Monologue # Eight - Try again
Jenny took her seat up the back of the room, unpacking her things, arranging them in a pleasing manner, a smile spread sweetly across her face.
This time she would Handel Madame Lola with respect, even if it killed her.
Even though her dad had not been disappointed she knew he would be if it happened again.
She sat back, watching the hands move on the clock, ticking away untill it rolled on 9:00, the door opened right on time, and Madame Lola walked through , a grin on her face.
"Always so smug " Jenny thought , it pissed her of, smugness and arrogance her major pet hates.
Madame Lola walked to the front of the room, looking at her list , doing her usual head count, as other students made their way into the classroom , taking their seats.
When everyone was seated she sat down at her desk and pulled out a notebook from her draw, she placed it on the desk, smiling again and placed her eyes on Jenny.
"I don't expect we'll have another episode like Sunday Miss Morley" Lola asked , tapping away at her desk as if slightly irritated.
Jenny smiled shaking her head " Oh most certainly not Madame Lola, I wouldn't dream of it".
Madame Lola seemed content, but amused "I'll take that as a no, next time I ask you a question answer without your smart ass tone or you can consider your dream career over, understood".
Jenny nodded, bitter inside.
"Great now we have that saughted , has everyone got a notebook and pen".
Author notes
Hay guys
I wrote this when I was dead tired but inspired
hope it's good though short and sweet
MADAME LOLA IS A BITCH .....
enjoy luv Blair xoxox
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It was good, on to the next one...
DarkOne -
Madame Lola is pretty...rude? haha try to show more of her good side or she'll seem more fictional. And er, I don't think there's such word as saughted, I think you're referring to sorted ^_^
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Your grammar is still getting better, and I think that the dialogue is repetitively good. I also think that the punctuation still needs a bit to it, but that it's still improving. But the question marks seem to never exist in the questions...
Keep up the great work, Blair! -
Hey, you lost me. The last thing I remembered was that Jenny was going to answer the phone, and then here I am back at school, woo my head is spinning!
Slow down Miss Blair, we are not going anywhere. Give your story time to unravel before our eyes.
I do like the tension between Jenny and her teacher, it reminds me of my school days, not that I was a bad kid.
At the end you said,"Great now we have that saughted", Saughted??? Hey, I am the King of Typos but even I couldn't figure this one out, I am thinking you meant to say "started"?
Don't be afraid to make your chapters longer, it is better for your readers if you can give us a little more to chew on.
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It doesn't sound nice with started. sorted??
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LONGER!!! but still good.
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