"So... Why did you bring me here to see the meteor shower, on this park in suburban Pennsylvania?" Brent asked his lovely girlfriend, Emma.
"Cause what's more beautiful than just you and me, on this blanket, snuggled up next to each other. and with hot cocoa." Emma laughed.
"Hmm Good point." He giggled and kissed her lightly on her lips.
"Basically I wanted to tell you that, if I had a penny for everytime I fell in love with someone as amazing as you,
I would have exactly one cent." Emma smiled.
Brent looked at her weird.
"What's wrong babe?" Emma asked.
"For everytime you fell in love with someone like me, you'd exactly have one cent. So who is this other guy so I can pummel him to a pulp." He started to exclaim.
"Babe, you're taking things to literal again. I'm saying in a poetic way that I'm in love with you. There's no other guy that I would rather be in love with." Emma whispered in his ear, as she wrapped her arms around his neck
"So who is this other guy, cause if you're in love with someone like and have one penny for everytime that you're falling in love with someone like me, you would have a penny." He started to explain
"Yes." Emma replied.
"So who is he?" He asked again.
"There is no guy, there's only you." Emma responded. She began laughing exasperately at how stupidity this conversation.
"So do you have a penny or no?" Brent asked.
"figuratively or literally?" Emma giggled. Brent just cocked his eyebrow at her.
"No I don't have a penny. I have you and only you!" Emma exclaimed. She crawled on her knees to get near him, then threw her arms around him and kissed him.
"So I'm your penny?" He asked again.
"Yes You're my shiny brand new penny in the piggybank of my heart." Emma smiled. "Now can we continue watching these shooting stars and kiss and drink hot chocolate now."
"Am I your only brand new penny." He began to laugh.
"OH MY GOSH! Will this ever end!" She exasperated humorously. AND THEN.... HE KISSED HER!
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some grammer mistakes, a weird CAPS LOCK at the end, but overall, a cute story
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cute. some spelling mistakes. the sentence flow, especially in the dialog, could be better. but it was still good. i liked the "piggybank of my heart" statement. it was a little cheesy in parts, but still, I liked it (= good job and good luck in the contest -
Lol this was funny! I just couldn't stop rolling my eyes at brent. Lol! what a doofus! It was cute! I really liked it great job!
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Cute Story
You captured completely a conversation with the male species. You try to make an innocent comment and it gets blown all out of proportion. Good work.
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Haha! I loved this! It reminded me of a conversation I said with my (now ex) boyfriend! Loved it! Yes, some guys take things way too literally! All the more reason why we love them so much!
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Lmao! you are so naughty nikki! I can't believe that you have once again done this. Its well written and you really shine through this...as it won't happen in real life haha...it shows your crazy mind very nicely though haha.
Keep up the great work nikki...maybe not great but crazy
Emma
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