He was such a little boy raised way out on a farm . He had no
brothers and sisters so he played with his imaginary friends who
he named each one . Donnie he liked to fight like cowboys
do, he had these things that tingled on his boots . Mason
he was the one that went fishing with me . Then there was Jack
he was a trouble maker always whispering in my ears .Saying go
ahead and do it there is nothing to fear . But they all called me
Patches, for my pants were old and I always had some patches on my
knees and my rear .
Its hard to play all by yourself when you are miles from town,
so I invented some of my very best friends they never let me down.
One day as I was fishing Mason sat right next to me .He looked
over into the water and there was only one reflection he did see.
He looked my way then asked me why arent I down there .I am
sitting right beside you why dont you share ? Patches leaned over
then saw what he saw and replied, cause your not real so your
vision just cant fall . Oh this made Mason very sad and he got up
to leave .Then Patches told him oh dont worry for I can see you
indeed . About that time Jack ran up and pushed Patches in . Oh
This made Patches so upset and he pulled himself out again . Jack
why are you so mean why can't you behave .Then Jack replied its the
way I play .
About then Donnie steps up I knew for the jingle I heard . I
replied hey there Donnie wont you come sit by my side . Keep
those others away from me for I am trying to fish .Then Donnie
turns and tips his hat and replied you boys Git . Every day they
played this way then one day Patches could see .That he needed real
friends ones that was as old as he . As he walked into the kitchen
he told his Mom . When are we ever going to town we have stayed
out here too long. She ruffled his hair and then replied where
are the friends you had . He replied well Donnie went on a trail
ride and Mason he is just mad . But Jack he is just too mean for
me to keep around .For he tells me to do things and pushes me
down .
His mom thought on it a bit then told him why not lets go . So
off to town they went along a narrow dirt road. As they drove into
town with so much to see. Patches forgot about the people around
for he couldnt believe what his eyes did see . As the day passed
and it was time to go Patches met this little girl with the
cutest button nose .Hi he replied and he took her hand then
turned to find his mom. I found a friend can we take her home
She said she wants to come along . Oh no Patches she has to stay
For her home is nearby . Then Patches couldnt understand what he
didnt want to hear . He held her hand so tightly and headed for
the car. I dont care what mamma says as long as I know where you
are. She made him let her go and headed back home . He was very
quiet she saw he was so very alone . When we get home you round up
your friends and meet me back at the car . We will take your
friends into town and you can show them all . He turned slowly
towards his mom and said but mom their not real . They were real
until you showed me a friend that I could feel . So from that day
on he was so sad to live so far away . From that little girl with
the button nose he had met that day .
When the school year started Patches didnt know but as his Mom
got him dressed . She told him son we are going to town and today
You will look your best . He smiled real big and jummped up and
down and ran out to the car . Hurry mom I want to get there before
it starts. As they drove up he looked and looked to find his
little friend . Then a hand slipped into his and thats where love
began . That little girl with the button nose remembered him .
Author notes
So many children have imaginary friends to play with and to talk to . They are as real to them as you and I but there comes a time when reallity shows them the difference within a touch of the real thing
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awww that is soo sad yet happy!!
cute!
i might of had one once. But mostly i had my bear Pooh.
i belived that he was real and i always talked to him
i put dypers on him
i fed him
i bathed him (not the greatest idea lol)
i took him almost everywhere
when i couldnt find him i would stay up all night crying until i found him
i still do cry when i cant find him
i tell him everything
hes the closest friend i have
i love him so much
he is the most plain tan bear with button eys
when i was little my dog chewd him up
but by the grace of god my mom sewed him bak together
he is now cross eyd n without a nose
but i still love him
he is what some say "ugly" but i dont care
its like your own child
he or she may not be "pretty"
but you love them anyway
they may have medical problems
but you still love them the same
thats the same with me n my bear
i love him
lol sorry to bore you with my story.
i just got lost in it
lol
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I remember my imaginary friends...but now they're ghosts. They stay in my room, except for Robert because he's an evil thing...
They all scare my friends...I love them all the same ^^
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aww that was adorable ! i love the way u wrote this and the subtle rhyming ! i agree, the ending was sweet !
excellent write
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this story/poem is cute and sweet.
I love the adventures of fishing and having the lil bugger of a friend being a bit of a menace and the ending is so sweet.
Very nice write! I love it!
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This is such a terrific tale and done is such a way that I was reading a bit before realizing it was a poem!
Much as I hate to pick nits, here are a few small things:
"he played with his imaginary friends who he named." The "each one" is understood and makes the sentence seem clumsy, so for the purpose of rhyme I'd suggest a comma "named, each one."
"There was Donnie(
he liked" Using the colon makes
a list.
"There was Mason(,) and yes indeed(,)" Here I would suggest starting with "Mason" and dropping "There was."
"whispering in my ear(-s)saying, "Go ahead---fear."
"and replied, 'You boys Git'."
Let me say there were a few other things but I got so involved in reading they got missed.
May I suggest pulling the lines together, using double space to seperate verse?
Remember that suggestions are only my opinion. Changes or not, I love this piece!
Jim
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Play Jazz64
Thankyou for the great comment and the helpful hints you gave to me on my story . I am sorry it took me so long to check my messages but I have been getting a collection of my poetry for our men in the service so faar I have twenty eight and they are posted on works in progress but they are all completed -
storieuntold
Thankyou so very much for reading my work . I just started writing again on the story writes and I am usually always on the poetry section under the same user name .Almost all my poetry are little stories of life as I have seen and experienced it through my eyes .I hope you visit sometimes and thankyou again for the helpful comment .
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Oh my goodness, this...I couldn't stop reading it! Imaginary friends have NEVER reached me on that level of deepness before! Patches had all those friends...but they weren't real, some were even mean but when he found that girl all I could do was melt! It was so sweet and precious and true! I may sound strange but this made me insane with a search for words...you wrote it so well, too. A poem I never wanted to end! Good job, I'm serious...I wish there was more applauding smileys.
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Master Of Darkness
Thankyou so for the comment on my story Patches I love to write stories in poetry form and in regular story form but poetry is my love . I have over 800 in the poetry section and all of them are stories its my style -
storiesuntold
Thank you so very much for the lovely comment . I just started getting back to my stories now and then but most of my poetry are like stories to under the user name storiesuntold there I have over 800 should you ever want to check it out .
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