Monologue # one - Jenny
Monday August 13, unlucky 13, one and three not my numbers, my number 31, not even close add the numbers together and you get four, four was a better number.
It was 4:00 when I first sat down at my desk, paper scattered everywhere, last nights contents of a salad spread across my chair. I had been wild with anger, I didn't know what else to do besides throw something into the air and hope to God that maybe when it landed all my problems would just go away.
How stupid of me, how presumptuous of me to even think that they gave a damn. To them I was an institute patient waiting like a time bomb, a time bomb ready to blast my fucking face of. I had to show them I was not what they thought. I had my on dreams, they were the same as theirs and it was as if mine weren't valid, as if somehow I was not good enough to sit in their league, Like a scholarship or a degree or anything would prove I was, but no I had neither.
I had been refereed to as Jenny monologue, Jenny plain old predictable Jenny, from the outskirts of town, but they never knew me, they didn'y know that I lived in a town, or that my mother was an editor, or that I was brought up in this world, the world of literature, of creative expression, of correct grammar and punctuation, of freedom. They didn't know I had no other dreams, but to write, they wouldn't know that if I stoped writing, I would die and that what they certainly didn't know was I was only seventeen.
to be continued ....
Author notes
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This was the first piece to the story- still in Jenny's perspective just to get a look into her thoughts. I didn't introduce any other characters Just mentioned them, as they... Also the term Monologue plays a big part in the story and so far as you can see we can establish that Jenny doesn't take to kindly to criticism, in fact she described herself as an institute patient, but really she is furious and trying to justify her anger to the reader.
I hope you enjoyed # part one - Jenny {Monologue )
xox Blair xox
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This was good, while I expected more for the first chapter, sometimes showing this is better because it doesn't overwhelm the reader and the writer...good job...
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I did enjoy it
and I reckon I'm going to enjoy no.2,no.3 etc etc hehehe 
Couple of spelling errors, but otherwise a storyline I want more of
beginning: 3, language: 3, plot: 3, ending: 3, dialog: 2, characters: 3.
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Intriguing
I like the way the first paragrah ended and the start of the second paragraph tied into it.
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*hurries to read the other chapters*
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cool
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'face of' should be 'face off'. 'my on dreams' should be 'my own dreams'. "I had been (refereed) referred to as Jenny monologue." This statement is unclear to me.
There is a lot of yourself in this character, I think. Determined to succeed as a writer no matter the odds and that is probably just what it takes.
Andy
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"refereed to as Jenny monologue" - The way you put this, it sounds like her last name. Like, "Hello, I'm Robert Smith." "Ah, hello. I'm Jenny Monologue."
There were several grammar errors in this, but you could probably get them fixed with a good reread.
Nice characterization of Jenny. She seems bitter, and a bit TOO persecuted. I like that. It's an interesting character flaw.
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I think this was really well written and I think you have a good talent for describing things and such. I think that all authors need to express their true opinions and I think you have a good story going on here, Blair.
Keep up the great work, Blair, and don't ever stop writing! Cause I think the subject has called you in to do it all the time!
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this is really good. made me wanna read more. gud work xo
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I like it..
Very nice to read, and the way it flows together is superb.
I will read ON!beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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