I wake to find myself around machines beeping non stop who am I?
Why am i here? In the distance I hear voices I can't really hear what they are saying. I blink a few more times theres a light above me flickering on and off, I have no clue what this place is but it sure isn't a hospital.
"Miss? im glad your awake, you have a long day ahead of you" I hear I voice say as it got closer each word i could not see them but then again I couldn't see much at all.
"Who are you?! and what am I doing here?!"
"Well im Dr.Melisa,and your here because a young man brought you here"
"What is this place?"
"That is for me to know and for you to find out,now open wide and take these pills they'll make you all better"
I did as she said I didn't have much choice how was I to know if it was ok To take them or not. I could barely keep my eye's open yet alone think about that, I swallowed hoping that she hadn't lied to me. The walls began to close in around me I had to get out but how? was there away out, I stumbled to my feet and tryed to walk in a straight line I couldn't but i made it to the door. I looked down the hall ways filled with people this was my chance! I had to disappear I had to find away out.
"She's trying to get away! GET HER!" I heard voice's scream.
I ran and ran and ran for what seemed like forever no exit?? I saw hundreds of people just like me hooked up to a machine what had we done to end up here? What was our destiny after all this? I stopped running I gave up and just sat I didn't know why or who I was but I knew I had to figure it out.
"Miss! you must go back to your room your not allowed out here"
"Why am I here? why am I not allowed? why?! WHY?!" I couldn't help but yell i couldn't handle this i had no idea who I was or what I was doing here.
I walked back to my room they never answered my questioned I knew they wouldn't, but I could atleast see now and i wasn't as dizzy. I looked around my room pale gray wall's and ceiling nothing unusual there that flickering light got annoying but they said it was there for a reason.
Slowly I began to wonder if I had a husband and kids or anything like that. I had no idea and I was tottally confused there was no way out, was I dreaming? was this real?
"Miss, come with me"
Why do they keep calling me miss? Don't they know my name? I wasn't sure but I went with the lady and she took me to a room it had a chair and a television. She told me to sit and wait so I did after about 5 minutes the tv flicked on.
"Hello amy"
Amy? is that my name? I began to wonder.
"Yes your probably wondering why your stuck here, its because your past is nothing worth living now you lost everything your 2 daughters and your husband you went insane they brought you here your mother and father they want you here forever and this is where you will stay till your last breathing day"
The tv shut off and the lights in the room flickered back on. I was so confused was I ment to stay here forever? or was it all a dream? was this a joke?
I do not know...
Why am i here? In the distance I hear voices I can't really hear what they are saying. I blink a few more times theres a light above me flickering on and off, I have no clue what this place is but it sure isn't a hospital.
"Miss? im glad your awake, you have a long day ahead of you" I hear I voice say as it got closer each word i could not see them but then again I couldn't see much at all.
"Who are you?! and what am I doing here?!"
"Well im Dr.Melisa,and your here because a young man brought you here"
"What is this place?"
"That is for me to know and for you to find out,now open wide and take these pills they'll make you all better"
I did as she said I didn't have much choice how was I to know if it was ok To take them or not. I could barely keep my eye's open yet alone think about that, I swallowed hoping that she hadn't lied to me. The walls began to close in around me I had to get out but how? was there away out, I stumbled to my feet and tryed to walk in a straight line I couldn't but i made it to the door. I looked down the hall ways filled with people this was my chance! I had to disappear I had to find away out.
"She's trying to get away! GET HER!" I heard voice's scream.
I ran and ran and ran for what seemed like forever no exit?? I saw hundreds of people just like me hooked up to a machine what had we done to end up here? What was our destiny after all this? I stopped running I gave up and just sat I didn't know why or who I was but I knew I had to figure it out.
"Miss! you must go back to your room your not allowed out here"
"Why am I here? why am I not allowed? why?! WHY?!" I couldn't help but yell i couldn't handle this i had no idea who I was or what I was doing here.
I walked back to my room they never answered my questioned I knew they wouldn't, but I could atleast see now and i wasn't as dizzy. I looked around my room pale gray wall's and ceiling nothing unusual there that flickering light got annoying but they said it was there for a reason.
Slowly I began to wonder if I had a husband and kids or anything like that. I had no idea and I was tottally confused there was no way out, was I dreaming? was this real?
"Miss, come with me"
Why do they keep calling me miss? Don't they know my name? I wasn't sure but I went with the lady and she took me to a room it had a chair and a television. She told me to sit and wait so I did after about 5 minutes the tv flicked on.
"Hello amy"
Amy? is that my name? I began to wonder.
"Yes your probably wondering why your stuck here, its because your past is nothing worth living now you lost everything your 2 daughters and your husband you went insane they brought you here your mother and father they want you here forever and this is where you will stay till your last breathing day"
The tv shut off and the lights in the room flickered back on. I was so confused was I ment to stay here forever? or was it all a dream? was this a joke?
I do not know...
Author notes
Im not sure where this was going it just came out!
There is a background story to this it took me awhile to think up but i decided to leave it so you guys can figure out what happened to her husband and 2 daughters and where is she? It leaves the story open to whatever you want to think it is. :]
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Comments
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Cool story, you definitely left it open for numerous ending to come into play. Good work but I do agree with capitalising 'i' and watching your punctuation as well.


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Not a bad story. Watch your runon sentences and remember to capitalize your I's.
Good luck in the contest and thanks for entering.
Brooke
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Wow what a really awesome idea! This is totally scarey and totally orignal idea. I'd be careful about the tense, I think you start out with present tense and then shift into past later.
Great Job! and Good Luck -
Dramatic.
This is an odd story. It appears that she is in some kind of asylum. You have many run-on sentences which could be made into two or more sentences and/or punctuation errors. You should really capitalize 'I'. It makes reading easier. This is a good story. It left me wanting more.
Thanks for entering the October New Member Contest.
Andy





