“The end of the beginning,” he solemnly stated on that windy, autumn evening. The end to what beginning, might I ask? Was there a beginning in this relationship? I wasn’t aware that there was. Wait, is this even considered a relationship? What is it that defines us as being “related” into a “relationship”? I see nothing. We don’t sleep together, for one. We’ve never actually said “we’re together” to each other or anyone else and the only thing even remotely “together” that we’ve ever done is kiss & hold each other.1
To you, my dear, is that being together? Why? I thought when this began, we discussed these issues. Are you telling me you couldn’t handle being “just friends”? Are you telling me that you want more? I knew it- [all along] you are just a guy. A guy so self-involved that when even making a commitment, not the relationship kind, you find yourself stuck in the relationship kind and it’s all your fault. Yes, it is all your fault. Don’t try to guilt trip me because it won’t work. I’ve been there, I’ve done that-remember? 2
You see on that sunny, humid summer afternoon when we kissed for the first time, we had both been hurt. Not again did we wish to be tied to such commitments- which is why we chose each other. We laughed, we cried, we spilled our hearts out. I loved you. As a friend. I thought I could never have a better friend. Ever. 3
You, on the other hand, got attached. Yes, I cared for you. Yes, I was emotionally attached. But not in a relationship way. Even if I wanted to, I wouldn’t have let myself and you knew that. I do love you, don’t you understand? That is why I’m doing this. 4
I cannot speak to you ever again. I fear if we should cross paths once more, if our words should collide, we will end up hating each other forever and I cannot have that. I just can’t. I want to remember you like this forever. I want you to remember me like this forever. Baby… please.5
Take this rose and let it die. Then burn it. Tear my pictures to shreds. Please. Stomp all over the love that you think you have, I’m asking only this. I love you. So much. Now please… just go.6
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Wow, this actually may make me cry...It's written in a very mature manner, and makes a lot of sense. You have a wonderful voice for stories, and this felt kind of like a letter, and that works even better because it show's the feelings on one side of the relationship. I enjoyed reading what the narrator thought, and the explanation of why they couldn't be together. This was a wonderful write, and even your grammar and spelling are wonderful. A plus.
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i liked your story. it was really great to see a story that was more the guy getting attached when it is usually the female in the relationship who becomes "too attached"
beginning: 4, language: 2, plot: 3, ending: 4, dialog: 4, characters: 3.
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I did like this, an original spin to the whole 'it's not you, it's me' cliche. If that makes sense. I do know what it's like to feel that way. Your character is deep, in a good way. I can understad; you can love someone in more than one way. As a brother/sister, friend, 'relationship'. Very realistic. Good job.
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I can't stand the "It's not you, it's me thing." lol
On a quick grammar note, it may be better to remove a few of the semi-colons throughout the stoary as it can get tiring after a while.
And now, for the actual story content. I found this, though wonderfully emotional in its own right, not affecting ME emotionaly. I'm sorry, I enjoyed it, but when I came to the end of the story I was still just sitting there. Now however, as shown by the two statements below, it may not be you, it may be me (pun intended).
I guess what I'm trying to get at is that I actually want to *feel* that I'm actually there. A close observer, for instance. Though, this is more of a letter than a story.
I'm sorry, I'm rambling too much and will now shut-up. G0od luck in future endeavors!
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I think I'm going to cry - this is the ultimate "it's not you, it's me" speech, but so much more than that.
Is there some level of truth in this - it is wonderfully emotional!
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