Monologue # Two- First day lecture
Sunday august 12
"Did you prepare your equipment Jennifer" Mrs Morley asked over her morning coffee".
Jenny rolled her eyes, clutching her bag tightly "Mum knowing me for how many years now of my life, don't you think you could answer that question yourself without my help".
Smiling Mrs Morley sipped on her coffee "Well yes in fact I am sure I could, but I was just checking you know , isn't that what normal mothers do, make sure their kids are all safe and prepared for their first days of school and all".
"Well firstly mum it's collage, not prep school, secondly... yes normal mothers prepare their children , I believe by over smothering them with affection and or overstocking their supplies with unnecessary equipment and three I just know deep down inside your wishing I'd pat you back and tell you your normal but mum that would be a lie and I'm sorry but you already know my policy on lies and liars".
Mrs Morley chuckled away "Wow how did I ever raise such a honest , downright brutally honest daughter, you know you get that from your father, he can never tell a lie, he wouldn't be able to tell a lie to save his life, now sometimes that can be a good thing, but wen it comes time that you need him to lie, even just to spare emotions, now thats a turn off".
Jenny stood up, picking her notebook up of the table "Okay, ah I get the slight disturbing feeling that inside that little lecture their was some hidden message and well to me it was a little to much information for me to handle at this time of the morning, or in fact ever".
Mrs Morley smiled "Have a good day Jenny"
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Hay guys Well this is my two of monologue ... It introduces her mother and her first day before school..
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Wow, this was good...short again, but I can live with that... I like brutally honest people, they are sometimes a breath of fresh air, in a whirlwind full of white liars... I look to those people who tell me what really is up... thanks for sharing...
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well done...errors though...but that's not why I'm here is it? good plot...I want to know more though...make some of these excerpts much longer than a few hundred words.
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I love it!!! Jenny really does sound like aa normal "teenage" girl and its funny because in this she's talking to her mother about NOT being normal.
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Hmm.
You have changed your narration to third person. A monologue is usually a long dramatic speech by a single character.
You have many typos in this part.
This is an interesting introduction to her mother and their relationship. What kind of institute was Jenny in, in part one?
Andy
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This was really good and I kind of agree with Relaxing Hatred, cause this was really good and you're beginning to go into the story well.
I also thought the character was being developed well in this part, too.
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I like these bits of writing..but i dont see quite how they all connect...its almost like you need some closure. they are piecey. Other wise great writing =]
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I thought this was really good and I think that you're definitely getting to where you are diving deep into this story. I also think that the characters are very deep and I think the wording and descriptions are very well done, as well.
Keep up the great work, Blair! -
sounds like a good story. write on
so'z i can read.. lol
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