Tangled figure half hanging out of the bomb bay, 1
“Hey idiot pass me the wench.” 2
Hand passes the wench, 3
“This is what you want?” 4
“Yeah that. Oh sorr. Shit” 5
“Are you alright Sergeant?” 6
“Yeah, sorry Captain.”7
“Would you like me to take a look at your eye for you?” 8
Grease monkey falls from the bomb bay, 9
“No it is right Sir, what can I do for you?” 10
“I’m just checking on my girl, how is she?” 11
Shaking head, 12
“Not good Sir, she as a hole right through the frame, starboard engine will never turn again, instrument panel needs replacing and her electrical systems are burnt crispy.” 13
Sadness dawns upon the Captain, 14
“So she’ll never fly again?” 15
Shaking head, 16
“I doubt it Sir.”17
“I’ve only got one more sortie before state side, I was hoping Jenny would take me.” 18
“She’s really only fit for scrap Sir, I was removing the release mechanism to put in Ace of Blue.” 19
Affectionate hand caressing his love, 20
“We have been in some tough spots, and each time you’d brought me home, any other plane, I would be dead. You’re my good luck charm, I wish we could have went down together in a blaze of glory. ” 21
“When is your next sortie Sir?”22
“Doc has grounded for a week, some time after then I guess.” 23
Thinking; 24
“Hmm hang on Sir. Hey Idiot. Yeah you, come here.” 25
“Sir this is private Ding, best pair of hands I’ve got.”26
Saluting statue,27
“SIR!”28
“At ease private.” 29
“As I was saying Sir, Ding here is the best I’ve got, if anyone can get this girl in the air by the end of the week, it is him.” 30
Hopeful eyes 31
“You think you can get her flying again private?”32
Shrugs his shoulders, 33
“Don’t know Sir.” 34
Yelling Sargent, 35
“What! I just praised you, and all you can say is I don’t know. I’ll tell you what you know, you know this bird will be air worthy by the end of the week or my boot will be up your arse. Is that clear?” 36
Miracle maker is at attention. 37
“Yes Sarge!” 38
There you go Sir, end of the week Jenny will be ready.” 39
Arse kicking eyes, 40
“Isn’t that right private?” 41
Author notes
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”Joe is a boofhead”
the photograph was taken five days later when Jenny was ready to fly.
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Comments
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This is a very creative story, keeps the reader interested. Very fast paced, and wonderfully depicts the picture
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I love it! This was very a cute story you penned from the picture. What a great imagination you have! This was riveting and vivid and so pleasant to follow along. Great job! Good luck in the contest.
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I really enjoyed this! Very creative way of interpreting the photograph. After I ahd chosen the photo I realized I would probably get a lot of war type stories and I groaned inwardly, war movies are interesting but usually war stories don't captivate my imagination very well, but yours was done in such a way that I easily stayed interested! Bravo!
Quick suggestion, you can do it or not, but perhaps you could make new lines for each line of dialogue? That's usually how dialogue is done, plus it makes it easier for the reader to follow the conversation. Other than that, wonderful!
Good Luck in the contest!!!
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