The time flew by almost as if carried by an invisible stallion. School was about to start again and the days began to grow shorter. Jesse was still within the depths of the battle between his heart and his mind. There was so much more for him to think about! Well, he had to get over it somehow, and it had to be soon. When school started, he didn’t want to have girls hanging all over him again while he still had this “thing” for Bethany. He thought about this again on his way to Bethany’s house to pick her up so that they could go out for lunch. She had been so busy lately with her latest play that Jesse had hardly gotten time to see her, and he longed to hear her laugh and talk to him about the latest news from her life. 1
Dark clouds full of moisture covered the sky. The light of the sun was so thin that it looked almost as if it were night. Jesse knew Bethany would be in a very joyful mood. She loved the rain and everything about it. Jesse remembered back to when he used to watch her out his window as she spun around in the rain like a ballerina. He just had to laugh. He hadn’t seen her do that in a while. 2
Jesse pulled up to the playhouse and waited for Bethany to run from the safety of the roof out to his car. She jumped into her personal seat and got comfortable and hugged Jesse from the side. Jesse smelled the very familiar scent of her shampoo and the slight fragrence of the rain outside. 3
“Hey Jesse! What’s up?” she asked. Normal enough greeting between friends, but Jesse longed for more from her.4
“Well, I fixed the fence, I finished painting your room like you asked, and I wrote a new song for you,” Jesse paused for a moment. Bethany turned to him and smiled broadly.5
“For me?” Jesse shook his head and laughed. Of course it was for her, but he didn’t want her to know that.6
“I meant, for you to sing. That’s what I meant.” Bethany laughed.7
“Oh! Of course! That’s what you meant! I knew that.” Bethany just giggled again and watched the raindrops drip down the window as Jesse began to pull onto the freeway. The radio got turned on, and as always, Bethany was singing along. Jesse looked down at his gas gage. The pin bobbed close to that big letter E. He was going to run out of gas. Jesse pulled off the freeway and into an empty parking lot. Just as he did that, the car stopped. Jesse, in frustration, hit his steering wheel and growled. Bethany just laughed and opened her car door. 8
Jesse looked over at her, but Bethany was outside. Jesse opened his door and got out of the car, watching as Bethany walked to the middle of the parking lot, where rain poured down freely in streams. Bethany turned around to see Jesse watching her and she beckoned to him to come to her. Jesse looked around, and got out of the car, closing his door. He followed Bethany to where she now stood, staring up at the clouds, and letting the rain fall onto her face and roll back into her hair. Jesse stood beside her a moment, unsure of what to do when suddenly, Bethany looked and him and smiled, beginning to spin around and dance. Jesse smiled and laughed.9
“What are you doing?” he asked her through his deep laugh. Bethany looked at him like he was crazy.10
“Dancing! Come! Spin with me!” She cried through the pounding rain and thunder. When Jesse didn’t move, Bethany went over and took both his hands in hers and began to spin with him. Jesse’s mind raced. He loved the feeling of her small thin fingers in his hands and her laugh enveloping him like a warm blanket. He was content and seemed unable to control himself. As Bethany began to get dizzy, she swung them over to a brick wall. She leaned up against it and breathed heavily. Jesse leaned on the wall right beside her and just watched her. Her hair was dripping with water, her clothes clung to her body and didn’t seem like they wanted to let go. Jesse watched her breasts rise and fall slowly. He just couldn’t help himself. Jesse leaned over to her and kissed her on the cheek, then leaned close to her ear. Bethany could feel his warm breath skip across her face and it brought her chills. Jesse leaned as close as he dared and whispered softly in her ear,11
“I love you.” Bethany shivered and pulled away from him. She looked at him shocked and a bit bewildered. Jesse soon realized what he did and shook his head, looking calm and natural, or as natural as he could. “I meant, would you like to go to the dance with me?” Bethany’s face changed and she smiled sweetly at him.12
“Of course! I would love to!”13
Author notes
Here's part two everyone! Don't you love the suspense that I leave you with!
What did you think? Please comment!
Comments
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Great part two. I can really relate with Bethany and loving the rain and lucky me I live where it rains ALL the time. Gotta love it though. Best thing in the world. Very wonderful write you are very talented. Anyways I don't want to say anything else cuz I gotta go read part 3.
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omg omg....i am soo hooked on this story...what happens next!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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ooooohhh how cute! this is a great story. the rain makes it better
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BAM!
squee!! wheres the rest of it now? i love the rain thing, it was perfect! keep going it can't be over yet! -
Aw this was so sweet!
I'm going into my ninth year, and am just seeing my best friend after 2 months. He's a lot taller now, and hmm... lol.
This was very well written, and I hate and love the suspense. Lol! I do have one suggestion though:
"Jesse smelled the very familiar smell of her shampoo and the slight smell of the rain outside." Here, you say 'smell' a lot. You could change it slightly to read:
"Jesse breathed in the familiar scent of her shampoo, and the slight smell of rain outside."
Do you think that sounds better? Hope I helped, and ooh I agree with the comment above: more paragraphs!
-morgana
p.s. you're going on my favourites list; I want to read more about bethany and jess!
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Hey There,
Yes, I love the suspense you leave me with.. because if you told everything in one chapter that just wouldn't do.. people wouldn't want to read on! You're right about the rain, you mention it a lot.. you seem a lot like Bethany, actually.. hmm. Anyways, only suggestion I have is to maybe try and break it up into more paragraphs.. at the beginning you're talking about people's feelings, then you suddenly switch to the sky and how it looks.. great ideas, but maybe you need some seperation there. Fantastic work again though.. looking forward to the next part =)
Becca
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