I aim my gun at the center of your throat.
You freeze automatically, mid-step.
You ask me "why?"
I tell you my reasons:
"I found out your secret.
You killed her for money."
You confess, crying,
but she is still dead.
One bullet wasted.
You fall to the floor.
Author notes
"somewhere I have never travelled,
gladly beyond;
your eyes have their silence." - for contest.
"I know your secret."
So I apologize if this isn't exactly a "beautiful" poem, but darn it, it was too fun to write about a revenge killing motivated by the discovery of a secret murder. Plus, it is EXACTLY 50 words, which means that I successfully made the word limit. Hurrah!
Awesome prompt.
Oh! And my sister is very much alive and living in Pittsburgh, if anyone cares. Heh.
In a list
A contest entry
- Another Beautiful Contest! by Taylor Renee.
225 points, ended October 10, 2007, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Glad to hear this is entirely fictional. Congrats on the trophy - it was well earned. This is one of the briefest poems I've read in some time, but it's no less satisfying because of that. Lengthy though they may be, I really enjoy all your titles - they add a whole other dimension to the poem, and, particularly in this case, flesh the story out a great deal. Nicely done. =)
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Cool,lol.
i agree with you on the getting revenge thing,hehe.
Keep on writing!!1
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Gawd, this isn't even a competition anymore, Delfishie. You win, hands down.
...EVERYBODY PUT YOUR HANDS DOWN!
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This. Was. Absoltely fantastic.
It was perfect. Just what I wanted. Really.
I loved it. It fit the sentence perfectly, and you, of course, had the right message
...I do not know who you are, if you're wondering
But this was fantastic. Really. I'm glad it's not true But it was awesome.
Everyone seems to be writing about love so far, so this was an awesome difference.
Thank you SO much for entering! And I give you extra brownie points for EXCATLY 50 words!
AWESOME work, here!
xoxo
Tay
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Well done!
I do care. Glad to know your sister is alive and well in Pittsburgh.
Anaya Roma
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, characters: 5.
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