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The park was cold and dark. It was a friday night and the shimmering moon was full. "Stood up again!" That’s why I was here. That’s why I was walking and that’s when I saw her strolling towards me with a heavenly grace. Her long black hair and her glowing green eyes where hypnotic. Silently she crept up to me to purr sweet temptation as she rubbed my leg. I could feel her hunger as she licked her lips. My mind raced as I ran my fingers through her silky hair and I thought great another seven years bad luck. 2
Author notes
Is this a poem about:
A: A seductive woman of the night
B: A very lony man and his cat
C: Neather
D: Either
(okay that was fun, thanks for the contest )
What did you think? Please comment!
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Hey thanks then for comeing back t this. Yeah I wanted to write a story that could go eather way, I really had fun with this. Thanks for the great comment.
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I could have sworn I commented on this one already.
I must say I like this piece even more now that I have read it a second time. At first I thought that this female seducteress was going to be a vampire, and I was pleseantly surpised by your ending. Your descriptions set the mood perfectly, and your last line added a fantastic kick.
Oh and my answer would be B.
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you never cease to amaze and amuse me, awesome job with this, best of luck love!
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i love the imagery of standing in the park was perfection... i even felt chilly while reading... great job, nice twist on the end... though not quite sure what my conclusion was - good luck in the contest
billy
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I am going for the black cat idea.....
They are a rather seductive species..
You never know when one will cross your path and who says it has to be bad luck?
Susan -
good
Very well done. My personal choice would be satisfying one's seven year itch.
A good read.
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Hmmm... A great twisted tale here. It certainly leaves the reader wondering, which is always a good sign. Very creative and imaginative writing here! I like it! Good luck in the contest! You sure met the challenge with a delightful write.
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ENJOYABLE READ
This was terrific, the ending wasn't what I was expecting. You do have a thing for green eyes, you seem to pick that color in alot of your poems and stories. Take care, Sandy WONDERFUL STORY -
That's a good twist, interesting choice of words in the lead up.
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great write.I loved the way it leads one way then another...yet leaves you guessing a bit.Talented write by an obviously talented writer.Best of luck in the contest and thanks for entering.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
OhhhhhI would guess B
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