Michael walked through the decorative lobby to the glass doors. KITT waited for him as he opened the door for Michael to hop in; then KITT closed the driver’s door.1
“Where are we going?” KITT asked.2
He gripped the steering wheel. “I want to see Helen; who I had breakfast with this morning.” 3
KITT pulled away from the curb to enter the stream of traffic. The night sky filled with street lamps and taillights. The people were walking to their destinations of entertainment while he wondered if Michael was heading for trouble. 4
“What are you looking for?”5
“Answers, KITT. The woman who is pretending to be Helen has the answers that I need.”6
“Why would she provide a sample of the AP drugs and their antidote too?”7
“I don't know KITT? There are too many questions and no answers.” Michael let out a heavy sigh. “I have this feeling that's she is looking for somebody.”8
“Who?”9
“That's another piece of the puzzle, pal.”10
KITT drove himself down the highway while passing the other cars as he tried not to cut them off. On his monitor, Michael was carefully reading all the information on the real Helen's identity. 11
Michael snapped his fingers. “KITT, what do you know about the aid package?”12
“Why?”13
“Something that Jamie said tonight.”14
“Jamie is very intelligent and has a lot of knowledge about the region in Africa and all the players.” KITT paused. “There’s a terrorist group trying to seize the area.”15
“What’s their name?”16
“The Dark Diamonds they are a small group but growing in power.”17
“Who’s backing them?”18
“Michael, no one knows.”19
He brought his fingers together. “That’s very interesting, KITT.” He placed his fingers near his mouth.20
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Michael drove KITT down the long and narrow highway in the distance was a cabin. The light from the inside made the windows glow. Michael pushed the silent mode button on KITT’s panel as he parked him away from the cabin.21
“Michael, I can't get any readings.”22
“That's strange? What’s the problem?”23
“There must be lead in the area.”24
“I’m still going in, pal.”25
Michael opened the door to step out in the cool night air. The light from the windows guided him to the cabin as he took huge footsteps as he walked away from KITT.26
When he came to the cabin's door; grabbed his little tool kit out of his leather jacket. The door swung open as Helen stood there and Michael stepped back.27
“Michael, please come in,” Helen said as she moved out of his way.28
He slowly walked into the room to see cherry furniture throughout the cabin. In the left hand corner was a huge bed with clothes laying on it. On the cherry dresser were several different types of women's wigs.29
Helen played with her long hair. “I live out here and my office is in the other room.” She pointed to another door near the bed.30
He stared at her. “I thought that you lived in the city.” 31
Her eyebrow went up. “Why are you being so mean? This morning you wanted me, what has changed?”32
Michael raised his hand and pointed his finger at her. “It is amazing what can happen in an afternoon.”33
“Look!” She placed her hands on her hips. “You're in my home, and I won't be disrespected!”34
“All I have are more questions than answers!”35
“Fine, just take a deep breath while I fix us some drinks.” She smiled and waved to him to follow her.36
Michael and Helen walked over to the breakfast counter that overlapped with the kitchen. He pulled out a stool to sit down on it as he watched Helen go to the sink. There she reached for two wine glasses and next filled them with ice water from the pitcher. Helen returned with two glasses of water as she put them on the counter.37
He glared at her. “Why did you set me up?”38
“Did I?” She picked up her glass of water to take a sip.39
“Quit playing games with me.”40
She placed her glass down on the counter; slowly walked to him. “I'm not playing a game.” 41
Michael grabbed her wrist, and then she stopped. “What do you want from me?”42
“To see how much different you are from Garthe?”43
Michael tried to stop her other arm from coming at his neck. Instantly he felt a stinging pain from his neck. “Why?” he mumbled.44
“To play my little game,” Helen said as she watched his eyes close.45
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Michael woke up, found his hands handcuffed behind the steel chair. Standing there beside him was a young woman who wore a nurse uniform. She turned around to lean up against the counter while she dried the last dish. 46
He moved his head around. “Where am I?”47
“In my boss’s kitchen,” she said while she smiled at him.48
“Who are you?”49
“Amy.” She placed the last dish on the counter. “He’s awake now.”50
Michael watched a beautiful hair red head woman enter the kitchen. She jumped up on the counter to sit. Then she grabbed her glass of water while Amy left them.51
“You’re awake, I see.” She took a sip. “I’ve heard so many lovely rumors about you and your brother Garthe.”52
Michael stared at her. “I'm nothing like him.” 53
“Too bad, he was fun.” She took another sip. “I know that Garthe isn't your brother. One day you pop up about three years ago, since then you have been on the scene.” She crossed her legs in her skintight blue jeans. “What I want to know is where she is?”54
“Who?” Michael asked as his eyebrow went up.55
She put her glass down on the counter and slid off as she walked over to Michael. “Tigress.” She hissed at him. “I smell her scent on you.” She walked around him to place her hands on his shoulders as he tensed up. “Good, you fear me because of my power.” She whispered into his ear.56
“I don't know what you are talking about.”57
She took her hands off from his shoulders and walked in front of him. “She has that way with men.” She placed her hand on his cheek. “I know that you have been around her.” She gazed into his eyes.58
“Who are you?” Michael asked as he looked angrily at her. “You're not Helen.”59
“Right.” She hissed. “I'm Claw, and I'm going to be your worst nightmare!” She pushed another needle into his neck.60
Michael’s eyes rolled around as sweat dripped down his back. “What do you want from me?”61
“Where is she?” She grabbed his chin to turn his head, so she could stare into his eyes.62
“I don't know,” he mumbled as he passed out.63
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Michael started to move in the chair as his hands still cuffed behind him. The sunlight hit him in his face; he rolled his head around to wake up.64
“Michael? Come in, please?”65
“KITT?” he asked.66
“I'm here. I've been trying to contact you.”67
“KITT, pop these handcuffs!”68
Click! Michael moved his arms as the handcuffs fell on the floor.69
He brought his com-link near his mouth. “Where did Claw and Miss Amy go?”70
“They left an hour ago and took a man who was on a stretcher. They have wiped the cabin clean too.”71
“Can we track them down?”72
“No, I’m afraid they are using some type a device to block my scanners.”73
Michael walked out of the cabin into the morning light. KITT drove up to meet him; he opened his door for Michael. He sat down in the driver’s seat, once his legs were inside, and Michael closed the door.74
“Where are we going?” asked KITT.75
“Going to meet Devon,” Michael said as he gripped the steering wheel.76
KITT drove back to the main highway.77
Author notes
Base on the tv show Knight Rider
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Comments
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Your work as usual is very easy to read. The plot moves along quickly and clearly
Poor Michael, he got himself in a double jam this time.
I was surprised that neither of these violent women did anything really nasty to him
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First Helen (or her copy) then Claw just poked a needle in his neck and he goes to sleep. Claw was a little rougher, but I expected much more
Your work as usual is very easy to read. The plot moves along quickly and clearly something like a TV script
. And I must admit with the amount and quality of dialogue, it would convert easily to a script.
On this chapter I might make a suggestion, you need either a connecting paragraph or some kind of break between the time Michael is rendered unconscious by Helen and regains his senses with Amy.
A few sentences you might look at:
KITT pulled away from the curb to enter the stream of traffic. The night sky filled with street lamps and taillights. The people were walking to their destinations of entertainment while he wondered if Michael was heading for trouble. 4 (This is in KITT’s pov—who is a car—smart but still a car)
“Why would she provide a sample of the AP drugs and their antidote too?”7(“Why, would she provide a sample of the AP drugs and their antidote too?”
7 or (Why? Would she provide a sample of the AP drugs and their antidote too?”7)
. Michael pushed the silent mode button on KITT’s panel as he parked him away from the cabin.21 (So how can he talk?)
When he came to the cabin's door; grabbed his little tool kit out of his leather jacket. (When he came to the cabin's door; (he) grabbed his little tool kit out of his leather jacket. Or He came to the cabin's door and grabbed his little tool kit out of his leather jacket.
Enjoyed the read
Geri



