My hyperventilation came to an end as the blade grew closer to my soft skin. I felt the sharp edge of my savior taking its sacrifice. The blood spilled out onto the white flesh as the snow is stained crimson.1
Earlier, talking on the phone with Clarissa, I was stressed. I felt a familiar pang in my wrist, aching for my cure. “Hey, Clare,” I said, my breathing exhausted. “I’ll see you later. I’m going to go take a chill pill and go to sleep.”2
Clarissa giggled. She’s always telling me to ‘take a chill pill,’ but she had no idea what I meant. “All right, Alana. Good night and good luck.”3
So here I am, my ‘chill pill’ making its way into my system. I dig deeper and the blood gushes even more, the pain giving me a feeling of bliss that I never found anywhere else in life. But it didn’t stop me from thinking of her.4
Lifting the edge of my skirt, I sliced into my leg. I could feel myself losing iron. I pulled the blade down my thigh and around by my calf.5
The blade glistened in the fluorescent lighting as I switched hands, cutting into my other wrist. Crimson drops of liquid ran down my ankles to the tiled floor. Drops fell from my wrists, making the drops into puddles.6
I lifted my shirt and cut the skin of my stomach. The feeling of losing iron was satisfying.7
I knew I was losing too much. But I was too addicted to stop.8
With the little strength I had left, I dipped my finger into the blood on my wrist and began writing on the mirror.9
“I’m sorry, Clarissa,” I whispered as I collapsed to the floor, puddles forming all around me. My eyes closed involuntarily, a single wet tear left to run down my face after my departure.
Author notes
My favorite candy would have to be anything white chocolate. Evanescence is my favorite band. My favorite book... well, the Ring series by Koji Suzuki was my favorite, but it consists of three books: Ring, Spiral, and Loop.
A contest entry
- What's in a Phrase? by Andrew Timothy.
325 points, ended December 3, 2007, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - +Emo+ by heartfullofvenom.
300 points, ended February 9, 2008, 41 entries
Honorable mention
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Please tell me what you think
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That was horrible! (In a GOOD way that is...O.O) Clarissa...I have an inkling of what she might feel. A lot of emotion in such a simple and short piece. "Chill pill"...makes me wonder. WHY.
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Holy Chip.
this was really good. I like how you uswed the phrase "chill pill" ...It makes me wonder about Clarissa.
Good Luck
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I like how you tied the phrase into your story. The emotional content was very well-done.
However, I would have liked to see a little more backstory. Why does she cut herself? How did she get addicted to her "chill pill"? Who is Clarissa exactly--just a friend?
The description here was grotesquely beautiful--very bad things were described very well. I want to thank you for entering my contest and goodluck. -
Oh my gosh.
Tis was the best of this type of writing I've read. Really. This was beautiful.
In a horrible way, of course. The way you wrote it...we felt her pain.
This was wonderfully written. A great piece
You're gonna win the contest!!!
(I'm the only other entry
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Awesome.
xoxo
Tay
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Oh my...gosh! Wow, that's kind of spooky but amazing nonetheless. Take a chill pill...hahas.
Good luck in the contest. Totally unexpected
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Wow! I love this! I-I-I don't know what to say! The detail was incredible. It was just simply awesome.
Great, great job!
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