In The Forest

IN THE FOREST

The forest greenery is waning
Fall browns, oranges and reds are becoming
Predominant

Cooler breeze sends leaves in a colourful
Whirlwind
Camouflaged among the ancient trees are
“secrets”

Haunting winds whistle their stories
Owls blink and squirrels chatter as shadows
Scurry

Stars twinkle in the velvet night sky
New Moon to Dazzling Full Moon enlightens
The sky

Sequence of Lunar Phases often occur nightly
Trees grow in “shaped” formations deep
In the woodland

Breezes carry soft chants, if you are Aware
Secret lore taught by the Ancients to the
Aware

In The Forest ©Lady Dragonwyck

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  • Gary Alexander silver member
    October 5, 2007

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    Original...Unique

    I have never seen (lol!), and somehow question a word such as "predominate" in a poem...particularly right off...up top! It sets such a harsh, UNpoetic tone. Is this what you want?; such an awkward, ungraceful sound? It seems so incongruous.... Further, you should be consistent in numbers (singulars and plurals); these seem to be mixed up and a bit odd to the reader! Some of the sentences seem to lack punctuation...making it a bit confusing. BUT...some very poetic feeling and nice phrases/words. Reminiscient of Haiku. Over all...I think...very nice, original effort!