He set sight upon a star, 1
waiting for the mist to rise, 2
looking at the ships afar,3
planning a bloody strike.4
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The vessel was quiet and dark6
nothing could be seen aboard7
not even a dim candle or light8
only still shadows on board.9
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When the moon was overshadowed11
by the thick clouds and the fog12
the daring captain then shouted13
“Men, attack!” “Let’s get the gold!”.14
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The crew excited assaulted16
experienced pirates they were17
the sailors soon surrendered18
fighting back they wouldn’t dare19
A contest entry
- Pirates by Drac.
160 points, ended October 11, 2007, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - 500 Points for Imagery! by beezy92.
750 points, ended March 18, 2008, 35 entries
Honorable mention
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I like it. I like pirates! Nice write (= I did like the imagery.
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Hey, a great poem! =)
Very well written and worded!
Well done here, and good luck in my contest!
I think you'll have a good chance against the other poems, which means = Great work! =D
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 4, characters: 5.
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Good luck
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