verbals and spellings.
I looked out of the window again and saw my slightlightly distorted reflection in the glass mirror.
My name is...
and you can start the description from here and end the chapter with another yell from Iruka or someone poking you.
Make the reader stay on the edge of their seats
good luck in the future.
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this is pretty good keep on writing
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just so ya know i can spell,but i mispelled on purpose to show the characters nature.so dont chew me out about spelling please.
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heheh
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um ok? lol. probably wont have time to enter. sorry.
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