Fate, you bitch, you whore!
How can you take away my dreams?
So easily you swoop down, plucking life and destroying worlds.
Do you care what damage you leave behind?
Does your callous heart even beat anymore?
I’ve let you lead me down paths of horror,
Only to watch you grab your foul belly and laugh.
“Come this way, your destiny awaits,” you whisper in my ear.
Blindly I follow you, as you knew I would.
What a trap you’ve set for me this time!
True love so close I can taste it.
Yet, just far enough away, it tears me up inside.
Every step I take forward, you throw me three steps back.
Does it feel good when you see me cry?
Do you have joy when I’m dying inside?
Who gave you the right….who said you were allowed,
To walk in and offer me everything?
Yet, never let me get my hands on the prize.
Blocking my every turn, breaking my heart again,
And you sit idly by, Queen of your domain.
Ah, my choices are so black and white, easily muddled to gray.
Stay and drag us both through sorrow after sorrow,
Or leave and watch my heart wither and die.
You’re a temptress with the bite of a black widow, Fate!
But I won’t play my part in your damn game anymore.
I won’t let you use me to destroy our love.
Author notes
I had this poem up a while back but took it down for reasons I don't even remember now. Anyways...ya
In a list
A contest entry
- Quicky heaven by plurangel.
600 points, ended October 23, 2007, 17 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - Amazing Poetry Contest(ENTER) by Melissa Loves Jeffy.
225 points, ended November 19, 2007, 15 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think...
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This is a great poem. It contains so much emotion. In love we always see blindly which you have expressed here. They always expect us to follow when they should.I will remember this poem when taking in finnalist. Good luck in the contest. I think you stand a good chanse of winning.
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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This is a good poem, but kind of surprising seeing that you're cusing fate in it. I still think that it's really good and flowed well, though, whether or not you cussed fate or not.
Keep up the great work, Keli! I think that you have one hell of a talent for stories and poems. I look forward to reading more sooner rather than later, as well. -
wow short but not short of phenomena. great work. you actually reminded me of someone i used to date with this poem. he was pretty much like fate, played with my heart and whispered sweet things and then ripped my heart out. anyways goodluck in my contest
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powerfull ...... loved it loved it loved it !!!!!
blair xoxox
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this is a great very angery poem. and i love ur profile picture. good job and keep writing
♠Punk
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I like the emotion behind this. That's what it takes to write good poetry, emotion. You pulled me in immediately. Nicely done.
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Amazingly well written!
This was devastatingly heartbreaking. I could feel the emotions dripping through every word.
I couldn't have put this into words as well as you did. It's definitely one of your best works keli!
I read it twice... i'm in love with it!
*goes to read again*
Keep writing!
Yrs.
Azaradelle.
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I love this~!
very excellent job esp. when the reader can connect as well
beginning: 3, language: 5, plot: 2, ending: 5, dialog: 1, characters: 2.
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First time I've read it. It's a lot better than most of the other free verse poetry on the site. This is fantastic. You need to write only when you're angry and full of angst.
JJ
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Everytime I read this the power of your words comes through. The emotions are well expressed and I think a lot of people can identify with it. I know I can. Thanks for putting this back up, I'm glad I got another chance to read it. Amazing as always.
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