I open my eyes to see yours on my face.1
Afraid my sleeping mom will hear, you whisper, "I love the way you sleep".2
Puzzled, I decide to save my questions for later, replying, 3
"I love YOU". 4
Those few short inches between us too much to stand any longer, 5
we reach for each other, 6
effectively demolishing any space threatening to come between us.7
Up and down, back and forth we weave our bodies into one.8
Falling in love as we fall together.9
Imploring the deities, "Oh God, yes!" 10
Followed by a quiet chorus of NOs. "Please no, no more, no, no, yes!"11
Spent, we make our way down to reality, 12
listening for any sign that someone could have heard us 13
and finding none, wrap ourselves in the other's arms. 14
One last kiss and we drift to sleep, 15
looking forward to our next midnight rendezvous. 16
What did you think? Please comment!
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wowwwwwwwwwwwwwwww hehehe tasty!
luvvin same sex sex if u no wat i mean x
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this was very good i liked the flow of it keep it up ~candice~
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this is a beautiful poem. I honestly didnt grasp that it was written for a same sex partner untill I read the other comments. I really dont see what all the fuss is about these days...love is love. Certainly our most basic need and a person really cant help whom they choose to love. Even in the Bible king David, who had more women that he knew what to do with, made the comment about his male freind johnathin ,that the love he receieved from him was better than the love of women. Anyway I think the world would be a better place if there was more acceptance and we all just grew up to realize that this is just another way to express love. Your poem is beautiful, God bless, Mary
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This is a story very well written as to even I can relate. When me and first lesbian experience made out for the first time we were so emotional that we had to stop and listen to see if any one could hear us. This was a very nice piece good luck in the contest.
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Wow, I loved this!!! W0000t!
Mmm, it reminds me of my boyfriend, of love, and of course, those exciting, beautiful, sleepy, awake, midnight rendezvous!
Thanks for sharing this. I'm off to read more of your work! -
Beautiful write! I loved how it was simple and erotic without being explicit...and the fact that, without the picture, you probably wouldn't be able to tell it wasn't a straight couple. I think that goes to show that there's not that much of a difference when it comes to love...but yeah, I really liked this piece!
XOXOXO,
Mandy -
hmm interesting. Very classy. Good write!
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ohhh. Spicy! I liked this! The words seem to roll off the tounge as it's read aloud. KEWL!
Awsome write and good luck in contest!
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ohh simplistic erotica/love.very nicley done.good luck in the contest.
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