My Place chapter 7

Jestor led the way to her son. Tyler and I walked side by side. When we fell in step next to each other I got a funny feeling. It was like joy and excitement packaged up to be something else. It was a pleasant and warm day. The sun was a soft lullaby to my back. It was peaceful with the birds singing their song.

There was a little brook bubbling next to the path. Little fish darted here and there making swords of light piercing the air. Some where I fish jumped and made a splash. Little ripples came from the spot where it land. Slowly the trees started to thin out. Then sunlight flooded my vision. I blinked a couple of time to see a vast meadow with grass and golden hay.

At the other end was a herd of horses. All beautiful and majestic like Jestor. To my right was a couple of deer were grazing. Some where in the tall grass kids of some sort where playing. The sun was so warm I started to get sleepy. Than the horses raised their heads to look at us. Jestor neighed to the horses. Some nickered back and went back to eating. One started to jog towards us. When he came close he stopped and walked then he addressed Jestor.

“Hello mother. What do you want?” he said bowing his head to show respect

“Darling I want you to meet Catherine. Catherine this is Fresiontin.”

“It is nice to meet you Catherine. I know my name is long so you can give me a nickname.”

“It is nice to meet you Fresiontin. I think I will call you my tin soldier.”

“That sounds very nice. What is a soldier?”

“Yes what is a soldier?” Tyler and Jestor asked.

“A soldier is some one who fights for some ones freedom or rights.”

“Oh. I don’t think I want to be called something that means that.”

“Or it can be some one who protects someone. It is an honorable name when used that way.”

“Is that how you are using it?”

“Yes it is.”

“Then I will be Tin Soldier.”

“Great! Oh, I’m not very good at riding.”

“That is ok. I will help you. Tyler can teach you to.”

“Absolutely I can help.”

“This will be so cool. Can I ride now?”

“Sure you hop on Tin Soldier and I will get on Jestor.’

“I need help getting up.”

“Ok here I’ll give you a hand.”

He grabbed me by the waist and practically threw me on Tin Soldier. He than walked over to Jestor and jumped on. When he was settled Jestor started off. We went back into the woods down a twisting trail. I got lost quickly but they knew the way.

“Where are we going?”

“You will see just sit back and relax.”

So I did. It was nice to just hang around and not work for a day. We went for about two hours. Tyler kept up a steady conversation and I have a little secretary writing the whole thing down in my head. We talked about places where I lived and places here that I will see one day. Then we stopped we were at the clearing I meat Tyler yesterday.

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  • Surreal Rhapsody
    January 21, 2008

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    I like tin soldier. ^.^ hes sweet. I wonder what their gonna do in the next chapter, at the place they were at b4. ^.^ Ill go read hte next chapter now. ^.^

  • tiz-worth
    November 14, 2007
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    great job


  • HeleneJulianna
    October 6, 2007

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    Really great description used and good similes. I find the way that the horses speak so casually odd. She could have called the horse Fresiontin "Tin" - then this would be like a really odd version of Thursday's Child by Sonya Hartnett! The descriptions remind me of that book too, the way they're done.
    The ending is not very good, however and the plot is non-existent. It is well-written for the most part, although the dialog is stiff and unrealistic. People (and probably horses) always abbreviate. The way that they can speak to horses is unexplained. How come she can speak to horses? Did something happen?
    Also make sure that it doesn't turn into a version of The Horse Whisperer. Talking to horses has been done before, so don't use the cliché to fuel the tale.


  • Friesian
    October 4, 2007
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    I love

    The name Jestor! I also. again, love the descriptions! Good job!