Monologue # Six - Dad knows

Monologue # Six - Dad knows

Jenny sat at the counter stirring through her cereal, her spoon crushing her now soggy rice puffs.

Mr Morley walked through the kitchen door, stretching his arms, and yawned pulling open the fridge. he grunted pulling out the left over pasta from last nights dinner and grabbed a fork of the rack.

Jenny sighed thinking about Sunday and how she could have just ruined her chances at achieving her goal. Surely her dad would be furious when he found out how she had behaved at her first class, he would be disappointed for sure.

"What's up soldier" Mr Morley asked noticing the state of her cereal, she hated soggy cereal.

Jenny looked up from her bowl, her mum would have filled him in enough last night, it was what they did, told each other everything. "Not much, just some issues I'm sure mum's already filled you In on  already".

He smiled "Ah Madame Lola issues".

Jenny nodded "She's such a stupid women, I mean mum thinks she was just trying to psyche me out, but it was more than that, it was like she was taking a stab at me in the lowest form, I mean Jenny Monologue, I didn't get it ; what the hell do I have to do with a long speech".

Mr Morley swallowed a mouthful of potato and sat back scratching his head. "Well you did write play writing as a top reference for her questionnaire didn't you".

Jenny thought, to think of it she had put play writing as her first preference , shortly followed by short stories and novels, but still why would she use this against her.

Jenny nodded "Yeah I did, but it still doesn't explain why she'd know that it would get to me, I mean why the bitterness or bitchiness, why not just come out and say "Oh your the young girl who wants to be a play writer" instead of this Jenny Monologue bullshit.

He shrugged "Madame Lola is a nasty piece of work, trust me I found that out last night".

Jenny's heart jumped, she dropped her spoon into her cereal, he knew.

Mr Morley watched, feeling the panic seeping through his daughters reaction, she needed reassurance not stress, that's all. "Yes I know about your spat with Madame Lola, trust me I know, she made it pretty clear you started her class with a bang, what I don't understand is how she expected you to react ; what she doesn't seem to realize is that your smart enough to know when someone is taking a hit at you and your the kind that doesn't take bullshit from anyone, really".

Jenny's panic started to slowly to decrease, as she eased into a normal Pace of breathing.

"She's just on an ego trip Jenny, one big massive power trip, and don't worry I'm sure you not the only one she's going to try this with or has already tried this with, so I can't be angry with you, I'm more upset with your choice of words, but I can't honestly say that if I was in your position I wouldn't have exploded at the mouth as well, so I am proud of you for standing up for yourself".

She smiled feeling now at eased and relaxed. So he wasn't mad at her, that felt good, she hated it when her dad was mad, which was rarely ever, but at times when he was it caused him a great deal of stress on his heart, and no one wanted that.

He pated her hand "Just follow your heart and your dreams will come true, it's not easy, it's fucking hard work like I have told you before, but if you stick to it like I know you will and you will be well on your way to become a professional writer, and then you'll forget all about your mother and me cause you'll be all famous and that's when I know my baby has fully bloomed in all her glory".

Jenny laughed "Dad your a real wonder with words I must say".

He laughed " Quiet you, I work with sports, your pretty limited in my Field of work".

Mr Morley looked at his watch, taking in another spoonful of pasta, he swallowed it down and put the lid back on the Tupperware container.

"Speaking on which, if I don't get my but in the shower I'm gonna be later and Henry won't be to happy, I swear that man suffers from severe PMS, bot even your mother is that bad".

He scuffled her hair, throwing the spoon in the sink "Remember don't run, stand tall, running proves nothing but...

Jenny cut in "I know, running proves nothing but failure and false hopes".

He laughed again "Ah, grasshopper you are quick to learn".

"That's because I have great teachers to guide me" Jenny smiled, pushing her chair put. She walked over to the sink, rinsing her bowl clean.

"Oh that reminds me, I have some news to share with you tonight at dinner, I just gotta get it all saughted out first".

Jenny nodded "Alright have a good day, I'll see you tonight".

Author notes

Hay guys this is part six of monologue
main inspiration for this piece was "Monologue and True Romance " but she wants revenge ~ they are songs

With this piece I wanted to introduce the dad ~ finally and give you the last feel for the family before going on with the story...

 

Hope you enjoy Blair ~ 

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  • DarkOneShadow
    October 26, 2007
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    This was way better, though the swearing threw me for a bit... my parents would have washed my mouth with soap (literally) if I even swore in their presence, but the dad and Jenny in this don't mind... it's kinda refreshing but again great way to end the chapter with a tidbit of something else to keep the story going... great job

    DarkOne


  • So Strange Greeters member
    October 12, 2007

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    Hmm...the grammar is surely improving in this story, Blair. I think that I'd give you a B- for grammar and probably a A+ for description and story. I think you're definitely building up a good story with this one.

    Keep up the great work, Blair!


  • punkrockingeek
    October 12, 2007
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    Nice Dad

    Wooh 700 words. The Dad's character is nic, pretty rough on the edges making it a lot more interesting. And Jenny is telling more of her character, very dangerous when disturbed. Very nice, but I'll prefer your chapters to be short and sweet like all the others, cause if it's too long I'll just end up browsing and won't really read it. haha.


  • Mr Typo
    October 12, 2007

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    Nice Imagery

    I felt as if I were sitting right next to Jenny and her dad listening to their morning conversation. I would suggest that you let your characters appear and disappear through out your story and not bring them in one at a time as it makes your story seem punctuated with introductions. But like you said in your notes, the family is now introduced and we can now move on with the story.
    Good work and remember - take your time and check your spelling, punctuation before and within quotations.
    You have an interesting story going so keep it up! (I'm still curious why Jenny is called Jenny Monologue, nice hook, you got me!)


  • ScarsNDepth
    October 12, 2007

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    I love it! Although I thought the dad would be totally different then how he was. The way Jenny described her dad at first made me scared of his character. It was a total surprise. Great Job!

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