The Three Gods Chapter one [incomplete]

RIIIING...RIIIING...RIIING went an alarm clock in a the only victorian house in all of New Metrocal. A boy laid in a small bed in the corner of a 12x8 room, clearly bothered by the loud sound that echoed angrily through the room.1

"Ughh.." Said our main character as he crept out of his bed. Rolling over and throwing his hand to the dresser to the left of him. Missing the alarm clock by a huge gap. "Grrr," moaned out from his mouth, jerking from the bed, falling off it as well.
Sprawled on the floor in a tank top and green plaid boxers was Evan Septera, a boy of only fifteen, and a huge fascination for the color green, stood up ever so warily and put on his signature light green corrective glasses. He walked out of his room in his skivvies, leaving the alarm clock buzzing into the ears of his furniture.2

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"Move.." Said a slim boy. Emo-ish hair lapped over his eyes, head drooping down. Hands in his pockets. It would seem that he was talking to no one, but if you looked closer, and beyond the minor description, he was talking to someone, well...a thing, "You gonna move, or what?" The kid said one more. He walked forward and bent over, "So, is that a no?" The emo boy asked, "Fine, i'll just walk over you.." Leminx Armanies said and stepped over a small black chihuahua and walking to his front door. The puppy moving his head to the side, staring at Leminx's clothed back. Leminx stopped abruptly, turned around, got on his knees, and held his arms out, "Come here boy!" The dog ran up to Leminx and tackled him to the floor, licking and jumping all over him. 4

Minutes later, when Leminx had calmed to chihuahua down a peg, sneaked outside and ran to school.5

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A girl was walking down the sidewalk, binder held to his stomach and a yellow jacket slung over her shoulder. Calmly breathing in and out as she pranced down to only high school within a thirteen mile radius. Something caught her eye to the left and she turned. There was a lone Lilly in a dead, vacant lot. She sighed and walked over to the flower. She just stared at it's bright color and the message of hope it gives anyone that sees it. She stood up continued her walking, the Lilly seemed to growa bit, if only a bit. She hopped on a bus, and sat in her seat as she took out her ipod, Renae Cordova was leaving the story, for now.7

++Story Start++8

Evan arrived on a snowy december 3rd while Leminx waited for him at the schools entrance. Evan waved a cheerful smile at his friend and a thumbs up was his reply. Leminx came running up to him and spoke first, 9

"Hey Evan, ready for the demon womans test today?"10

"Not at all, I was up all night ... looking for" Leminx quickly slapped him hand up on Evans mouth as to make him stop talking.11

"Ev, I thought were made it clear, that place doesn't exist, we've looked for years to find nothing of a place that can grant us other worldly powers!" Leminx whispered to Evan, very sensually if i may add.12

"Lemy, I was so close, I think I actually found it this time, but I need you and Renae to help me... Will you? Evan looked into Leminx's eyes, pleading in hope, and anger at the same time.13

Leminx snorted and crossed his arms, nose wrinkled and eyes closed, contemplating his next move until he slowly opened his eyes and quickly said,14

"Renae is not coming to school today, she had a retreat with the Cheer Leader squad, gone for the weekend, should be back by monday, and as for me, im sorry, im not wasting my time and getting in trouble for trespassing again." Leminx stated. Evan stepped forward and pass Leminx, and dropped his matching green bag.15

Evan's eyes narrowed in dissapointment, "Fine, I understand, i'll go by myself." and with that, he sped off into the school, passing lockers and teachers until he knocked over the pre named demon woman, Ms.Macar. Knocking over folders, and sending paper flying. Macar landed on her butt with Evan already up and running.16

"SEPTERA!" The demon woman sceamed at the top of her voice.17

Evan knew he would probably bomb her test for this, but, who cares? He kept running and running until he made it to the 'Disaster Zone' of the school. Where the last hurricane blew out windows and knocked over support pillars. Deeming the area unsafe for the kids. Evan knew the bullies lurked around here, good thing the place he was looking for was close. He turned a corner and down a corridor heading toward the old janitors closet.18

Who would've thought the place of the gods was in an old janitors quaters in the dead area of the school? Evan gulped, and reached for the door. When his hand found the handle, he felt an eerie cold, disarrayed from the tempurature around the door knob. He turned it and closed his eyes, then ran his way in. On his run in, he collided head first with a wooden shelf. "Ughhh" was all he said as he rubbed the bump now forming on his cranium. "Is this it? Is this what i was looking for? Death by 'head-on collision'" He chuckled to himself.19

Evan crouched down and sat on his bum, "Maybe Lemy was right, maybe i am seraching blindly for something that doesn't exist." He looked around the room, to find a lone book at the top of the highest shelf, of course for his hight was not so high after all.20

It was a journal, one page in it. 21

It read as followed, "September 15, 1984. It's me again, and im excited to say I found it! The secret to godhood! Finally, after 20 years of searching i've finally found it! I've found High Providance! The pools of the gods! This may be my last entry for a while, i'll miss ya, now im going to go join my brother on the other side. See you around, and too whoever reads this, my name is-." The page ends there22

"If anyone ever find this, say these words: Im a power and I deserve, take me to godsend to aquire my rightfull place as king."23

Evan did as instructed, slowly each word slid out of his mouth and into the air and slowly, the area around him, dissapated into the air, and was replaced by a circular doughnut shaped island, with giant pillers of stone and dirt exstrooding from the mercury colored water around the island.24

One thing escaped Evan's mouth "EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!"25

So loud that it would've shattered glass.26

The middle of the island had a dock like area, planks built into the water/mercury into the middle where, to Evan's suprise, was a skeleton, and it had another Journal in it's dead hand. Evan grabbed it and read it aloud.27

"Journal, I know this might never make it too you, but i have angered the gods, my wish was selfish and i may have to pay the price, im am not of the three gods that are meant to be here. Remember me, remember Consort Armanies..."28

"Armanies...?" Evan whispered, "This man was Leminx's Father."29

Evan grimaced and tried to run, but a magical force pushed into the center of the dock and a non-bodied voice spoke in a deep tone"30

"Who dares trespass upon the Pools of the gods!?" Evan stepped back in hooror, but somewhere gained the courage to speak.31

"Evan Septera, and I came to claim my place as a god!!!" 32

It all went silent, then a surge of grey light struck Evan like lighting. Then he fell on all fours, gasping at a loss of breath. 33

"So now the time of the Gods has finally come. You have chosen the life of an immortal, though you may never again live peacefully, you will be known renowned. You will see the end of your life, back in this realm. And no where else. Do you understand this?"34

"I do..." Bowing his head, and on his knees. Evan was struck by a pale, Mercury colored bolt of lighting. Evan's screams in pain were in vain as his clothes started disintegrating above his skin. His eyes went literally blank, and started glowing a ghastly green. Then, in an instant, it all stopped. Evan was thirteen feet above the ground levitating; hovering carefully. His green hair in Cloud's style. In nothing but his white boxers, and glowing skin, a bright ball of energy wrapped itself around Evan, shrunk smaller and smaller, until it; and Evan, disappeared.35

"And it begins..." Boomed the disembodied voice. And the Pool Of The Gods, was forgotten, for now.36

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A loud thumping noise was heard throuhout the entire school. In room 132, Science wing:Biology, Leminx reacted to his instincts, Evan definitly was in trouble...somewhere.38

It was raining, the cement in the parking lot getting wet from the pounding droplets. Trees being fed. Just perfect for Leminx's foul mood, the little argument he and Evan had earlier that morning was really digging into his skull, he thought he could sneak off and see Evan during his Office Aide period. But he thought, why not now?39

"Ms.Nacar!"40

"What is it Mr.Armanies?"41

"Eh..can I use the bathroom?"42

"Hmm let me think about that, no."43

"But Ms. I really need it." With some inflection in his tone, Leminx started jumping up and down.44

"You are taking a test Leminx, please sit down, and finish your work."45

"But-"46

"No buts, sit down."47

"Fine...Demon woman.." Leminx said in a whisper. All the eyes of his classmates steering away from him. He had studied his teacher this day. The grey taffeta dress she wore. The gold and platinum bracelets that twinkled on her arms. Her brown, almost grey hair put up in a small bun. This all backed up by her slim, slender form that was topped by her whopping height of at least six foot four. She was tall for a woman, especially forthat of one so skinny. 48

The emo kid next to him, who had already finished and turned in his SAT, was Michael Ruwar, someone who was Leminx's rival, and friend. 49

"Hey Lemy, I know you dont need to use the bathroom, whats up?"50

Leminx raised an eyebrow, "How did you know?"51

"Lets just say, I noticed that you weren't holding onto your belt, you always do that when you really need to use the facilities."52

"Do you like me?" Leminx said straight out, not even realizing the shock in Michael's eyes.53

"No!" Michael shouted out, earning attention from the entire class and the demon woman.54

"Mr.Ruwar, mind telling the class whats your major malfunction?" Nacar asked sarcastically. Earning a few shaking heads and giggles from the pets.55

Michael quickly sat down, "Uhm, i'm sorry, i'll shut up"56

"Good" Nacar returned her head to a book she had been reading the entire class period.57

Michael breathed into his hands while a laughing Leminx playfully punched his friend in the shoulder. Michael looked at Leminx sternly, and put his left hand on his shoulder.58

"Whats going on?"59

"Nothing.." Leminx lied lamely.60

"Com'on Lems, I know you too well to know that 'Nothing' is nothing."61

"It is nothing, really."62

"You sure?"63

Before Leminx could say anything else, Ms.Nacar interupted, "Mr.Ruwar, and Mr.Armanies! Perhaps both of you would like a referral to the Vice Principals office!?"64

"No Miss! I apologize. We'll be quiet." Leminx said in a hoarse tone.65

"See to it that you do!" Nacar bowed her head back to her entrancing tale of 'Flowers In The Attic' by V.C Andrews.66

Leminx had sat a little lower in his chair now, one arm over the back of it. Michael was staring at him, for some odd reason, Leminx couldn't resist his solumn pleasure at tesaing Mr.Ruwar.67

"Michael.."68

"What?"69

"Are you gay?"70

"..."71

"Well? Are you?"72

"No."73

"Of course you're not." Quickly Leminx plastered his hand on Michaels thigh, and squeezed. This made him nearly jump off of his chair. Everyone knows the fatal point right on the thigh, north of the knee, on both sides. A nice way to tickle someone, and hurt them at the same time. Mwuhahahah!74

"Eeeeek." Squealed Michael, but not loud enough to disturb Nacar.75

"Say that you love me and I'll let you go." Leminx siad in between chuckles.76

"I LOVE YOU!" Screamed from the small lungs that beared Michael life as a small hush came all around the room. WIth eyes boring into the two boys who sat so alarming close together. Some faces were shocked and awed, some girls giggled and started gossiping like no tomorrow, while others furrowed their brow and looked at Leminx and Michael who now sat so still, one would suspect time had stopped.77

"You're gay?" Someone from the back of the class hollered out in a weird tone. More giggles came their way as a Ms.Nacar slowly yet elegantly strode her way down two whole aile(sp) of desks, passed six brightly wooded horizontal rows of two person desks that face width ways toward the fron of the class. Her hands gently running across the desks with her head faced toward the floor, a sinister smirk etched across her face. It was, eerie, to say the least. It took her a whole minute to reach the two boys who's eyes were glowing. They both slowly creaked their heads so they could look up at the devil woman. It was dark, and raining outside, all they saw was the faint smile that was severed all strands of hope in their small frames. 78

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"I hate you Leminx." scowled Michael. Both of them were now outside the Vice Principals office. Both blushed to a heavy pink. Both still very embarrassed from the fiasco that had taken place only minutes before. Vice Principal Xan. The scariest man in New Metrocal High. Cold stare, defiant eyes, grey hair, with strong resolve in his eyes. He was definitely the last man you ever wanted to meet. Ever.80

"Boys! Get in here!" Came from Xan's office.81

Michael and Leminx both jumped, startled by his voice. They one by one stalked into Xan's office, heads down and hands at their sides. Sullenly, they both sat on the two chairs that faced the vice principal. Xan didn't eve nlook at them, just ruffled a few folders open, closing them a few seconds later. Taking a sip from his coffee every so often. Fifteen minutes into it Leminx was fiddling with his feet and looking at the ground. Wrinkling his nose from time to time. He was getting a headache, strange, he wasn't catching a cold was he?82

Vice Principal Xan finally lifted his head from his files and looked at the boys one at a time. His icy cold stare devastated Michael. He had never been in trouble before. And as for Leminx...It wouldn't first time he was in the disciplinary office. Without hesitation, Xan Spoke, "Why are you boys in here?" He asked, without a bit of emotion in his voice.83

"Ya' know Xanny, same old, same old." Leminx antagonized. Xan smirked. Not with joy, but with contempt. No one knew how much the Vice wanted Lemy to burn. In the most literal sense imaginable.84

"Same old, same old eh?" Xan repeated, "So what's it this time? Loitering? Littering? Bullying?" 85

"I declared my love for this boy over here." Leminx sat sideways on the armchair, his legs hanging over the other end and his thumb pointing over at Michael. To Leminx's joy, Michael gasped and blushed. 'Cute' Leminx thought.86

"Oh." Xan sat back down, he seemed almost relieved. "Why does that earn you a referral here? Who is the retard of a teacher to do that?"87

"Oh you know...demon woman."88

"can we go?" Michael interrupted. He was swaying his legs back forth like there was no tomorrow, and his face looked like a cherry. Leminx just bent his head over to see his friend upside down. "If we didn't do anything wrong, I request to go back to class."89

"Hmm, I don't see why not. Get out of here." Commanded Xan. Michael was the first to stand up and walked toward the door, then Leminx. "Oh and Lems..."90

"Yes sir?"91

"Stay out of trouble and keep your gayness to yourself and your friends."92

"Will do sire." Saluted Leminx, quickly running after Michael, who now looked like a plump, ripe strawberry. 93

Now in an empty hallway, passing hoards of lockers and school banners, Leminx and Michael walked in step with each other. Micheal striding a little uneasily and Leminx with his hands in his pockets, head held up high.94

"Have you seen Evan Mikey?" Asked Leminx, who was looking up at the ceiling, "I haven't seen him since this morning, him blabbering about something incoherently."95

"No. Not since he was running through this very hallway this morning. I think he's demented honestly. Possessed possibly?"96

"...Yeah, by something bigger than both of us my friend."97

"Huh?98

"Oh nothing. You know, you go on ahead and tell satan the I went to go use the bathroom kay?"99

"Where you going?"100

"Look for Evan."101

"Oh...okay."102

"I'll see ya later. Don't stop being cute." Leminx said when they came to a four-way in the halls.103

"Sure, whatever." 104

They marched in opposite directions and as soon as Michael was out of sight, Leminx took off running. Leminx was the star of the track team, his legs could carry him for miles. He didn't know exactly know where he was goin, just something in his gut told him where his best friend is, or was. Leminx stopped at the storm destroyed side of the school. Three stories up.105

"The wonders Hurricane Cathrine has done you..." Blankly Leminx announced to the area, running his hand against ruined lockers,"Why would Evan be over here? Seems completely unlike him." Leminx looked around everywhere, up, down, left and right, to no avail. Though in his defense, the floor were water-logged and weak, so he was smart not to pass certain floors and stairs. It would be obvious to anyone, with that giant gaping hole that peered out to the residential street.106

A quiet moaning caught Leminx's attention just as he was leaving, "Evan?" He asked hoping to get a response in return, "Is that you?" Alas Leminx got nothing in return other than the lingering gutteral sounds that haunted the halls. "Seriously, this isn't funny. Who's there?" The groaning continued, though getting continuously louder and quieter with each second. Fluctuating with the wind.107

Leminx continued to, although cautiously, sidle himself along the intact lockers and safely over the gaping hole in the flooring. It was a suicide mission, for anyone. Crossing into nomads land, into an area that hasn't seen living humans in the last few years. New Metrocal High was once conmandeered and converted into a military compound during the war. That was a decade ago, when Leminx couldn't even go to the bathroom without needing mommy to wipe his butt. Yes it seems rather insignificant, but little did the inhabitants of New Metrocal know, something stayed aloft in this ruined third floor.108

In something short of a miricle, as soon as Leminx made it to the other side, the wooden flooring, waterlogged and weak, collapsed into the abyss below. Which was about twelve feet into an almost equally desolate hallway, but no doubt it would spark some unneeded attention. Leminx scurried along up more stairs, but not before snagging his jacket onto a sharp piece of metal, likely from a discarded locker...or a broken M16 Carbine. Who knows?109


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Edited many times, so might not be as bad as it was b4

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  • Prodigious.Mirth
    March 5, 2008

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    I thought it to be one hell of a read, likes the variey, loved the scenery and the imagery..again you establshi things so well it is hard to beleive there could be a dint wrong in it.. I like how you have taken a seemingly intersting object and created something more magical, not magical in you know spell like but just a good read..

    well done


  • Surreal Rhapsody
    January 9, 2008
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    I think I alreaay read this. ^.^ Its still awesome, great job. Good luck on the contest.


  • Shiki
    January 7, 2008
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    Lol added a nice touch to the ending still! I gave you hints about this hehe This was interesting! so write more!

  • Shiki
    January 7, 2008

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    Very interesting Plots

    Very interesting plots! You got here but if you wanna score better than the rest you got to show me more of this I still haven't felt the "powers" of the the godhoodness Will be expecting the next chapter in the contest in order for me to judge it better


  • matt101
    January 7, 2008

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    Awesome

    This is an awesome story plot... hell, id never have thought of something like this! lol

    there are a few mistakes in here... grammar and spelling and the like, i also noticed that when you're telling the girl's part (doesnt say a name btw) you used him in one of the sentences.

    it seems to be really forward as well. it would be nice to have some knowledge about the characters and what they are like and how they're all related.

    Lol, i like the powers your three gods have...that seems really cool, but you could have put their powers in later stories, explaining them in full about how they work and etcera.

    i really hope all three of em come together and KICK AZZZZZZZ against evil... people lol


  • karmaxandxcrayons
    January 4, 2008

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    Well, I like where the plot is going, but I'm going to be honest.

    Most of the time, you did not capitalize your "I"s, "I'm"s, etc. And the grammar wasn't the best.

    I didn't like how you were so straightforward in the beginning; I think you should have introduced the characters in a more interesting and entertaining way than just saying who they are.

    I also can't really relate to the characters. You didn't give the reader enough time to relate to them before you just had Evan "disappear" or whatever.

    I hope to see some more of this story though - I bet with a bit of editing, you could make it really spiffy!! Good job and good luck in the contest!

    Lissabeth

  • Surreal Rhapsody
    October 6, 2007

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    That was really entertaining! I love the asortment of characters, they're all so different from each other. Awesome job, I will definantly read some more. Good luck on the contestr!


  • Lostskins
    October 5, 2007
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    Interesting story! is "eeeeeeee" a word?


  • FallOfTheHero
    October 4, 2007

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    Damn!

    This is a sexy read! Very creative, and unique. Giving the characters a personality was a given here, and you expanded on it. Kudos, doot!


  • Violet Moodswing Greeters member
    September 30, 2007
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    Welcome to StoryWrite

    Thanks for entering this into the September new members contest. It was a very interesting piece of fiction or fantasy depending on what folks want to call it. I really enjoyed the read and am looking forward to future chapters.

    Best of luck in the contest.

  • Prodigious.Mirth
    September 29, 2007
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    this was an amazing write to showcase your brilliant talents- I cannot belive the way you have turned such ideas into this wonderfull peice of art work .. i loved it- the characters are more than interesting


    • Azzy Bear
      September 29, 2007
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      I LOVE YOU!

      Thank you, Thank You Thank YOU!!!!!!!


  • Andy Stephenson gold member
    September 29, 2007

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    Interesting.

    You have an interesting story going here. Even is becoming a god. What will he do now? You have typos, mispelled words, and left off several apostrophies. Thanks for entering this contest.

    Andy

    • Azzy Bear
      September 29, 2007
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      Ooops

      Well, that was my mistake, i made it up on the spot. And now i have this whole plot to cover, i swear Leminx's will be better.


  • Dreams of Insanity
    September 28, 2007
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    Oh my freaking god! You wrote about me!? My name is Evan, one of my best friends is emo, and I do have a black friend! Only one minor problem...I am a girl...

    No seriously this was a great read. I liked it a lot! I'll have to read some more of your work later.

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