I Remember My Only Regret

I remember1

The world that stood waiting for me.2

I remember3

The sound of your voice ringing in my ears as I began to fall.4

I remember5

The silent screams.6

I remember7

The feeling for falling.8

I remember9

Fading into nothing.10

I remember11

What it felt like to die.12

I remember13

Your last words, my only regret.14

I remember15

At the last minute, I wanted to take it back.16

I remember17

As I lay on the pavement, you told me you love me.18

Now if only19

I could remember to breathe.20

Now if only21

You could hear my voice whispering I love you too.

Author notes

I remember that I will die, but that I'll skid into my grave laughing all the way.

My favorite candy would have to be anything white chocolate. Evanescence is my favorite band. My favorite book... well, the Ring series by Koji Suzuki was my favorite, but it consists of three books: Ring, Spiral, and Loop.

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  • heartfullofvenom
    February 9, 2008
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    Deep! Yes Finally! Good write. nice emotions and thoughts.

    Good luck!
    ♥


  • silent dances
    October 6, 2007

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    that was really good! did he kill her? or did she just die? I think he killed her, thats what I think happened but you are the brilliant author after all.


    • JuliaAlexandrovna
      October 6, 2007
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      He didn't kill her. She jumped and then after he said "I love you," she regretted jumping. She didn't get the chance to say it back. She died.

      x Julez


  • dyslexic writer gold member
    October 5, 2007
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    Excellent poem!

    You did a wonderful job here! I like how you expressed yourself in with the details.

    Lynn

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.

  • xxbri
    October 4, 2007

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    amazing!

    I'm usually pretty dense about poetry, but this is absolutely breath taking, I absolutely love it! I usually don't read poetry because I find it hard to get into, but This was tear-jerking, Keep it up!


  • Siby Anan
    October 3, 2007

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    Very interesting piece, Julez

    The ending was unexpected, but this was an amazing poem!

    Great work!! ^_^


  • Lady-Jane
    October 3, 2007
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    Im not usually a big fan of poetry, but i really liked this. Good work.

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