Humming a familiar tune

The world famous house of birds was about to have it's annual Releasing of the birds. Hundreds of people flooded the formerly empty park way, awaiting the Bird Master to open the cage to the let the birds free. He was rather round, wearing a black tux, almost reminiscent of the old age Penguin villain from Batman. He was whistling an old tune that made the peopl seem to relax, as if relishing the time they have to listen before he stops. The Bird Master Wore a rather large mask, a big nose in the shape of a beak, stuck out proudly.1

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Children were running to the front, hoping to get a good few of the show. The Bird Master had a sly grin on his face. People were shouting, cherring and screaming, for they knew how the bird master played, he waits until the last possible moment to do things.3

Night began to fall upon the crowd, and as though they were going to die, they began to cheer louder and louder. Making the bird master do as they wanted. He reached for the cages handle. They cheered louder. He began to open the door. They cheered even louder. He quickly threw the cage door open. And Hundreds of small birds flew out. No, Maybe thousands. The Crowd cheered at an octave so loud it could shatter glass.4

The birds were actually, thousands of white feathered Humming Birds. Performing a beautiful ballet of circles and angles. The Crowd was amazed, and continued to cheer. The Bird Master on the other hand had different plans for the crowd. He snapped his finger and 4 spotlights fluttered to life and started to direct toward the birds. To the crowds dismay, the beaks of the birds began to glisten in the light, as if something of a sharp nature, possibly somthing dangerous. The Bird master snapped his fingers again, and the pintsize birds, all of them, began a barrel role straight toward the ground. The Crowd screamed in amazement!5

And with another snap, the birds came out of the barrel role, and flew dead center toward the crowd. They Cheered even louder, preparing for the birds next trick. 6

But....there was no other trick. The Cheering ceased. And was replaced with screams of terror7

The thousands of birds ripped through the crowd like butter, blood stained the ground, the grass, and the suburban. Children tried to get away, adults attempt to shield themselves with jackets. And even car windows were shattered apart. The people were cut so deep, that traces of stomach acid seemed to spill out. Entrails littered the ground. And the birds relentlesly ripped at already dead victims...all was dead, and all was good. A finger snapping in the distance sounded, and the now blood beaked birds, flew away.8

The Sun began its evil accent toward the morning sky, and corpses littered the street. The so-called bird master was making his way to the middle of the circular park. He stopped and began to whistle the same tune he did the earlier day. Thousands of Humming Birds came flying toward him, only to stop and hover in a sphere like entity around him.9

He held out his index finger, a little bird flew on it, and stayed stooped on it. Beak stained with fresh blood.10

"Bad Birdie" Was the only words to escape the Bird Master.11

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With that, the bird masters glove began to flatten, and it seemed as if something was receeding into the sleeve of the bird master. His body began to shrink, his clothes started to wrinkle as he started to get smaller and smaller until only his clothes lay forgotten on the ground. A small round thing started shifting under the clothes, and out of the hole for the head came a black humming bird, flying toward the sky, the others followed suit.13

The Only thing left in that park were the bodies of hundreds, a wrinkled tuxedo, and the mask that had a nose big enough to fit a bird beak

Author notes

Ain't it a little ironic with the background image being a bunc of birds?

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  • Kagamine Rin gold member
    August 24

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    This is very powerful. Wonderful description. Birds are very itneresting to use in stories.

    Nice twist in the passage. The release of the birds, then suddenly, boom. Attack. I loved it!

    However, I noticed a few spelling mistakes. You mispelled "people" and "something". Otherwise, the story was good.

    I wish you the best of luck in my cotnest! =D


  • The Joker HaHa
    August 16

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    i liked this story alot. it had a lot of good descriptions that made it easy to make the picture in your head of a thousand killer hummingbirds lol. and i like how the birdmaster was actually like a possessing hummingbird lol. very good twister. thanks for entering.


  • tallblondie Greeters member
    July 13

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    I think you might have put this in the wrong contest - it seems to have been better suited for the Quick Quickies Horror. Thank you for your entry though.


  • magicmonster00M
    May 31

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    Okay. I am am amused by what happened. Although, your villain was a bit comical, I enjoyed the piece...a bit. The story was amusing when you said, "The world famous house of birds was about to have it's annual Releasing of the birds. Hundreds of people flooded the formerly empty park way, awaiting the Bird Master to open the cage to the let the birds free." It was a pretty good beginning, but I did not like when I read this, "He was rather round, wearing a black tux, almost reminiscent of the old age Penguin villain from Batman. He was whistling an old tune that made the peopl seem to relax, as if relishing the time they have to listen before he stops. The Bird Master Wore a rather large mask, a big nose in the shape of a beak, stuck out proudly." It was obvious what was about to happen next. You also have a spelling error in that paragraph. The word "peopl" should be "people". That is not the only mistake you have, and I would tell you to edit the mistakes out.

    MagicMonster00M: I wish you luck in story write, and my contest.


  • DarkestPassion
    April 28
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    this is a pretty good peice


  • Miss Hanako Megumi
    January 2

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    I didn't really enjoy this, but then again I'm not really into birds. lol. I didn't feel compelled to read it, and in some ways that's not too bad. But in other ways, it's not great either. ha ha. I think this story was well written and enjoyable to someone who likes birds.

    So, you get a YAY from me for effort and creativity.

    Good Luck!


  • UnicornGargoyle
    December 20, 2007
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    There were a few grammar and spelling mistakes. But a quick revision should fix that.

    It was an interesting story


  • skyblu
    December 14, 2007

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    Hi, I've noticed a few errors,
    In paragraph 1 you've spelt people wrong, but I'm guessing that it's just a typo.
    In the second paragraph, you missed off the full stop in the first sentence.
    Paragraph 3, hundred has a capital letter but it's in the middle of the sentence.
    You've spelt accent wrong, it should be ascent, and also, only has a capital letter but it's in the middle of the sentence.
    I like the ending, especially the 'bad birdie' line.
    it's a good story, it doesn't really fit under the contest criteria but, oh well.
    Good luck.


  • La Maravilla
    November 7, 2007

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    now I shall be weary whenever I see a hummingbird...

    I would have liked some kind of description of the actual killing...like people running, the little beaks pecking nifty little holes in human flesh...all that niceness lol

    Interesting story. Thanks for entering.


    • Azzy Bear
      November 7, 2007
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      Eh, a little too graphic for my taste, this piece was made for another contest and I just basically needed to make it "obvious" of what happend. But hey, if i don't win, i'll always try again later.


      • La Maravilla
        November 11, 2007
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        how does the quote go...if you don't succeed kill all the winners? try try again? Yeah...something like that! Optimism is key, y tu tienes mucho! Hope you enter another one of my contests in the future!


  • Intrepid
    October 27, 2007

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    I love this peice and its human like referance to birds I love it- you say ur at awe .... well ym friends the pleasures all mine.. dont ever stp +___+


  • Mallig
    October 3, 2007

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    Whoa, I never thought humming birds could be scary, but you did it! The Bird Master was a very creepy character indeed, I loved the last line, how it brings back the first paragraph perfectly. Thanks for entering my contest!


  • alfateenage16
    October 3, 2007
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    A pleasant surprise

    Great mix of fantasy, horror and mythology. love the similie with the sun.WELL DONE

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