Running thief

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Through the blackness she crawls, senses are tuning into to life, listening to every sound, smelling every scent, senses searching for energy.  Stops; life signs a head, large over fifty, moving this way, dogs!  Damn, now where?  Up the cliff, might make it before light. More of them!  They sure want to get it back, they’re not going to have it, I stole it, it is mine.  Now how do I keep it?  Nope crocodile bait.  Hmm I wonder, if I can get behind them the dogs may lose my scent.  Bang!  “Ouch”, I’ve had it but its still mine.    2

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  • SerenityNChains
    September 16, 2004
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    The imagery is great in this write.Takes the reader right to the moment.So visual.Great flow as well.Worded perfectly.

    Thanks so much for entering and best of luck.Blessed be

    ~~Serenity~~

  • Touchof1der
    September 16, 2004
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    Wow! This had some amazing imagery here. Lots of action packed imagery. I'm exhausted just from reading it! Great job! Good luck in the contest.