By the Stream

~*~

By the stream,
I craft my dream,
Living final days.

I do not know,
But I know what I sow,
By writing this note to you.

Your lovely smile
Was gone for awhile,
As I traveled by and by.

Your wondrous love,
Sweet as a dove--
Was lost upon me.

~*~

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(For contest: Her secret is that she loved him as much as he loved her.)

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  • FalopianTube
    October 21, 2007

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    Thanks for the harsh criticism on Stomp! Geeze...

    I appreciate it, thoug


  • Taylor Renee
    September 29, 2007

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    *Bashes head like Lana*

    This is going to be SOOOO hard to judge! lol!

    Andrew, this was fantastic. Very beautiful, and I am SOOOOOO glad you entered!



    This was just completely beautiful. You did a wonderful job, and the secret fit in perfectly.

    Very nice work!

    xoxo
    Tay

  • zac125
    September 28, 2007
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    This is a good start if it's not done, if it is done , I think you should add more to it.


  • DancingThroughLife
    September 27, 2007
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    AWWWWW.......This was really sweet


  • DaniCM
    September 26, 2007
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    awww

    awww... andrew that is really sweet =P.... i loved it


  • LadyLionnir
    September 26, 2007

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    Sniffle, sniffle

    Awww. It almost made me cry, I was trying to write a poem about someone leaving and had so much trouble doing so. Now, wow, you just surprise me with the way you write. It's too incredible! What you say just comes to life...and it's sooooo beautiful!!! My most favorite part was the first stanza and the two first lines:
    "By the stream,
    I craft my dream,"
    It caused me to read slower, I felt the calmness and...yay, GREAT JOB!!!!!


  • Raana
    September 26, 2007

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    This is very great!
    *head+desk* why must all the great writers enter this contest? WHYYYYY

    But really, I adore the message and everything about this. it's very perfect and the secret is so sweet! I thought it a bit contradicting since the prompt for the contest said that they were already in love, but then I realized it said the main character knew the other's love was true, it never said anything about the main character's love! So very very sweet. Good luck in the contest!

    I love it so much, and imagery it creates is amazing.

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