A Good Night for Hunting

The man sat at his desk glancing around nervously. Fidgeting with his thumbs and sweating, he was quite the sight. Normally in his office, Mr Baker was the confident one: even a bit arrogant. But at the moment he felt way out of his depth – like he was in a place he wasn’t meant to be.

Well, normally he wouldn’t be in his office at this time of night. He glanced though the glass of his window at the streets below: the sky was dark, but the city lampposts and the lights of the buildings and shop signs lit up the roads.

He checked his watch – a nice expensive one too – stainless steel; digital, completely waterproof. It was slightly feminine on the back however, as it was engraved with a small picture of a ballerina. It was a gift from his grandmother before she croaked. He didn’t wear it for the sentimental value – it just looked like it cost a fortune.

The numbers read 22:27pm. Great.

She said she’d be there at 10:30 that night. She was usually on time – usually – unless she went out hunting… Mr Baker shivered at the thought.

“Haven’t caught a cold have we?” A voice penetrated the silence.

The man whipped round and stood up hurriedly.

“Jesus Raya! You scared the shit outta me!” He exclaimed.

Before him stood a slender young woman, smirking at him as she took a step out of the shadows. She had pale skin and dark hair nearing black. Her eyes were like steel. She had a black collarless cape around her shoulders – complete with matching pants and knee-high boots. That was teamed with a striking red top.

“That’s the reaction we tend to get,” she said, sitting down on the small couch opposite Baker’s desk.

Regaining himself, he went back behind his desk to retrieve his chair, which had gone flying backwards as he jumped up. It had nearly crashed into the bookcase. He pulled it back to the desk and sat down.

“Why did you send for me Charles? This is prime hunting time.” Raya asked coolly, licking her lips slightly.

“I-Is it now?” He didn’t want to think about it. “…erm, sorry.”

Raya waved it off. “Get on with it then – you may as well make it quick.” She prompted, resting one leg over the other.

Charles nodded and tried to put on a more professional tone.

“We; the um, Company here that is,” he began, “would like to propose a-a meeting with…” he swallowed. “With you and two, others…” He couldn’t say it. Raya understood it perfectly however. She raised an eyebrow.

“Indeed?”

Charles barely blinked, and then suddenly she was beside him, staring straight into his eyes. He twitched slightly, but somehow he couldn’t look away. Her eyes were like liquefied metal – two swirling pools of it – and he had a strange sensation while under their penetrating gaze: like he was drowning in them. Finally she broke it off and he looked at the floor and nodded a reply. Raya seemed content enough.

“And why would you and the um, Company want to seek an audience with any of us?” She inquired, walking slowly around the room. Charles swivelled around in his chair to follow her.

“My superior – the chairman – he asked specifically for you – a total of three. He asked that the other two representatives preferably were respected by… your type.”

He trailed off as Raya turned around and stared at him again.

“And does your superior have a specific time in mind?” She asked scathingly.

Charles thought about it for a second. “Actually…” he tried to find some inoffensive terms to put it in. “He was thinking that… I, would be the one to…make a, suitable time…” Raya was frowning even before he finished. He regretted saying it now – he knew she and others of her kind didn’t like being ordered around.

Finally her cold expression lightened a bit.

“Very well.” She said. “I’ll see what I can do.”

Suddenly she was at the window, which had come open even without her touch. The curtains were flapping about in the breeze – so was Raya’s dark hair.

“Oh and Charles,” she added, stepping onto the window ledge with one heel.

Charles nodded at her to go on, wiping his brow inconspicuously.

“If this is a double-cross…”

Raya appeared behind him and swung his chair around. He squeaked.

Raya grinned at him, revealing her sharp looking canines on either side of her mouth. “…you will find it very…unpleasant, to be you.” She finished; the threat obvious.

She walked back to the window; Mr Baker gulped quietly. Raya hoisted herself effortlessly up and hung out the window, still grinning. Her teeth were nearly glowing in the moonlight.

“Good night for hunting tonight.”

With those last words, she jumped elegantly backwards, and was gone.

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  • Kagamine Rin
    July 31

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    A strange, but good vampire story. The dialogue was powerful.

    ~Rin


  • XxXDreamWeaverXxX
    December 16, 2008

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    This was a great story, it got me very, very interested in the story!!! And i only spotted two mistakes "“Jesus Raya! You scared the *bunny* outta me!” He exclaimed." It would've been better if it was "Jesus, Raya!" A coma there would have made t easyer to read, and here is the second one “Good night for hunting tonight.” Just a sudjestion to change it to "It's a good night for hunting tonight, isn't it?" But don't let them get you down, because the story was great, and even with thoses errors it was still a well flowing story! Well done!

    ~Cat


  • Nishlaverz
    August 7, 2008

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    Thanks for the comment for trust your enemy. It is great to get feed back from another avid fan. Even though I have all the episodes on DVD and have watched them all countless times I have found it hard to keep some of the characters real.

    At the time of the story Sam has just taken charge of SG-1 and her relationship with Pete is not what it was so she will have changed a bit from the early Sam.

    I would love a little help getting it right though and wold appreciate a little help from a fellow fan of the show

    PS I'll have a read through what you have o the site and do some reviews i the near future.

    Thanks again for the input. What you have said is not mean it shows you to be a true fan of the show not a nerd

  • TuesdaysChild
    January 3, 2008
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    I like the first three paragraphs they quickly sum up what kind of person he is


  • Friesian
    December 10, 2007

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    COOL!

    I LOVED the dynamic dialogue!!! It was very well written and I liked the characters! They seem very realistic!


  • Ayesha Raees
    November 20, 2007

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    cool!
    and scary too!
    very scary!
    i like it a lot...
    and esp. the part was Mr. Baker was shivering like hell!
    good story!
    i like it a lot!

  • lenana2793
    October 11, 2007
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    you should so write more i loved this story


  • Mallig
    October 7, 2007

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    Really good, and interesting! Loved the contrast between Raya's coolness and Baker's nervousness. Loved the line "Her eyes were like liquefied metal – two swirling pools of it – and he had a strange sensation while under their penetrating gaze: like he was drowning in them" Can't wait to read more, and find out what the corporation is, and what the job is!


  • Lostskins
    October 7, 2007

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    Great desscription, could really picture the whole scene. He really wrote Mr bakers nerves very well! Brilliant!

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