Wolven Blood

A young girl sits alone on an old park swing. Her dark black hair hanging around her face like a curtain of black silk. Her eyes looked up at the moon, hanging full and round in the sky. Her eyes began to change as did her physical appearance. Her eyes changed slowly spinning until they looked like the eyes of a snake, twisted and insane they seemed to shine out a dark blood red. Bones cracking and shifting her body twisted and turned as she let out blood chilling scream that shifted slowly into a low howl. Her body was wolven in appeance but could still stand bi-pedal. Long claws grew from her finger tips sharpening changing into long sharp swordlike nails, that were at least three inches long and poisonus if they broke the flesh. Fangs hung low beneath her bottom jaw dripping the a mix of saliva and serpentine venom. Bloodred spikes ran from the top of her head to the tip of her long fluffy tail. As she howled black dragon like wings spread from her back, showing themselves to the world. Carefully she folded her wings and looked around for a sign of her human prey.

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  • Shadows Falling
    September 22

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    I like it. But there are somethings here that are out of place. Maybe I sound like some teacher, but u should re-read this a couple of times. Nice job, though.


  • Gothic-Serenity
    July 23

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    I'm interested in where this story will go, if you continue it. I like the description you put of both her change and her other form. Very good.


  • Bella-Cacciatore gold member
    March 5
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    Excellent description, a couple of spelling mistakes, is there going to be more? *hopeful*


  • MoonRoseWolf gold member
    October 6, 2007
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    This could be a really good description, but there were a lot of grammer and spelling mistakes that distracted me a little from the actual story.

    Overall though, I like this and I think it would be really good if you could maybe expand on this, well done!

    Good luck in the contest :D


  • LadyLionnir
    September 28, 2007

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    Oh my gosh! I love it! You do the same thing I do: the pain of transformation...not many people see the suffering a werewolf goes through in stories to become a wolf! The description was sooooo vivid too...I could picture all this physical pain and squirming and the way she turned so evil in the end. Such a great scene flowing through one paragraph...I can't believe it! Anyways, thank you for entering my contest! And good luck!!!

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