I gazed at that wretched thing. It was twinkling at me in the dim light of my room. I wrinkled my nose and bit my lip.
A rather cute expression and I knew if anyone had seen it they would have thought it adorable.
I heard slightly techno dance music in the background.
“I came here to make you dance tonight, I don’t care about my guilty pleasure for you…” the singer crooned.
I tore my mind away from the music and again focused on this horrid thing lying in front of me.
“Apple…” I whispered, “A poisoned Apple, a terrible Apple, a miserable Apple.”
I resisted the urge to bring my clenched fist upon the Apple.
Instead I stroked it, running my fingers along the ridges of its keys.
This piece of metal. The only thing that connected me to the world.
To a social scene, to a music scene, to a fashion scene.
All the very core of me.
I’m nothing without it, and everything with it.
I could do naught in the “real” world. I relied on this beautiful machine. He was my life.
My everything!
“I love you,” I whispered, laying my tired head on his keys, his letters, “Even though you just deleted my report. For love is about taking good with the bad. You are my one and only.”
He just beeped in response.
He said to me:
“Your computer will now restart in order to install new updates.”
I sighed contentedly, I knew he loved me.
He was just shy.
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Option Cuatro!!
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FUNNY
That was the funniest thing I read all day. We've all been there, and done that. My favorite part:
"I sighed contentedly, I knew he loved me.
He was just shy."
Ha!! Major kudos.
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damn laughing my butt off, what a nice write you are totally awesome. i like your style and the way you write. good work again
respect
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I loved it! I was reading it and I was laughing hard because I can totally imagine that! I talk to my computer all the time...I wish it would talk back like yours did...
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He said to me:
“Your computer will now restart in order to install new updates.”
I sighed contentedly, I knew he loved me.
He was just shy.
Ah! This is hilarious and oh-so-very-cute! The phrases and fragments of sentences work here. The take on the prompt is very creative, and so much happier than all the other writes.
A few spots could use some grammatical tweaking. If you ever plan on editing, I'll let you know what they are.
The plot twists, the dialogue, the timing, all of it was perfect.
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“I love you,” I whispered, laying my tired head on his keys, his letters, “Even though you just deleted my report."
Hahaha... I love that part. It just strikes a chord, and makes me laugh.
I like this a lot. The way you incorporate the definition of love, a rather serious them, into a mostly humorous piece. And the apple part. I love how you used that, a reference to Snow White, and then turned it into an Apple computer, not an actually apple. Great job.
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