Monologue # Eleven - Cancel

Monologue # Eleven - Cancel

Jenny and her mother walked down the stairs, all was quiet at the dinner table.

Mrs Morley laughed "Man you men make a lot of noise, do you wanna cut it out before the neighbours report you".

Bobby smiled, Mr Morley didn't seem amused , he looked annoyed and frustrated.

Mrs Morley sat down mext to Jenny and handed her a plate.

"I just got of the phone with Madame Lola" Mr Morley said, sitting back in his chair, hands behind his head.

Jenny looked up "Great what did she want this time ?".

Mr Morley crossed his hands across his chest, leaning forward "She's canceled your enrolment Jenny".

Mrs Morley's face stiffened "Did she say why " she asked her husband, starting to feel sick in the stomach.

"Something about not being able to tolerate smart ass ignorance and not having the time for immature arrogant brats".

Jenny slammed her fist on the table, rocking the cutlery "That is utter bullshit, complete utter bullshit, who the fuck does she think she is ?".

"Jenny" her mother yelled "We'll have none of this at the dinner table thank you".

Mr Morley frowned "What did you say today to make her so angry Jenny , I need you to be honest with me now".

Jenny growled " All I said was that I was not going to have a repeat of sundays behaviour, that I was going to treat her with respect and that's the God damn honest truth".

Mr Morley sat back "Their had to be more to it then that, come on Jenny I'm cutting you a whole heap of slack by not jumping down your throat, did you wear at her or throw anything around the room".

Jenny stood up "What so I'm some kind of psyco now, is that was you asking me, don't you belive me, I told you exactly what I said, I didn't even swear at her".

Mr Morley nodded "Sit down Jenny" he said anger in his voice "I didn't say I didn't believe you, I was just making sure, and I don't think you psyco at all, but if you haven't noticed lately you have been doing some crazy shit when your angry".

Mrs Morley handed Bobby the salad "Take as much as you want love".

Jenny leaned back in her chair, watching Bobby slowly put a spoonfull of salad on his plate.

"This is bullshit how can someone cancel someones enrollment Just because you don't like them".

Mr Morley shook his head "You can't" he sighed "So are you positive you didn't accidently say something under your breath without realising it".

"FUCk YOU DAD, FUCK YOU" Jenny screamed , throwing back her chair "I don't need you or Mum, or no one especially that fucked up mole Madame Lola to put me through this shit anymore, I mean really what part of NO don't you people understand, FUCK it I'm outta here".

Jenny walked away leaving her chair on the floor.

Mrs Morley stood up , picking the chair up.

"Jenny, get back here RIGHT NOW" Mr Morley yelled, standing up he knocked his drink over, spilling it all over Bobby's jeans.

"Shit, of fuck JENNY" he screamed handing Bobby a serviet to wipe his pants. "Sorry Bobby".

Bobby smiled slightly "No problem Mr . M, accidents happen all the time".

They both wiped the mess up and Mr Morley sat down in his chair, he looked at his wife "Do you think she's telling the truth Kat".

Mrs Morley frowned, scrunching up her nose, it reminded him alot like Jenny. "How can you even ask that Roy”.

She stood up, pushing her chair in “Goodnight Bobby, I’m sorry the evening turned out like this”.

Bobby nodded “No sweat Mrs M”.

Mrs Morley walked out of the room, not even looking back at her husband.

Mr Morley sat back in his chair “Damned if I’m goanna let this bitch tare my family apart, or ruin Jenny’s dream”.




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Hay people
this is the chapter I had the most connection with... It was deep and ^__^dramatic ... Not very light on the family fights ...

xox Blair enjoy !!!

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  • DarkOneShadow
    October 27, 2007

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    Deep on the drama, but I like it that the dad and the mom talk things over later... it shows a genuine desire to see their child succeed... nice job

    DarkOne


  • k8fairy
    October 17, 2007
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    Well I think you really draw me into the story, now I really want to read what has happened in the back story, which I shouldn't cause I have four massive life changing exams.
    But the people seem very real, they have depth and this is something that real would happen, like a scene from a real family. Excellent stuff.


  • DarkDayMagic
    October 16, 2007

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    This move along well. You've set the scene nicely. You have definite ability with dialog. Others have mentioned problems with grammer so I won't get into that. All in all this was a good read.


  • Azzy Bear
    October 16, 2007
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    Oh, i can't believe i forgot..Here, take these smileys!

  • Azzy Bear
    October 16, 2007

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    very life like

    Some grammer, but, still an A+ from me!
    Realism in arguements really pull a story together and my friend, you have definitly brought that out that realism!


  • iPoopAThug
    October 16, 2007
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    There was some grammatical problems but this was pretty good. It was pretty realistic. I don't think the mom is really all that mean however I think the fact that she trust a random teacher more than her own daughter to be a real problem. Nice to know that Mr. Morley actually cares about his daughters feelings and not just appearances.

    beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 4, ending: 4, dialog: 4, characters: 4.


  • Blood13Rayne
    October 15, 2007
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    damn, sounds like a fight between me and my dad. lawl. on our good days too!!


  • punkrockingeek
    October 15, 2007
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    wow cool. Her family is seriously vulgar 0.o Bobby's being the goody-goody XD Mdm Lola is being really mean, maybe you could try making the next chapter when Jenny went to Mdm Lola face to face asking her why, nicely =D I think this chapter is good, although a bit of spelling could be improved =)

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