The Cowboy1
I looked across the crowded diner, from my booth seat next to the window where I was sitting, over to the counter and there he was. Just as he had been there every day for the past two months, he was there again this morning. I could not take my eyes off of him as I slowly stirred my coffee, waited for my order to arrive and stared at him dreamily. He was flirting with the waitress. I could tell by the way his eyes sparkled and he held a gentle laugh. I couldn't help but wish I was that waitress at that moment but she hardly paid any attention to him at all. She just threw him a smile and walked away. Was she crazy? This was the hottest man that I had ever seen and I would have given anything to just talk to him for a second.2
I, myself, had been coming to this diner every morning for breakfast for over two years, ever since I had moved into this small town nestled in the mountains. Nothing very exciting ever happened here for me until two months ago when this man walked in through the front doors of the diner. He was tall, sleek and fully clad in cowboy's clothing. All the way from the bottom of his boots, past his tight fitting jeans and up to the tip of his wide brimmed cowboy hat that nestled on top of his head to hide his dark wavy hair. The cowboy hat shadowed his face just enough to make him look mysterious but you could still see his dark eyes and the rugged look on his handsome face. He looked like he had just stepped out of an ad from a magazine and right into our diner. There was a real life cowboy in our small part of the world! Everyone in the diner that day stopped to stare at this stranger as he entered, but he soon became a regular.3
Now he was sitting at his usual seat at the counter with his cowboy hat placed on the seat next to him. He was wearing his usual tight fighting blue jeans and a blue cowboy shirt that was just as tight fitting as his jeans. You could see every curve of his strong shoulder and upper arm muscles clearly. Every time he smiled my heart leapt in my chest. He had a perfect smile that lit up his tanned face and set a sparkle in his dark brown eyes. I could hardly take my eyes off of him.4
Slowly I sipped on my coffee and when I got half way through the cup this stranger suddenly stood up to leave. He pulled some money out of his wallet and threw it on the counter. He picked up his hat and placed it back on his head situating it just right before turning to leave. I was disappointed that I had gotten here late this morning. I knew that I should not have hit the snooze button on my alarm the two extra times that I did. Now I was going to have to eat my breakfast with nothing to occupy my mind. I watched as he started to walk down the aisle way that lead to the front doors. Suddenly, when he got half way there, he stopped, turned and looked directly at me. My heart stopped as I looked away quickly not wanting him to know that I had been watching him.5
When next I looked I saw that he was making his way across the restaurant heading in my direction. This time I could not take my eyes off of him as I watched him stride even closer to where I sat, weaving between the tables and the busy waitresses that were bringing out food or taking back orders. My heart began to pound and race in my chest as he approached. I could hear the sound of my own heart beat above the voices of all the people in the diner, the clatter of the silverware hitting plates and dishes being cleared from the tables. Oh my God, he was coming over to my table. I felt a panic rise in my chest as this realization hit. What was I going to say? What was I going to do? I knew I would make a fool out of myself, but I just held a smile on my face as he finally made his way to my table and I could see every bit of him close up. He held a soft look on his face, as he looked me over inquisitively.6
I just stared up at him from my seat for what seemed to be an eternity before either one of us spoke. Suddenly all the noise of the diner disappeared and it was as if just the two of us were the only people left in the universe.7
"Howdy Ma'am," the cowboy addressed me with a slight tip of his hat, his deep southern accent breaking the silence. "Mind if I take a seat?" He gestured toward the empty seat across from me.8
"Sure," I replied, feeling stupid for not offering but I didn't want to be presumptuous. I watched as he slid into the booth, removed his hat from his head and placed it on the seat next to him. His wavy dark hair looked as smooth as silk. My first thought was how much I would like to run my hands through it so when he turned his attention to me I looked away and felt the heat rise in my cheeks.9
"I'm sorry, I'm not usually this bold," he spoke. He obviously related the reason for my blushing to his arrival. 10
"That's OK," I spoke, recovering from my embarrassment. I instantly picked up my coffee cup to take a sip. I acted as nonchalantly as possible, as if a stranger came to my table to sit everyday. 11
"This is a pretty quiet town y'all have here. You aren't new here are ya'?" The cowboy asked, looking about the restaurant as if he were sizing it up.12
"No, I've lived here for over two years now. I've been coming to this diner ever since I moved here," I answered, continuing to sip on the rest of my coffee and wondering why my order was taking so long to arrive. 13
" Such a gorgeous gal as yourself, I can't believe I overlooked ya' 'til now." I turned away blushing again at his compliment and the thought that I had noticed him from the first day he entered the diner. I wasn't going to let him know that though. I felt as giddy as a school girl. " I'm sorry, you're uncomfortable, I can tell. Excuse me for disturbin' ya' ma'am, I'll go ahead and be headin' out. Where are my manners? I ain't got no business botherin' ya' anyway" he spoke in his country drawl reaching for his hat.14
"No, I'm not uncomfortable at all," I declared," please don't leave."I was actually happy that he was there. This was the best thing that had ever happened to me in all my twenty-eight years. I was actually pretty plain and my life was boring. That was why I had moved to this small town to begin with. I figured I would fit right into the quiet secluded world since my parents had both passed away in an accident and I had no relatives left. I was not comfortable with the hustle and bustle of the busy city life.15
"Now, only if you're sure," this stranger smiled and winked at me as he turned his attention back to only me. It sent my heart racing even faster as he settled back in his seat.16
"So what brings you here?" I decided to strike up a conversation to assure him that I was not uncomfortable.17
" Why, you of course, Darlin'," was his reply. I nearly dropped my cup and couldn't help but blush again.18
"What? No, really, what brings you here?" I asked the question again, astonished. He looked at me as if he were mesmerized by my sheer presence.19
" Now ya' done went and hurt my feelings Darlin'. Do I look like somebody who'd lie to ya'. Sweetheart, I've been waitin' to meet you my whole life. There ain't nobody back home as pretty as the likes of you." I thought maybe he was joking but his face remained serious and his dark eyes sparkled with affection. I couldn't believe this was happening. It seemed like a dream or a page out of a romance novel. It definitely did not feel as if it could possibly be real. Not only was this cowboy handsome but he was a charmer as well.20
"But you don't even know me," I said, still holding onto my now empty cup.21
"Sure I do, I've been dreamin' of ya' my whole life. I knew the second I just laid my eyes on ya' that you were the woman in my dreams. I knew there was a reason I just up and left my ranch and headed north with no real purpose in mind." His face never lost its look of seriousness and his eyes now held a glow of seduction. He surprised me even more when he reached across the table to take my hand in his. I put my coffee cup down and let him take my smaller hand into his much stronger one. His hand was rough and calloused, that of a hard working man, but he caressed my hand in his with the gentleness of a lamb. 22
I felt myself get drawn into his gaze. It was like I was lost in a trance and lost all sense of reality. I saw my own reflection in the pools of his dark brown eyes. What could this handsome cowboy possibly see in me? I couldn't help but question myself. My hair was dish water blond in color and I wasn't fond of hair dyes and my eyes were kind of gray, not an appealing color at all. The only thing I had going for me was my slender figure, I thought.23
We just sat staring at each other as if time had suspended itself and the world continued to spin on its axis just for us. Finally he sat back silently. We didn't need any words between us at that moment to speak of how we were feeling. My heart raced even more anxiously as I could still feel the warmth on my hand where his had been. With nervous energy building up all I could do was trace the rim of my coffee cup with my finger. I was speechless and didn't know what to say. Every time his eyes caught mine I had to look away. I felt an excitement rise in me like I had never felt before. Then a heat of passion rushed over me as I thought of his soft lips brushing against mine.24
"How 'bout dinner tonight?" He asked suddenly, leaning back in the booth.25
"Hmm..." I was still lost in my trance.26
"Dinner tonight," he repeated." We can go up to my cabin and I will cook ya' the best steak dinner this side of the country." His face beamed with pride and the thought sounded enchanting. Just the two of us sitting in front of the fireplace with the sounds of the woods all around his cabin coming through the open windows. I could smell the fresh evening mountain air over the smell of the frying bacon in the diner.27
"That sounds nice," I answered, dreamily, still lost in a daze.28
"How 'bout some more coffee? I reckon we can discuss it over another cup of coffee can't we?" He suggested, but I was still lost in my fantasy.29
"Hmmm..." was the only thing that formed on my lips. My imagination was running away with itself quicker than I could keep up.30
"Would you like another cup of coffee?" I heard a new louder voice and jumped at the sound. I looked up and the waitress was standing beside the table.31
"Oh, yes please " I answered, handing her my cup. I looked over across the table to the booth across from me and realized it was empty. There was no one sitting there. Instantly my attention was drawn back to the counter where I had seen the cowboy sitting, that seat was empty as well. The whole counter was empty, as was the rest of the diner. In fact, the diner suddenly disappeared completely right before my eyes and I found myself sitting in a hospital cafeteria.32
"Honestly, do you really think a cowboy is going to come striding in here and whisk you from this Psych. ward? Where's he going to tie up his horse?" The waitress that had been standing over me, whom was actually a nurse in a starched white uniform, laughed softly before she turned and walked away.33
"Yeah, well it is nice to dream isn't it?" I sighed, getting up from my seat and leaving the cafeteria. As soon as I pushed through the heavy wood doors and walked out into the bright sterile corridor my attention was drawn to the end of the hall. There stood the most handsome doctor with dark wavy hair and dark brown eyes. He instantly looked up from the chart he was looking at and started to stride down the hall towards me. I could only stare at the rugged look on his face. Oh my God, he was coming over to me. 34
I looked across the crowded diner, from my booth seat next to the window where I was sitting, over to the counter and there he was. Just as he had been there every day for the past two months, he was there again this morning. I could not take my eyes off of him as I slowly stirred my coffee, waited for my order to arrive and stared at him dreamily. He was flirting with the waitress. I could tell by the way his eyes sparkled and he held a gentle laugh. I couldn't help but wish I was that waitress at that moment but she hardly paid any attention to him at all. She just threw him a smile and walked away. Was she crazy? This was the hottest man that I had ever seen and I would have given anything to just talk to him for a second.2
I, myself, had been coming to this diner every morning for breakfast for over two years, ever since I had moved into this small town nestled in the mountains. Nothing very exciting ever happened here for me until two months ago when this man walked in through the front doors of the diner. He was tall, sleek and fully clad in cowboy's clothing. All the way from the bottom of his boots, past his tight fitting jeans and up to the tip of his wide brimmed cowboy hat that nestled on top of his head to hide his dark wavy hair. The cowboy hat shadowed his face just enough to make him look mysterious but you could still see his dark eyes and the rugged look on his handsome face. He looked like he had just stepped out of an ad from a magazine and right into our diner. There was a real life cowboy in our small part of the world! Everyone in the diner that day stopped to stare at this stranger as he entered, but he soon became a regular.3
Now he was sitting at his usual seat at the counter with his cowboy hat placed on the seat next to him. He was wearing his usual tight fighting blue jeans and a blue cowboy shirt that was just as tight fitting as his jeans. You could see every curve of his strong shoulder and upper arm muscles clearly. Every time he smiled my heart leapt in my chest. He had a perfect smile that lit up his tanned face and set a sparkle in his dark brown eyes. I could hardly take my eyes off of him.4
Slowly I sipped on my coffee and when I got half way through the cup this stranger suddenly stood up to leave. He pulled some money out of his wallet and threw it on the counter. He picked up his hat and placed it back on his head situating it just right before turning to leave. I was disappointed that I had gotten here late this morning. I knew that I should not have hit the snooze button on my alarm the two extra times that I did. Now I was going to have to eat my breakfast with nothing to occupy my mind. I watched as he started to walk down the aisle way that lead to the front doors. Suddenly, when he got half way there, he stopped, turned and looked directly at me. My heart stopped as I looked away quickly not wanting him to know that I had been watching him.5
When next I looked I saw that he was making his way across the restaurant heading in my direction. This time I could not take my eyes off of him as I watched him stride even closer to where I sat, weaving between the tables and the busy waitresses that were bringing out food or taking back orders. My heart began to pound and race in my chest as he approached. I could hear the sound of my own heart beat above the voices of all the people in the diner, the clatter of the silverware hitting plates and dishes being cleared from the tables. Oh my God, he was coming over to my table. I felt a panic rise in my chest as this realization hit. What was I going to say? What was I going to do? I knew I would make a fool out of myself, but I just held a smile on my face as he finally made his way to my table and I could see every bit of him close up. He held a soft look on his face, as he looked me over inquisitively.6
I just stared up at him from my seat for what seemed to be an eternity before either one of us spoke. Suddenly all the noise of the diner disappeared and it was as if just the two of us were the only people left in the universe.7
"Howdy Ma'am," the cowboy addressed me with a slight tip of his hat, his deep southern accent breaking the silence. "Mind if I take a seat?" He gestured toward the empty seat across from me.8
"Sure," I replied, feeling stupid for not offering but I didn't want to be presumptuous. I watched as he slid into the booth, removed his hat from his head and placed it on the seat next to him. His wavy dark hair looked as smooth as silk. My first thought was how much I would like to run my hands through it so when he turned his attention to me I looked away and felt the heat rise in my cheeks.9
"I'm sorry, I'm not usually this bold," he spoke. He obviously related the reason for my blushing to his arrival. 10
"That's OK," I spoke, recovering from my embarrassment. I instantly picked up my coffee cup to take a sip. I acted as nonchalantly as possible, as if a stranger came to my table to sit everyday. 11
"This is a pretty quiet town y'all have here. You aren't new here are ya'?" The cowboy asked, looking about the restaurant as if he were sizing it up.12
"No, I've lived here for over two years now. I've been coming to this diner ever since I moved here," I answered, continuing to sip on the rest of my coffee and wondering why my order was taking so long to arrive. 13
" Such a gorgeous gal as yourself, I can't believe I overlooked ya' 'til now." I turned away blushing again at his compliment and the thought that I had noticed him from the first day he entered the diner. I wasn't going to let him know that though. I felt as giddy as a school girl. " I'm sorry, you're uncomfortable, I can tell. Excuse me for disturbin' ya' ma'am, I'll go ahead and be headin' out. Where are my manners? I ain't got no business botherin' ya' anyway" he spoke in his country drawl reaching for his hat.14
"No, I'm not uncomfortable at all," I declared," please don't leave."I was actually happy that he was there. This was the best thing that had ever happened to me in all my twenty-eight years. I was actually pretty plain and my life was boring. That was why I had moved to this small town to begin with. I figured I would fit right into the quiet secluded world since my parents had both passed away in an accident and I had no relatives left. I was not comfortable with the hustle and bustle of the busy city life.15
"Now, only if you're sure," this stranger smiled and winked at me as he turned his attention back to only me. It sent my heart racing even faster as he settled back in his seat.16
"So what brings you here?" I decided to strike up a conversation to assure him that I was not uncomfortable.17
" Why, you of course, Darlin'," was his reply. I nearly dropped my cup and couldn't help but blush again.18
"What? No, really, what brings you here?" I asked the question again, astonished. He looked at me as if he were mesmerized by my sheer presence.19
" Now ya' done went and hurt my feelings Darlin'. Do I look like somebody who'd lie to ya'. Sweetheart, I've been waitin' to meet you my whole life. There ain't nobody back home as pretty as the likes of you." I thought maybe he was joking but his face remained serious and his dark eyes sparkled with affection. I couldn't believe this was happening. It seemed like a dream or a page out of a romance novel. It definitely did not feel as if it could possibly be real. Not only was this cowboy handsome but he was a charmer as well.20
"But you don't even know me," I said, still holding onto my now empty cup.21
"Sure I do, I've been dreamin' of ya' my whole life. I knew the second I just laid my eyes on ya' that you were the woman in my dreams. I knew there was a reason I just up and left my ranch and headed north with no real purpose in mind." His face never lost its look of seriousness and his eyes now held a glow of seduction. He surprised me even more when he reached across the table to take my hand in his. I put my coffee cup down and let him take my smaller hand into his much stronger one. His hand was rough and calloused, that of a hard working man, but he caressed my hand in his with the gentleness of a lamb. 22
I felt myself get drawn into his gaze. It was like I was lost in a trance and lost all sense of reality. I saw my own reflection in the pools of his dark brown eyes. What could this handsome cowboy possibly see in me? I couldn't help but question myself. My hair was dish water blond in color and I wasn't fond of hair dyes and my eyes were kind of gray, not an appealing color at all. The only thing I had going for me was my slender figure, I thought.23
We just sat staring at each other as if time had suspended itself and the world continued to spin on its axis just for us. Finally he sat back silently. We didn't need any words between us at that moment to speak of how we were feeling. My heart raced even more anxiously as I could still feel the warmth on my hand where his had been. With nervous energy building up all I could do was trace the rim of my coffee cup with my finger. I was speechless and didn't know what to say. Every time his eyes caught mine I had to look away. I felt an excitement rise in me like I had never felt before. Then a heat of passion rushed over me as I thought of his soft lips brushing against mine.24
"How 'bout dinner tonight?" He asked suddenly, leaning back in the booth.25
"Hmm..." I was still lost in my trance.26
"Dinner tonight," he repeated." We can go up to my cabin and I will cook ya' the best steak dinner this side of the country." His face beamed with pride and the thought sounded enchanting. Just the two of us sitting in front of the fireplace with the sounds of the woods all around his cabin coming through the open windows. I could smell the fresh evening mountain air over the smell of the frying bacon in the diner.27
"That sounds nice," I answered, dreamily, still lost in a daze.28
"How 'bout some more coffee? I reckon we can discuss it over another cup of coffee can't we?" He suggested, but I was still lost in my fantasy.29
"Hmmm..." was the only thing that formed on my lips. My imagination was running away with itself quicker than I could keep up.30
"Would you like another cup of coffee?" I heard a new louder voice and jumped at the sound. I looked up and the waitress was standing beside the table.31
"Oh, yes please " I answered, handing her my cup. I looked over across the table to the booth across from me and realized it was empty. There was no one sitting there. Instantly my attention was drawn back to the counter where I had seen the cowboy sitting, that seat was empty as well. The whole counter was empty, as was the rest of the diner. In fact, the diner suddenly disappeared completely right before my eyes and I found myself sitting in a hospital cafeteria.32
"Honestly, do you really think a cowboy is going to come striding in here and whisk you from this Psych. ward? Where's he going to tie up his horse?" The waitress that had been standing over me, whom was actually a nurse in a starched white uniform, laughed softly before she turned and walked away.33
"Yeah, well it is nice to dream isn't it?" I sighed, getting up from my seat and leaving the cafeteria. As soon as I pushed through the heavy wood doors and walked out into the bright sterile corridor my attention was drawn to the end of the hall. There stood the most handsome doctor with dark wavy hair and dark brown eyes. He instantly looked up from the chart he was looking at and started to stride down the hall towards me. I could only stare at the rugged look on his face. Oh my God, he was coming over to me. 34
Author notes
What is fantasy and what is reality?
This is actually written for choice #1. If you don't believe me then read it again. Most didn't get it the first time I wrote it.
What did you think? Please comment!
Comments
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so didn't see that coming. it made me laugh... good job on this, this is a neat story. good luck!
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Thank-you for the comment and your advice is greatly appreciated. This was actually written for a Fantasy contest that is why it centers around the fantasy and I did purposely mislead the reader until the end to make the fantasy seem real. I ended this the way I did because I have been toying with the idea of adding onto it with different chapters. I am actually a story writer accustomed to ending one chapter with cliffhangers to keep the reader's interest to go on to read the next chapter. I had a psychological thriller playing in the back of my head as I was writing this so your perception is accurate.
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I do like this, in general. I found it to be whimsical and a pleasant read.
I have a few comments to make on this, though. The first is that the 'waking to reality' bit is a little abrupt. It feels almost as though you ran out of ideas and tried to find a new story. I'm pretty sure that's not the case, but I can tell you why I got that impression. There are two reasons. One is that there is absolutely no hint anywhere in the beginning of the story that this is not reality, even on the second reading. The second reason is that you put a lot more effort into providing background for the fantasy than you do in the reality.
This may be exactly as you want it, but I felt that it was a bit like the mystery writer suddenly deciding that the person who "dunnit" was an entirely new character that the readers never knew about, to make sure they didn't guess the plot beforehand.
To change this (if you want to, that is), you could make the background more generic to both scenarios. You could cut out the background description and replace it with something that *sounds* like a fantasy, the way you formulate one in your head -- more linear, is what I mean. I also feel that the last part of the story needs more description: after all, that's familiar territory and your narrator will know it very well.
All of these are small and subtle suggestions, but I think they'd make quite a difference to the feeling of the story without hampering the plot line or characterisation that you've set up so well. -
Wow...I really liked this very much. The twist at the end was dynamite....very creative mind you have there sweetie...
I wanted to read more...more....more....lol
Sam
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I loved it! I was in the middle of the reading and someone called me on the phone,
I started to read it all over again
The encounter with the cowboy in the dinner was so romantic, too romantic to be true, but again, we need to believe that wonderful things may happen.
I felt disappointed when I read that all was a dream and after filled with hope when she the doctor noticed her.
Yes, I'm a hopeless romantic...
I truly enjoyed this story, thanks!
Hugs,
Mari
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First I want to thank-you for taking the time to read, comment and offer your advice. It is greatly appreciated as I believe you are correct on everything you said and it is very helpful when someone comes along with their honest opinion.
For the format: I thought it funny that you mentioned that because I orginally had it double spaced between paragraphs and wasn't certain which works best. And to be honest I also changed it because people seem warded off by long reads and it makesit appear longer. I would rather have it easier to read.
The use of contractions: I also agree that would sound much better and less robotic. I did not put much thought into it. Your is such a common mistake of the brain though. I am surprised it did not get caught when I did the grammar check.
I am from the north and I don't believe we have any kind of accent at all and we put much more pronuciation on our words. I am not too familiar with the cowboy dialect and was afraid to try using it in here or this would have turned out much more comical than I wanted. If you have any advice it would be greatly appreciated. I don't know any real cowboys. lol!
Edited on Sep 12, 7:43 p.m. because 'i am the queen of typos'. -
See…I came back. (toldja! LOL)
I see you asked me to be ‘critical’, so (as a writer myself) I’ll do that…but it comes in 2 parts and you’ll have to ask for the second one. I should start by saying that the story works well, nice twist at the end. (It’s a bit on the ‘Romance Novel’ level for my tastes, but that’s okay…there are people who read Romances passionately! I’m just more into sci-fi/fantasy and adventure…same as I write.)
Critically, the first thing I’d like to mention is the formatting…just because, if you would double-space between the paragraphs, it would make the read MUCH easier in the eye. The only way I got through it was to copy-paste it into Word and do just that.
There are minor things a proofreading should catch…like in the sentence "Your uncomfortable, I can tell.”…the word you want is “you’re” (the contraction of ‘you are’). ‘Your’ is the possessive pronoun…like “Your hair is pretty”.
The hardest part for me is that your narrator seems to speak a little stiffly, sort of like Commander Data, speaking without contractions.
"No, I have been coming here for two years,” would sound more natural with “I’ve”
Likewise,
"No, No, I am not uncomfortable at all," …wouldn’t she say “I’m”? For a story to be believable in the reader’s gut, the people have to talk like people, you see what I’m saying?
Now, here’s the part you have to ask for…your cowboy’s dialect. He doesn’t talk like any cowboy I know, but the truth is, he is only there in her mind, so maybe he doesn’t HAVE to talk like a cowboy…just like she THINKS a cowboy talks. So if you want his language made more authentic, tell me. If it’s enough that he is talking like he does because it’s in her mind, that’s fine. I think you have a good start here…write the novel. It’ll likely be a good one.
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I too clicked because I grew up on a Ranch in California and my father, brother and many friends are all 'real' cowboys. I thought it a poem but stayed to read. I was amazed at the twist at the end... nicely done! bless you, sharon
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When I seen the title The Cowboy had to stop and see where the writer was going to take me this morning. Good job. Had to keep reading to see what was going to happen.
HUmmmmmmm! Now the DOCTOR. Well..... where will this go?
Like the twist, but you can never tell. Love may be hiding under the bed.
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Melissa, this is wonderful my dear Fiend, i love reading stories and i enjoyed reading this soo much. It was a surprise endind, but hey are you going to have another chapter? I hope so~love~Joan
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Thank-you for your comments and your honesty. It was a big help. I did read back through and made some corrections. I am glad that you enjoyed this.
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Thank-you for taking the time to read. I appreciate it.
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This was an interesting piece, I enjoyed the read though there were a few run on sentences. The ending was really good. Well done.
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well this is long i dont usually read long things but you should feel awfully special because i read this and i liked it its very well done, great job
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Very long.....
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meesa, I clicked expecting a poem...this is more material than I have time to address right now. I've bookmarked it, though, and I will come back when I have more time, okay?
It was the title that drew me...you see, I AM a cowboy. The real thing...grew up doing the daily work of a working wrangler: I've lived the life. Just wanted to see someone's literary view of it...so I'll be back for that read after a while. -
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Very nicely done. I liked your twist at the end..but I personally would have liked to see the first ending. The cowby cooks that dinner and she ...and he.. well they... you know.
Then when time time is right, he puts a ring in his nose and she a loop over her head and they tie the knots together.
If your cowboy has not arrived yet... he will. Its only a matter of time. Watch all the dirt roads you drive by ...watch for a solitary figure sitting on a saddle by the side of the road. Then offer him your hand....I'm sure he will take it.
Cowboy Up!
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