Descriptions1
Zoeya;; 5’1 Chinese, left eye brown, right eye green tinge, muscular, stern rifle, female. 2
Hans;; Tan, 6’2 Blonde, blue eyes, muscular, M60 machine gun, male. 3
Toi;; 6’4, muscular, African American with a weird hair cut, M60 machine gun, female. 4
Charzelle;; 5’0 blonde, blue eyes, schizo world class gymnasts, M15 colt, female. 5
Ananastasia;; 1’2, blonde, blue eyes, Charzelle’s doll that sit in a custom made carrier, strapped to Charzelle’s chest, female. 6
Sheralee;; That’s me, I’m 4’11, brown hair, brown eyes, muscular, M15 colt, female. 7
We have been inside Roo’s head for over 15years, this is his first attempt to get us down on paper. 8
I’m 22, Charzelle is my best friend, she’s my schizo Sis, with a bad habit of eating anyone who pisses her off, I am quiet one out of us, I think more than I speak. 5 years ago, I was a child sex slave junkie running for my life, We invited me to join. Zoeya, skills and blood line are descendent from a great ancient Chinese warrior, she trained and me how to fight, and now we are middle of the last stages of stage three in our training.9
We have our Language called Ka, we speak it most in this scene, in Ka, there is no word for me because We are one, when I refer to myself or another person, I must use the name they were given, the whole group is We, a part of the group Us, and we also talk through version hand singles. 10
Today we are all wearing our personalised camouflage outfits. We had been sent in to kidnap a drug lord. The attack went to plan, we have the treasure and destroyed his $50,000,000 mansion. We are waiting for Toi and Hans, who were giving covering fire during the extraction. 11
Zoeya to me in Ka, 12
“ Sheralee; Hans and Toi has got us cut off, 30 minutes ammo, 5 km’s North by North West, there’s a road running North 1 Km follow that, take Charzelle and tell us to get our arse back here before Zoeya goes there.” 13
To Zoeya in Ka, 14
“Understands.” 15
To Sis in Ka, “Charzelle; come Hans and Toi are in trouble North.” 16
We run north, fast. 17
‘North, Energy, 4, stationary, 200 m.’ 18
Clicks my fingers, to Charzelle by hand, 19
“North, 4, 200m.” We run North, stops. 20
To Sis by hand, 21
“Behind bush, 4, up tree.” 22
Silently we stalk like cats in the dark. We come to a tree. 23
‘Looks sound.’24
I climb, 12345 crouching on a branch next to Charzelle.25
I can see 4 armed men, around a Humbie armed with an M2 50 Cal. We raise our rifles, taking aim. 26
‘Energy, left, 300m, 12+, moving South.27
Touches Charzelle, to her hand. 28
“12+, West, silent kill, rear, Charzelle.” 29
‘Right that leaves the front 2 for me.’30
Glides back to the ground while Charzelle circles in the trees. Pulls my Kurdika.31
‘Zoeya said this will take off heads, lets see.’ 32
Stalking, millimetre by millimetre, I’m inching closer. 33
‘Right Charzelle is ready.’ 34
Springs in, slide tackle, Whack across his forehead, blade’s stuck, reaches for the dagger, throws, hits right in his throat. 35
Charzelle pounces out of the tree, cuts his throat as she hands springs off his shoulders, lands throws both blades, one enters each eye socket. 36
‘That was easy, we should take the car.’ 37
Calls Zoeya on my radio in Ka,38
“Zoeya Zoeya Zoeya 12 + moving towards we, 12+ towards we.” 39
‘Right she has got the message.’ 40
Retrieves my blades, 41
to Sis by hand,42
“Car, drive, Charzelle.” 43
Charzelle jumps in the driver’s seat while I manned the M2. Charzelle starts moving, bangs my head when we jerk backwards. 44
To Sis in Ka, 45
“When did Charzelle learn to drive?” 46
To me in Ka, 47
“Now.” 48
To Charzelle in Ka,49
“Charzelle never driven before?” 50
To me in Ka, 51
“Never, but if a male can drive then a monkey can.” 52
Hanging on, jerking down the road. 53
‘I can see it is going to be one of those nights.’54
Checking the M2, 55
‘250 rpm, belt here, give that a whack, pull the bolt back. Ready too go.’56
We’re rolling down the road, reasonable smoothly. 57
‘Energy, check point is ahead.’ 58
To Sis in Ka, 59
“Charzelle get ready.” 60
Schizo is singing in English, 61
“She’ll be coming around the mountain when she comes. TooT TooT!” 62
‘Find time to schizo out bitch.’ 63
Bouncing, trying to take aim, 64
Thud Thud Thud,, Thud Thud. 65
To Sis in Ka, 66
“Keep it steady!” 67
Charzelle’s arm is out the window yelling, “TooT TooT!” 68
‘That bitch will get me killed.’ 69
Thud Thud Thud, ting twang wang 70
‘Catch this mothers’ 71
Thud Thud Thud Thud Thud Thud Thud Thud Thud Thud Thud, 72
‘Got their vehicle.’ 73
Thud Thud, 74
We pass the burning vehicle , clears combat zone, can hear firing ahead. 75
Screams at the singing schizo in English, 76
“Bitch!” 77
Devil’s eyes, 78
“Good stay in there, get us into firing position.” 79
On my radio to Hans in Ka, 80
“Hans Hans Hans, Sheralee in vehicle from Hans’s South. Where does Hans want to be picked up? Right to the door, on our way.” 81
To Charzelle in Ka,82
“Drive to Toi and Hans a head 800 metres.” 83
‘Got to get that gunner’ 84
Thud Thud Thud,,Thud Thud Thud Thud Thud. 85
Bounces, both feet leaves the ground, 86
Thud,87
bounces, 88
‘Come on give me a chance bitch’ 89
Thud Thud Thud Thud Thud Thud 90
‘Think I got him.’ 91
Screeches right beside Toi and Hans, laying down covering fire. 92
Thud Thud Thud Thud, 93
Toi to me in Ka, 94
“Sheralee, Toi will take over.” 95
Moves, Toi leaps up and begins giving pay back, Hans jumps in the passenger’s seat, zing, unloads Toi’s M60 and throws, ting twang, the belt to Hans.96
Charzelle spins the wheels, I begin firing my rifle. 97
crack crack, crack crack, crack crack, crack crack, 98
‘Got him’ 99
crack crack, 100
clears the combat zone. 101
‘Whew, that was close.’ 102
To all in Ka, 103
“Us Ok” 104
‘Yes all ok.’ 105
On my radio to Zoeya in Ka, 106
“Zoeya Zoeya Zoeya Us Ok, Us Ok be there in 15, in 15.” 107
Schizo Sis is singing in English,108
“Chitty chitty bang bang chitty chitty bang bang I love you.” 109
‘Oh what the heck.’ 110
Sings along, 111
“Chitty chitty bang bang we love you.” 112
All are singing 113
“Chitty chitty bang bang chitty chitty bang bang we love you.” 114
We sang all the way to Zoeya.115
Jumps out as soon as we stopped, 116
irate Zoeya comes yelling in Ka, “Hans Toi get here now!” 117
Hans and Toi runs to her,118
Zoeya kicks Hans in the balls, 119
screams in Ka,120
“Next time Hans gets cut off Zoeya will cut Hans’s balls off.” 121
She’s wiggling her finger 122
while snarling at Toi in Ka,123
“Bring Toi’s head here, closer, closer.” 124
Right cross fair on the kisser, 125
screams in Ka,126
“Next time Toi gets cut off Zoeya will cut Toi’s tits off.” 127
Zoeya begins running around giving orders in Ka, 128
“Gamyn Atena Daeye hide that vehicle, booby trap it, Sheralee Hans Toi Charzelle 5 minutes rest, Byrra Furinla rear guard, Mingarra Maka scouts, Zull guard the treasure.” 129
All but Hans moves at a running pace. 130
Sitting down having a drink, 131
‘Ah yes, I’ll be glad to get home.’ 132
Sis comes dancing over carrying Ananastasia, 133
to me in Ka, 134
“Us had fun Sheralee, Ananastasia can’t wait til us go driving again.” 135
‘Not while I’m in the car, I’ll walk.’ 136
To Ananastasia in Ka,137
“Ananastasia drives, want a drink.” 138
Gives Ananastasia a drink, hands my canteen to Charzelle and nurses Ananastasia. To Ananastasia in Ka, 139
“Did Ananastasia have fun? Yes Sheralee had fun, when us get home Sheralee and Ananastasia will have a big sleep.”140
Hans hobbles over, 141
to Hans in Ka, 142
“Hans is ok?” 143
Hans nods his head, 144
to me in Ka, 145
“Hans wish Zoeya would stop doing that” 146
‘Cry to someone who cares.’ 147
To Hans in Ka, 148
“If Hans is going to marry Zoeya, then Hans should get use to it.” 149
‘Sucker.’ 150
To me in Ka, 151
“Hans is thinking twice.” 152
Laughs, 153
Zoeya yells in Ka, 154
“Get all together, we move in 2. Hans Toi Zull escort the treasure, Sheralee left flank, Charzelle right flank, Atena Daeye point, Gamyn rear. ” 155
Hands Ananastasia back to her mum, 156
to Sis in Ka, 157
“Take care Charzelle.” 158
Runs and patrols the columns left flank. 2 hours later, the journey was uneventful. 159
Zoeya has called us in and is now talking 160
to we in Ka. 161
“Well done, the treasure is on his way and we can go home, 20 minutes sleep, Toi North, Han South, Gamyn East, Daeye West.” 162
Falls to the ground and I’m straight asleep. 163
I’m awake eating Chucew, we fall in line, Zoeya gives her instructions 164
in Ka, 165
“Forwards Flankers Defender centre, Winds scout, Retrievers rear. The sooner we get home the sooner Zoeya can shower, no slacking, we run hard.” 166
‘She’s trying to kill us.’ 167
Sis and I ran scout, nothing much happened, for two days and nights we ran hard, until finally we were home. 168
Weapons checked in and I had my shower and hot meal. I’m unrolling my bed. 169
‘Bed bed, my beautiful bed.’ 170
Charzelle comes in tugging my arm excitedly, 171
speaking really fast Ka,172
“Sheralee Sheralee come us has a surprise for Sheralee.” 173
‘What now?’ 174
Shaking my head, 175
to Sis in Ka, 176
“Not now, Sheralee needs recharge.” 177
Determined girl drags me, 178
to me in Ka, 179
“Sheralee can sleep anytime, come.” 180
‘This better be good bitch.’ 181
To Sis in Ka,182
“Ok ok, stop pulling.” 183
Out of our tree house, we climbed to the West lookout. Charzelle is holding up what looks like a camouflaged bat outfit, 184
to me in Ka, 185
“Us made this for Sheralee, now we can fly together.” 186
‘What is the bitch talking about?’ 187
To me in Ka, 188
“Come on let us fly.” 189
Excited Girl drags me to the edge, 190
to me on Ka, 191
“Us run off here and jumps on that tree.” 192
My tried eyes looks at the tree 30 metres away, looks down at the ground 100metres away. 193
‘No way, I’m going back to bed.’ 194
Starts’ heading back to my calling bed, Girl is pulling my arm, 195
pleading in Ka, “Come on, let us have fun.” 196
‘Go away bitch,’ 197
to Sis in Ka,198
“Not now, tomorrow, Sheralee needs recharging.” 199
Nodding her head,200
to me in Ka, 201
“Tomorrow, Us fly tomorrow?” 202
Nodding my head, 203
‘Whatever bitch.’ 204
I reached my bed and that is where I stayed. 205
Zoeya;; 5’1 Chinese, left eye brown, right eye green tinge, muscular, stern rifle, female. 2
Hans;; Tan, 6’2 Blonde, blue eyes, muscular, M60 machine gun, male. 3
Toi;; 6’4, muscular, African American with a weird hair cut, M60 machine gun, female. 4
Charzelle;; 5’0 blonde, blue eyes, schizo world class gymnasts, M15 colt, female. 5
Ananastasia;; 1’2, blonde, blue eyes, Charzelle’s doll that sit in a custom made carrier, strapped to Charzelle’s chest, female. 6
Sheralee;; That’s me, I’m 4’11, brown hair, brown eyes, muscular, M15 colt, female. 7
We have been inside Roo’s head for over 15years, this is his first attempt to get us down on paper. 8
I’m 22, Charzelle is my best friend, she’s my schizo Sis, with a bad habit of eating anyone who pisses her off, I am quiet one out of us, I think more than I speak. 5 years ago, I was a child sex slave junkie running for my life, We invited me to join. Zoeya, skills and blood line are descendent from a great ancient Chinese warrior, she trained and me how to fight, and now we are middle of the last stages of stage three in our training.9
We have our Language called Ka, we speak it most in this scene, in Ka, there is no word for me because We are one, when I refer to myself or another person, I must use the name they were given, the whole group is We, a part of the group Us, and we also talk through version hand singles. 10
Today we are all wearing our personalised camouflage outfits. We had been sent in to kidnap a drug lord. The attack went to plan, we have the treasure and destroyed his $50,000,000 mansion. We are waiting for Toi and Hans, who were giving covering fire during the extraction. 11
Zoeya to me in Ka, 12
“ Sheralee; Hans and Toi has got us cut off, 30 minutes ammo, 5 km’s North by North West, there’s a road running North 1 Km follow that, take Charzelle and tell us to get our arse back here before Zoeya goes there.” 13
To Zoeya in Ka, 14
“Understands.” 15
To Sis in Ka, “Charzelle; come Hans and Toi are in trouble North.” 16
We run north, fast. 17
‘North, Energy, 4, stationary, 200 m.’ 18
Clicks my fingers, to Charzelle by hand, 19
“North, 4, 200m.” We run North, stops. 20
To Sis by hand, 21
“Behind bush, 4, up tree.” 22
Silently we stalk like cats in the dark. We come to a tree. 23
‘Looks sound.’24
I climb, 12345 crouching on a branch next to Charzelle.25
I can see 4 armed men, around a Humbie armed with an M2 50 Cal. We raise our rifles, taking aim. 26
‘Energy, left, 300m, 12+, moving South.27
Touches Charzelle, to her hand. 28
“12+, West, silent kill, rear, Charzelle.” 29
‘Right that leaves the front 2 for me.’30
Glides back to the ground while Charzelle circles in the trees. Pulls my Kurdika.31
‘Zoeya said this will take off heads, lets see.’ 32
Stalking, millimetre by millimetre, I’m inching closer. 33
‘Right Charzelle is ready.’ 34
Springs in, slide tackle, Whack across his forehead, blade’s stuck, reaches for the dagger, throws, hits right in his throat. 35
Charzelle pounces out of the tree, cuts his throat as she hands springs off his shoulders, lands throws both blades, one enters each eye socket. 36
‘That was easy, we should take the car.’ 37
Calls Zoeya on my radio in Ka,38
“Zoeya Zoeya Zoeya 12 + moving towards we, 12+ towards we.” 39
‘Right she has got the message.’ 40
Retrieves my blades, 41
to Sis by hand,42
“Car, drive, Charzelle.” 43
Charzelle jumps in the driver’s seat while I manned the M2. Charzelle starts moving, bangs my head when we jerk backwards. 44
To Sis in Ka, 45
“When did Charzelle learn to drive?” 46
To me in Ka, 47
“Now.” 48
To Charzelle in Ka,49
“Charzelle never driven before?” 50
To me in Ka, 51
“Never, but if a male can drive then a monkey can.” 52
Hanging on, jerking down the road. 53
‘I can see it is going to be one of those nights.’54
Checking the M2, 55
‘250 rpm, belt here, give that a whack, pull the bolt back. Ready too go.’56
We’re rolling down the road, reasonable smoothly. 57
‘Energy, check point is ahead.’ 58
To Sis in Ka, 59
“Charzelle get ready.” 60
Schizo is singing in English, 61
“She’ll be coming around the mountain when she comes. TooT TooT!” 62
‘Find time to schizo out bitch.’ 63
Bouncing, trying to take aim, 64
Thud Thud Thud,, Thud Thud. 65
To Sis in Ka, 66
“Keep it steady!” 67
Charzelle’s arm is out the window yelling, “TooT TooT!” 68
‘That bitch will get me killed.’ 69
Thud Thud Thud, ting twang wang 70
‘Catch this mothers’ 71
Thud Thud Thud Thud Thud Thud Thud Thud Thud Thud Thud, 72
‘Got their vehicle.’ 73
Thud Thud, 74
We pass the burning vehicle , clears combat zone, can hear firing ahead. 75
Screams at the singing schizo in English, 76
“Bitch!” 77
Devil’s eyes, 78
“Good stay in there, get us into firing position.” 79
On my radio to Hans in Ka, 80
“Hans Hans Hans, Sheralee in vehicle from Hans’s South. Where does Hans want to be picked up? Right to the door, on our way.” 81
To Charzelle in Ka,82
“Drive to Toi and Hans a head 800 metres.” 83
‘Got to get that gunner’ 84
Thud Thud Thud,,Thud Thud Thud Thud Thud. 85
Bounces, both feet leaves the ground, 86
Thud,87
bounces, 88
‘Come on give me a chance bitch’ 89
Thud Thud Thud Thud Thud Thud 90
‘Think I got him.’ 91
Screeches right beside Toi and Hans, laying down covering fire. 92
Thud Thud Thud Thud, 93
Toi to me in Ka, 94
“Sheralee, Toi will take over.” 95
Moves, Toi leaps up and begins giving pay back, Hans jumps in the passenger’s seat, zing, unloads Toi’s M60 and throws, ting twang, the belt to Hans.96
Charzelle spins the wheels, I begin firing my rifle. 97
crack crack, crack crack, crack crack, crack crack, 98
‘Got him’ 99
crack crack, 100
clears the combat zone. 101
‘Whew, that was close.’ 102
To all in Ka, 103
“Us Ok” 104
‘Yes all ok.’ 105
On my radio to Zoeya in Ka, 106
“Zoeya Zoeya Zoeya Us Ok, Us Ok be there in 15, in 15.” 107
Schizo Sis is singing in English,108
“Chitty chitty bang bang chitty chitty bang bang I love you.” 109
‘Oh what the heck.’ 110
Sings along, 111
“Chitty chitty bang bang we love you.” 112
All are singing 113
“Chitty chitty bang bang chitty chitty bang bang we love you.” 114
We sang all the way to Zoeya.115
Jumps out as soon as we stopped, 116
irate Zoeya comes yelling in Ka, “Hans Toi get here now!” 117
Hans and Toi runs to her,118
Zoeya kicks Hans in the balls, 119
screams in Ka,120
“Next time Hans gets cut off Zoeya will cut Hans’s balls off.” 121
She’s wiggling her finger 122
while snarling at Toi in Ka,123
“Bring Toi’s head here, closer, closer.” 124
Right cross fair on the kisser, 125
screams in Ka,126
“Next time Toi gets cut off Zoeya will cut Toi’s tits off.” 127
Zoeya begins running around giving orders in Ka, 128
“Gamyn Atena Daeye hide that vehicle, booby trap it, Sheralee Hans Toi Charzelle 5 minutes rest, Byrra Furinla rear guard, Mingarra Maka scouts, Zull guard the treasure.” 129
All but Hans moves at a running pace. 130
Sitting down having a drink, 131
‘Ah yes, I’ll be glad to get home.’ 132
Sis comes dancing over carrying Ananastasia, 133
to me in Ka, 134
“Us had fun Sheralee, Ananastasia can’t wait til us go driving again.” 135
‘Not while I’m in the car, I’ll walk.’ 136
To Ananastasia in Ka,137
“Ananastasia drives, want a drink.” 138
Gives Ananastasia a drink, hands my canteen to Charzelle and nurses Ananastasia. To Ananastasia in Ka, 139
“Did Ananastasia have fun? Yes Sheralee had fun, when us get home Sheralee and Ananastasia will have a big sleep.”140
Hans hobbles over, 141
to Hans in Ka, 142
“Hans is ok?” 143
Hans nods his head, 144
to me in Ka, 145
“Hans wish Zoeya would stop doing that” 146
‘Cry to someone who cares.’ 147
To Hans in Ka, 148
“If Hans is going to marry Zoeya, then Hans should get use to it.” 149
‘Sucker.’ 150
To me in Ka, 151
“Hans is thinking twice.” 152
Laughs, 153
Zoeya yells in Ka, 154
“Get all together, we move in 2. Hans Toi Zull escort the treasure, Sheralee left flank, Charzelle right flank, Atena Daeye point, Gamyn rear. ” 155
Hands Ananastasia back to her mum, 156
to Sis in Ka, 157
“Take care Charzelle.” 158
Runs and patrols the columns left flank. 2 hours later, the journey was uneventful. 159
Zoeya has called us in and is now talking 160
to we in Ka. 161
“Well done, the treasure is on his way and we can go home, 20 minutes sleep, Toi North, Han South, Gamyn East, Daeye West.” 162
Falls to the ground and I’m straight asleep. 163
I’m awake eating Chucew, we fall in line, Zoeya gives her instructions 164
in Ka, 165
“Forwards Flankers Defender centre, Winds scout, Retrievers rear. The sooner we get home the sooner Zoeya can shower, no slacking, we run hard.” 166
‘She’s trying to kill us.’ 167
Sis and I ran scout, nothing much happened, for two days and nights we ran hard, until finally we were home. 168
Weapons checked in and I had my shower and hot meal. I’m unrolling my bed. 169
‘Bed bed, my beautiful bed.’ 170
Charzelle comes in tugging my arm excitedly, 171
speaking really fast Ka,172
“Sheralee Sheralee come us has a surprise for Sheralee.” 173
‘What now?’ 174
Shaking my head, 175
to Sis in Ka, 176
“Not now, Sheralee needs recharge.” 177
Determined girl drags me, 178
to me in Ka, 179
“Sheralee can sleep anytime, come.” 180
‘This better be good bitch.’ 181
To Sis in Ka,182
“Ok ok, stop pulling.” 183
Out of our tree house, we climbed to the West lookout. Charzelle is holding up what looks like a camouflaged bat outfit, 184
to me in Ka, 185
“Us made this for Sheralee, now we can fly together.” 186
‘What is the bitch talking about?’ 187
To me in Ka, 188
“Come on let us fly.” 189
Excited Girl drags me to the edge, 190
to me on Ka, 191
“Us run off here and jumps on that tree.” 192
My tried eyes looks at the tree 30 metres away, looks down at the ground 100metres away. 193
‘No way, I’m going back to bed.’ 194
Starts’ heading back to my calling bed, Girl is pulling my arm, 195
pleading in Ka, “Come on, let us have fun.” 196
‘Go away bitch,’ 197
to Sis in Ka,198
“Not now, tomorrow, Sheralee needs recharging.” 199
Nodding her head,200
to me in Ka, 201
“Tomorrow, Us fly tomorrow?” 202
Nodding my head, 203
‘Whatever bitch.’ 204
I reached my bed and that is where I stayed. 205
Author notes
Joe is a Boofhead
number 6, Action.
Sheralee is my guide through a stroy I have in my head, this part will probably slip in around page 300, all up til Sheralee reaches her destiny about 2000 plus. then we will be in part two. It is really a complex story to write, espeically in communacation. Any suggestions, how to bring these people to life more?
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Comments
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I didn't get this one at all. I'm sorry and please forfive me if I'm being daft here. This was very hard for me to follow. I guess I should look at it again after I've had some coffee.
Good luck in the contest!
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Well, there's some elements that are what was asked for, but are they a part of some organization? If so, what organization? Roo's head? What was the catch phrase? The dialogue is kind of hard to follow, I found myself getting confused a lot. Joe said it's written like a comic strip, is that what you are planning it to be? This is good, but just hard to follow.
Good luck in the contest!

