I assume you know the quote, "Better to have loved and lost than to have never loved at all."? Well have you ever truly understood it's meaning? I can remember the past, as i sit in my seat. About to write about my memories, to explain to my family, i can remember you. I can remember watching you as the school year slipped by. Clad in blue clothing, hair as straight as the stem of a flower, and the face of an angel. Personality as bright as the sun, hands as soft as air, and eyes the darkest shade of brown i've ever seen.1
School went by quickly, and our friedship was unique. When we had a problem, we always worked it out by talking. You're friends dissaproved, but we were happy, at least, i thought you were. We always changed hair styles to suit eachothers whims. Changing classes now and then, but we were always together. We never wanted to change because we hated it so much.2
Finally, that day came when we were by ourselves, in class, the others went to see the treat our teachers bought for us, but we didn't care. You sang to me, in that voice that resounds through my mind everyday. That day i fell in love with one of my best friends, and the rest of the days after that i will regret my own actions. For it is through me that i lost you.3
The day you found out, the day that promised me the end. I just had to write those words in my composition book, "Never Change Kz, I love you the way you are." The look of disgust on your face, awe hanging on your lips, the day you found out about my secret, destroyed whatever chance i had with you.4
The school years nears an end, and i have lost your trust and friendship, i always said, "I'd rather have you as a friend, then not in my life all." But you didn't care.5
I remember getting in a fight, defending your name, and won. Beat him into a pulp that final day of school, walking out the gate of those hallowed halls, you stopped me "We've changed alot haven't we?" You leaned against the pillar of blue and white, that sexy smirk perched up on your face, that twinkle in your eye, these things im gonna miss, but not as much as i'll miss you.6
And what i said next made you tear. 7
"Change? Change is good"
Author notes
This story isn't actually a story, these things really did happen, in my eyes. I loved him, but i loved someone i couldn't have.
But now i'm over him, it's been years.
The picture is of HIM!
Also, i know i made alot of I's, un-capitalized, okay i fucking get it. Dont anyone Dare say it again!
I am NOT gonna fix it so shut up!
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I'm lost..
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That's really well written. It may not be fiction but is a very good story, well done and good luck.
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Touching.
You have some real talent there, buddy. What's more is that this isn't a tale you've woven, rather a scene you've played out.
Some people say being gay is wrong. Others say that being gay and in love is even worse. I say, no matter who or what you are, love is what it should always be... Love. You are who you are, and your life is your choice, as you should know.
Be who you are man. Other people may judge you.. But not me. Just know that, k? ^^
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Thank you vewy much
Thanx Kurt, i needed that.
^_^
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This was a nice short story. Change could be good but sometimes its not. I liked the ending with that line. Not sure what else to say but great job on this and good luck in the contest.
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sweet write. i liked it!
a few mistakes to perhaps fix:
"i" should be changed to a capital in the first sentence. also in "i've" in the last sentence in the first para and in the last sentence in the second para. actually, most of the "i"'s are in lower case... they should all be in upper.
"you're" should be "your" in the seventh line. It reads as "you are friends disapproved..." it should just be "your friends..."
you should get rid of the "s" in "years" in the fourth para. and in that same para it should be "than not in..." instead of "then not in ..." (than compares two things, whereas then is like talking about the future. eg. "then we went... blah blah blah...")
"havne't" in the 3rd last para should be "haven't".
there should be a full stop after "good" in the last sentence.
overall, not bad. an answer to your question: when youre in love, embrace it and dont take it for granted. if it hurts, I'm sure the pain is good. but if it's not, then do whatever you can to get what you want. (the girl to like you)
...PERSIST AND YOU WILL FIND HAPPINESS!
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One small problem
This person happens to be another guy..... -
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my point still stands. it doesnt matter if he is a guy... whats wrong with that? at least i tried to help... =[
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Nothing at all
I was saying that hoping that you weren't another one of those damn homophobes, thanx for ur advice
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oh wow that was a brilliant heart warming story about friendship
keep uo the exxelnt work my new friend xox
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