For every sweet second of my time you give life. Red roses scattered on the bedspread when I awake, a classic gesture; simple and sweet.
You by no means say “I love you” but why state the apparent? My guilt is strong.
I have another.
You hold me tightly. I do not deserve this unconditional love.
Author notes
I read the rules.
Because I am cool.
Yay.
A contest entry
- Another Beautiful Contest! by Taylor Renee.
225 points, ended October 10, 2007, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - Hmm... by darkpaintedreams.
350 points, ended October 11, 2007, 35 entries
Honorable mention
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
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Thanks for entering my contest. This was really short but still great. I liked your choice of words in this. It was sweet yet sad. Great job on this and good luck.
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short sassy and sweet *the three s's* i love it. i love the part about the rose petals and then the last line oh heck i love the whole thing. great work
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i absolutley love this. [
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Thank you, Andrew
You're right, a dash would be better
I might change it now if I'm not lazy. My Word makes dash into ugly dots for some reason so I've made it a habit to avoid using them.
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Rather sad and emotional for just a few words. It's really good!
One thing though: "...when I awake, a classic gesture; simple and sweet."
It may go better like this "...when I awake (dash) a simple gesture, simple and sweet."
Sorry, I'm a bit of a stickler.
This was really good though (and Taylor really likes it lol).
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ROFL, Renee Your attempts to raise my confidence are much appreciated. Delfishie's entry = WIN, seriously, though.
And yes, you're right
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OMG.
I just read this again. And it rocks. Again.
I love how much you put into it, with the love, but also the secret. That was great. I loved that. It was sad, yet totally bittersweet. They're in love but she holds secrets
Right!? ...Please tell me I'm right
I love this, though. It was great.
Thank you so much for entering!!!
xoxo
Tay -
Thanks, guys! (And girls, I call everyone guys)
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hmm. Good one, I must say!!!!Short and good, sweet. Loved the red roses in your story
Good job!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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I really like this. It's short but sweet! that is usually the best kind. GREAT Job!
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Wow. This was really beautiful.
Seriously. It was so simple...yet sweet. Just what I wanted!
Roses are one of my weaknesses; putting them in there DEFINITELY got you an edge
This was just....wow. It really was great. Thank you SO much for entering!!!!
And good luck!!!! Not that you need that!!!!
xoxo
Tay
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Thanks, Renee! Roses are my weakness too. I would probably marry a serial killer if he bought me roses
Yay, I'm glad you liked it. Under 50 words contests = funstastic! (fun + fantastic)
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