The Joke

I was in the bathroom and I hear a scream. Then i started to panic and run around every where the scream got loud and it was coming up stairs. I ran to the clatic(atic and closet) and hid there, I was breathing hard and when the screaming stoped I opened the closet and found my sister on the floor with stabb wounds all over her. I cried and got my cell phone to call 911 but my phone had no reception. I carefully went down stairs to see if the killer was in the house i did not see anyone so i grabbed the phone and ran back up stairs to use it. When I pushed "talk" it was blank so I thought it was ok to use but th e number would not dial. I threw the phone on the ground. The phone made a loud "thunk", the killer was on its way up the stairs and I ran back to the room and locked the doors. The killer was laughing and I got more scared.

Killer said,"I got you now"

I was freaking out he got so close to the clatic, then he picked up something on the floor. I heard the killer go down the stairs, I looked out to see what the killer picked up. I was shocked to find out it was my sister's body because he was dragging the item when i heard it. I grabbed the secret knife in my room(I keep in case of emergancys) and quietly walked down stairs and find the killer. When I got down stairs the killer was in dinning room with the body, I crepped closer but the killer took off their mask and it was my MOM. I was so shocked, the killer was my mom and it was HOLLOWEEN NIGHT so all that was a holloween joke and I yelled at my mom saying she killed my sister but my sister was behind me and that was a doll on the table. They said HAPPY HOLLOWEEN to me and I was so mad but my sister had candy so I forgave them and then the lights when out all of a sudden...

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  • Azzy Bear
    November 7, 2007
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    Oh my gawd...omg! :)

    Heh, This kinda freaked me out a bit, trying to figure out if this was a fiction. You almost stabbed your mom! lol
    INteresting at a very weird level, i like it. ha, i'll be reading up more on YOUR stories, this funny in a weird way, whatever. keep up the writing!


  • SageSyren Greeters member
    November 1, 2007

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    Nice twist. Run this through spell check and make sure to capitalize.
    Good luck in the contest and thanks for entering.
    Brooke


  • Asfand
    November 1, 2007

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    I don't know about this. Use proper punctuation, good writing style and recheck spellings. Don't make up words, and put in some detail to make it good.

    Nice attempt. Good luck in the contest!


  • Jennywinnie
    October 13, 2007

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    This is very intense! I like the tension you've got here. Be careful with tense. In the first sentence it should be, "I was in the bathroom and I heard the scream..." or something like that.

    Good Luck in the contest!