The Clash of Good & Evil

Heaven could be described as a wonderful place for souls to rest in peace. God's marvelous presents gave light and dreams. The smooth sounds of music playing and shining sparkles of angles floating delighted the mood of happiness. Everybody loved to stay in this environment, except for Lucifer, who was the darkest and evilest creature alive.1

"What will we do?" one of Lucifer's soldier asked. 2

"We strike now," Lucifer smiled. "Let's take control of God's pitiful world." "These people love to live in the dark; they rejected God and it's the perfect time to move in." 3

Little did Lucifer know that God was already one step ahead of him. God planned to protect Earth because the time had not yet arrived for humans to face God's judgment. 4

"Lucifer's actions would bring trouble for Earth and my will to save Earth would be my final decision", said God. "Andrew the angel of light, go down to Hell and stop Lucifer's madness." 5

"Yes, my Lord." 6

Andrew dove down into the clouds and headed for Hell. He arrived at Hell in a flash and just in time to stop Lucifer. 7

"Stop this now, God would be the one to judge, not you", said Andrew. 8

Without saying a word, Lucifer charged at Andrew with full speed and swung at Andrew's head. In a split second, Andrew dodged the attack and snapped Lucifer's arm off. He then went for the helpless Lucifer since he was in no condition to strike. A series of beams shot out of Andrew's palm and brought Lucifer to his knees. 9

“You can not stop me!” Lucifer yelled. "I'm the Ruler of Hell!" 10

Andrew quickly placed his two hands together and beams of light blasted out of his body. The light wiped out all Lucifer’s soldier and turned Hell into dust. Lucifer was frozen solid and could not move a muscle. 11

“My work here is done; this is a great time for Lucifer to calm down and think about his actions." 12

“This is not over, I will crush Heaven with my bare hands”, Lucifer’s thoughts faded into space.13

Andrew the angel returned from Hell. He greeted God and told him the news. 14

"Maybe your actions were too extreme", God said. 15

"I'm only doing what is best for Hell." 16

"Destroying the place was not what I had in mind, have mercy on your enemies." "The world I created is turning darker as we speak; I want you to spread the word of God."17

Andrew nodded and headed for Earth. When he arrived, he disguised as a high school student. He changed his name to Andy and started doing what he was sent to do, but everyone ignored him. Suddenly, a sweet and loving voice appeared from behind the door. 18

"It can't be help, they will never change." 19

"And you are?" Andrew asked.20

"My name is Wendy, nice to meet you."21

Andrew nodded and walked away without saying a word. His first class was Math and angels were not great in Math. Watching and protecting people does not require Math skills. Months went by and Andrew had not accomplished anything. One day during Math class, he overheard two boys talking about drugs. Andrew decided to follow them after school. His cover was blown and he was confronted by the boys.22

"What you want?" one of the boys asked.23

"Heard you want to smoke, so I came to check it out", Andrew answered.24

"What's your name?"25

"Andy."26

The two boys walked closer and closer to Andrew and one boy pulled out a plastic bag from his backpack. He opened it, but it was empty. The boys threw the plastic over Andrew's head and started strangling him with it.27

"I know who you are, Andrew, the Angel of light."28

"Who are you?"29

"Take a good look."30

The two boys started to melt and transformed back into their original form. It was Lucifer and his partner, Beelzebub. Lucifer grabbed Andrew's throat and launched him into the air. While Andrew tried to break free from the bag, Lucifer opened his mouth and released a swarm of poisonous insects.
Andrew ripped the plastic bag off with anger and took a deep breath. He screamed as loud as he could and destroyed the bees with a tremendous amount of air pressure. He quickly flew down and pinned Lucifer to the ground. 31

"You have guts picking a fight with me", Andrew yelled.32

Lucifer slapped Andrew's hand away and aimed for his chest. Lucifer used one finger to poke Andrew's chest three times, then clapped his hands twice. The points lit up and exploded, leaving Andrew on the ground gasping for air.33

"Where's my arm?" "You took it from me when you were in Hell fighting me, Where is the Arm of Chaos?"34

"I knew you would come back to life, so I took your arm when you were frozen." 35

"I want it back!!!"36

"Sorry, you have to kill me in order for that to happen." "I'll see you later."37

Andrew vanished in an instant. Lucifer's anger rose even higher.38

"Damn you, I'll kill you!!!"39

Meanwhile, Andrew teleported back to his apartment and someone was waiting for him to return.40

"Long time no see, angel of light."41

"I thought I told you not to call me that, Gabriel."42

"Sorry, but you should watch what your actions," Gabriel suggested. "Lucifer will hunt you down if you give him back his arm."43

"No way, with this arm, Lucifer is no match for me." "So why are you here, suppose you have a message for me?"44

"Yes, I do. Hell has been rebuilt and Lucifer increased the size of his army."45

"So what? I can take care of them myself."46

"Are you crazy? Lucifer divided his army into two groups: one design to destroy Earth and the other to destroy Heaven."47

Andrew's eyes opened wide. He was shocked to hear to news. 48

"That's all the news, Andrew." "Your job is to save Earth."49

Gabriel flew into the sky. Andrew stared at the ground, thinking about Lucifer's troops. He thought of an idea, he could save the world and make it in time to save Heaven. He flew all around the world telling people to build underground shelters.
Nobody listened, except for Wendy. She followed Andrew's words and tried to build a shelter on her own.50

"Wendy, stop it." "You're taking too long, come with me."51

Wendy followed Andrew to his base. They rested there for the night.52

"Thank you for letting me stay here, Andy."53

"No problem."54

"Say, why you always wearing that hood?"55

"Because I don't want other people to see me."56

"That's too bad, I liked it when your hood is off; it makes you look kinda cute."57

Andrew blushed, and then looked away.58

"Just go to sleep."59

Wendy closed her eyes for a second, but couldn't sleep.60

"Andy, are you asleep?"61

"No, not anymore." "What is it?"62

"We have known each other for a while now and...well..." "What am I to you?"63

"What!?" "Go to sleep, since we don't have time for nonsense."64

Even though he showed anger toward Wendy all the time, he cared for her deeply. Andrew made rules to keep himself focused and on task. The rules were angels don't blush, but most importantly, angels should not fall in love with humans. It's not a bad thing, but it sure does make things complicated.
Andrew woke up early morning to find Wendy missing. It could only be one person, Lucifer. Andrew headed down to hell, hoping Wendy is alright. Hell has changed since the last time Andrew was here. It was pitch black, only the flaming red floor was visible. The place smelled like human blood and corpses. Boiling lava gushed out of the walls and sudden earthquakes gave Hell a good shake.
Then, Hell was gleamed by a clap. Now, everything was visible. Lucifer and Beelzebub stood on top of a platform with Wendy, chained against the wall. First, Beelzebub touched her legs. Then, he slowly moved his fingers up.65

"Stop it now!!!" Andrew screamed.66

"Why? You like her? Am I touching your girl in a hot and sexy way?"67

"Let her go, she has nothing to do with this."68

"Is that so? Well, you dragged her into this! For an angel to have contact with a human for a long time is something you are going to regret." 69

"You want me, not her, so let her go."70

"Fine, but you'll have to fight me, in your HUMAN form!"71

Fighting in his human form was a disavantage to Andrew, but for Wendy's sake, without hesitating, Andrew agreed. As long as Wendy was safe, Andrew would agree to anything Lucifer suggested. Lucifer snapped his fingers and the chains were gone, but so were Wendy and Beelzebub. Both of them moved in to strike. Andrew threw some punches, but Lucifer dodged them. Lucifer returned with a powerful kick, but Andrew blocked it. However, the kick was too strong for Andrew to handle; he was sent flying and crashed into a lava burning wall.
Lucifer took this chance and teleported right in front of Andrew. He grabbed Andrew's head with one hand and launched infinite amount of punches. Lucifer stopped to take a look at his weak opponent. He shook his head and punched Andrew in the face, intended to break his cheek bone and dislocate his jaw.
In a last second move, Andrew ducked his head down a bit to avoid the blow. Andrew tried to throw a punch, but Lucifer saw it from a mile away. He grabbed Andrew's fist and pulled him toward. Then, Lucifer kneed Andrew in the stomach. Blood squirted out from Andrew's mouth and nose.72

"You are worthless and not because you are in your human form, but because you have no motivation. I knew this would happen, so I made you something to boost your fighting abilities. I think you're going to love this."73

Lucifer held out his hand and smoke appeared from the platform. Andrew looked up and witnessed Beelzebub stabbing Wendy in the heart. Andrew was speechless as he used his strength to crawl over to Wendy. He tried to stand up, but he could only stand up halfway.74

"Wendy, I'm sorry."75

"Don't be."76

Wendy's words caught Andrew be surprise. Wendy didn't die yet, but she still had some energy left.77

"Meeting you made me so happy, I had no friends, but you showed me that you cared for me."78

"I'm an angel; I'm suppose to care for you."79

Then, Wendy used up all of her energy to say one last line.80

"Then, I guess I'm in love with an angel."81

Wendy closed her eyes and stopped breathing. Andrew tried everything he could to wake Wendy up.82

"Wendy! No! Wake up! You can't die, come on."83

Andrew started to sob. His tears began falling from his face and purifying Hell's dark surroundings.84

"Wendy, come back. Your not suppose to die, please say something." "Look, I took off my hood, just like you wanted."85

He brought Wendy close to him and hugged her gently, realizing that she was more than just a friend. He faced her and moved closer toward her lips.86

"How sweet, but you make me sick."87

Andrew slowly released Wendy from his arms and puts his hood back on. 88

"You will DIE HERE AND NOW!!!" Andrew yelled.89

He took out a sword from thin air and rushed in Lucifer's direction. Lucifer anticipated his opponent's move, but somehow Andrew got pass Lucifer's guard. With one slash, Andrew sliced one of Lucifer's legs right off.90

"Damn you, angel!"91

Andrew kicked Lucifer three times and finished it with one last power-gathering kick that sent Lucifer flying through walls. After Lucifer had received monstrous damages, he landed on a few razor sharp spikes created from the previous battle. Andrew pulled out Lucifer's Arm of Chaos and slipped his own arm inside.92

"With this arm, I'll destroy you and everything you stand for." 93

Then, Andrew murmured a few words before finishing Lucifer off.94

"This is for Wendy, may her soul rest in peace."95

Andrew shoved the glowing Arm of Chaos into Lucifer's brain. Blood splayed all over the ground. The rigorous angel plugged the arm out and stabbed the mashed brain again to make sure Lucifer was dead. Once Lucifer was dead, his soldiers all turned into ashes, leaving Heaven unharmed. Andrew threw the arm away and flew up to Heaven; he greeted God once more.96

"What I have done was wrong, but I promise that evil will not be seen for a while."97

"You support your own decision and receive your punishment."98

Andrew kept his head down as low as possible.99

"Repent and you'll be forgiven." "There's someone waiting for you." "Maybe you should pay her a visit."100

"Yes, but visiting will be infinite as she's dead and staying in Heaven."101

"Nonsense, she's on Earth waiting."102

Andrew looked up at his Lord and smiled as the Lord smiled. Andrew flew down to Earth as fast as he could. He landed on top of the school, but couldn't find Wendy anywhere. 103

"Looking for me," Wendy said.104

"Wendy, so you are ok."105

"Why wouldn't I be, I just came from your base."106

Andrew was a bit disappointed, since Wendy had forgotten everything she said. 107

"So, Mr. Angel, what am I to you?"108

Andrew smiled and replied back.109

"You are someone I can't live without."110

Andrew held Wendy's hands and kissed her.

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  • This was a good story. The dialouge was a little confusing in some spots, and there were a few minor mistakes, but it was a good story, and the premise of it was understood.

    Good Luck in my Contest!


  • Cupcake14
    January 27

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    Please use a better font color
    You have exceeded my word limit

    evilest-I think it should be most evil


    "Lucifer's actions would bring trouble for Earth and my will to save Earth would be my final decision", said God. "Andrew the angel of light, go down to Hell and stop Lucifer's madness." 5

    "Yes, my Lord." 6

    Andrew dove down into the clouds and headed for Hell. He arrived at Hell in a flash and just in time to stop Lucifer. 0-Err, why doesn't the Lord go himself??

    "Destroying the place was not what I had in mind, have mercy on your enemies." "The world I created is turning darker as we speak; I want you to spread the word of God-Sudden change of topic?

    Beelzebub-Beezlebub..not sure, but check it anyways

    "So what? I can take care of them myself."-Andrew is a bit too violent and arrogant for an angel, don't you think? Well whatevs, i mean he isn't cliched anyways...

    Hell has changed since the last time Andrew was here-Hell had changed since the last time Andrew was there

    Andrew headed down to hell, hoping Wendy is alright-Again, you have to write in past tense

    I am sorry, but this story seemed like some dramatic action movie...

    Best of luck in the contest. I really liked your story, but it didn't really suit me..


  • heartfullofvenom
    November 4, 2007

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    Sweet

    It was a beautiful little story. The beginning was a little off, but after you introduced Wendy then I caught on. Good guy fighting the bad guy... to save the girl. it's a classic. I loved it. I espically loved the line "Then, I guess I'm in love with an angel." I don't know why but that line gave me into a sense of awe. Anyways, fantastic piece of work you've got here. I enjoyed reading it.

    Good luck!


  • DYerMaker16
    November 2, 2007

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    That was very good. sweet, however, for the dialogue it was a little confusing. It was sort of hard to tell who was talking a times, but I worked most of it out. When a person's begins talking, you should make that a new paragraph, or if they are talking continuously then you should put the whole thing in quotation marks.

    For example:
    "Where's my arm?" "You took it from me when you were in Hell fighting me, Where is the Arm of Chaos?"

    "I knew you would come back to life, so I took your arm when you were frozen."

    It was a little confusing who was talking at first. Was it Lucifer who said 'you took it from me when you were in Hell fighting me...' or was it Andrew? If it was Lucifer then take our the quotation marks between 'arm' and 'you.'

    Anyway, besides the grammatical errors (which, besides those there are almost none) the plot was very good Nice to see the human side of a divine creature. Very original and very good detail.

    Good job and thank you for entering!


  • Golden Guardian
    October 31, 2007

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    Nice story. Dialogue was awkward. When one person speaks, you shouldn't put quotes around every sentence. One at the beginning and one at the end will suffice. You also switched between past and present tense when Andrew first appeared in Hell. This is usually frowned upon, as it is confusing to most people.

    This was a good idea for a story. Angels falling in love with humans is an age-old tale, the least of which begun with the Nephilim. I liked your spin to it.

    I would have liked to see some more time spent on characterization. Who is this Andrew? As he is not an angel we have heard of from Biblical scrolls, it would have been good to include some history to his name.

    The action was written decently although some phrases and common actions were repeated too often for my taste. I also found it odd that, while on Earth, Andrew was able to use some of his Angelic power, yet in Hell when he was forced to use his human body, he fought physically. If there is a reason for that, detailing it would be nice.

    The voice in the end, is that the Creator? Clarification is needed.

    Was Wendy really taken to Hell? If so, how is she still alive? Was it her soul they were attacking, or her body?

    Was Hell a physical plane or astral (spiritual)? Andrew was able to access his human body in Hell so it is most likely physical. Is this correct?

    All in all, I enjoyed the read. Keep writing!

    -Lyneun


  • plurangel silver member
    October 20, 2007

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    well i definitely appreciate your writing for spirituality. I've never seen a story done quite like this. Ill give you credit for wrapping me in the first couple of sentences, but i'm sorry it didn't capture me fully enough to read the entire thing. I got confused of who's what, where and when, after I came back to this story. I also noticed some grammar mistakes and misspellings. (like here: All expect for Lucifer, the darkest creature alive.) Expect should be EXCEPT. other than that goodluck in my contest


  • sctb2002 silver member
    October 15, 2007
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    Good Story

    You need some work on sentance structure and grammer...Good Luck

    beginning: 3, language: 3, plot: 3, ending: 3, dialog: 2, characters: 3.


  • Ayesha Raees
    October 14, 2007
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    this story is really very awesome! i loved the begining, it was full of suspense and excitement... the fight was really great, when i was reading it, i felt all the fight go into my head... though i didnt really want any kind of fluff or in other words, romance in any stories, your story was ok... i dont like romance... dont ask me why so you kinda broke a rule... oh well...
    i loved the plot but you need to work on your puncuation and some of your paragraphing system. Add more details in how the person spoke using adverbs (eg. quickly, slowly, sadly etc) it makes the story more realistic and fun to read. Also, try describing the people's feelings and their point of view. I know its difficult to do so but writing a good story needs planning and it is obviously not a walk in the park.
    In the story, Andrew/Andy fell in love with Wendy, but you didnt mention why or how. You didnt mention their feelings but in the end, they just kissed each other... it kinda doesnt fit in.
    but when i said i dont like romantic stories i didnt mean in a way that i have no knowledge of. I used to read romantic stories just like any other teenage girl would do so i know about this stuff. But i like action and fanasty related stories more because they have a good plot and it shows the author's way of imagination.
    please mention the option you chose so i can compare it with this story because i cannot seemed to see which story it is related too...
    kindly tell me the option
    good luck

  • Ayesha Raees
    October 14, 2007

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    this story is really very awesome! i loved the begining, it was full of suspense and excitement... the fight was really great, when i was reading it, i felt all the fight go into my head... though i didnt really want any kind of fluff or in other words, romance in any stories, your story was ok... i dont like romance... dont ask me why so you kinda broke a rule... oh well...
    i loved the plot but you need to work on your puncuation and some of your paragraphing system. Add more details in how the person spoke using adverbs (eg. quickly, slowly, sadly etc) it makes the story more realistic and fun to read. Also, try describing the people's feelings and their point of view. I know its difficult to do so but writing a good story needs planning and it is obviously not a walk in the park.
    In the story, Andrew/Andy fell in love with Wendy, but you didnt mention why or how. You didnt mention their feelings but in the end, they just kissed each other... it kinda doesnt fit in.
    but when i said i dont like romantic stories i didnt mean in a way that i have no knowledge of. I used to read romantic stories just like any other teenage girl would do so i know about this stuff. But i like action and fanasty related stories more because they have a good plot and it shows the author's way of imagination.
    please mention the option you chose so i can compare it with this story because i cannot seemed to see which story it is related too...
    kindly tell me the option
    good luck

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