Lead Us Not To Temptation1
“So you have captured this girl for me have you?” Asked Ursula, poison dripping from her voice.2
“Yes Milady, she resides in my hut and will dwell there for the time being. Unless you wish me to bring her to the dungeon.”3
“No my dear, that won’t be necessary.” She said in a low growl. 4
Romericco backed away, planning to head through the passage that led him outside into the desolate night. 5
“Romericco” She called softly. “Romericco darling where are you going.”6
“You have no further use for me. I’ll take my leave,” He said turning to face her icy glare.7
“You don’t seek your reward,” she asked with a deadly singe of passion. She walked toward him, the flames from the fireplace dancing in her eyes. She lifted her lips to his ears and said, “You have done what I asked. If you are ready, I shall give you my reward to you.”8
Romericco’s eyes widened as he strained the muscles in his chest. The back of his palms began to sweat with the thought of what Ursula was intending to do. 9
A scarlet grin snaked across her face as she ran her hands up Romericco’s chest, pushing his trench coat to the floor. She grasped his neck and he felt her tongue writhe within a crease of the skin on his neck. He gasped and a shiver went up his spine. He blinked his eyes furiously and tried to focus on his plans for the evening. His body was rigid within her gripping embrace. She pulled him to her and shook her soft golden curls out of her face.10
“What’s wrong Ricco? You don’t want this…” She jerked him toward her suddenly, his lips now tingling with desire for the ones barely touching his. “Or do you” she mouthed.11
Romericco breathed deeply and closed his eyes as she pushed him to her glorious four-poster bed of black satin. He cried out softly as she snaked her fingers around the buttons of his shirt. As he breathed in the sweet smell of tainted lust, he felt his fangs slick from his gums. Seeing this, she smiled, revealing her protruding white canines. She kissed his chest up to his neck. At his shoulder she stopped, nuzzling his skin with her nose. She ran her tongue over it, then without warning, sank her perilous fangs into his flesh.12
Romericco cried out in painful pleasure as he felt the gentle coolness of his own blood gushing over his neck. He contorted his face with pain, etching into every crevice of his body. His chest rose and fell with every drop of his essence that fell from his craving body. Slowly, she withdrew from him and licked her lips. She bent close down to his ear and whispered, “Do you still want your reward?”13
Author notes
choice 4a No this will not be in the final novel. This is a bit to adult for a teen book. This was specificly written for a contest. If anyone asks, I'm 187 years old.
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Wow. This is awesome. And really cool. This is an amazingly dark story and passionate. Wow, this is a really cool story. Continue it. Please!! This is a wonderful dark write that is definitely appealing to one's dark senses and it's definitely mind boogling. Good Luck in the contest and keep up the good work.
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Lusting,Gothic, and Hott
Hmm, excellent work. Nice job for starters. This piece reminds me of a story Ive ran into or a show I have seen in my time. The story like piece was just as perfect as any set of lyrics Ive ever heard.
I really enjoyed when you said " Lead Us Not Into Temptation" Thats like a great way of saying dont your lust and temptations make the best of you. Almost as if greed is our enemy as much as lust.
You can feel the pain and lust. You can feel the emotion.
"Romericco’s eyes widened as he strained the muscles in his chest. The back of his palms began to sweat with the thought of what Ursula was intending to do.
A scarlet grin snaked across her face as she ran her hands up Romericco’s chest, pushing his trench coat to the floor. She grasped his neck and he felt her tongue writhe within a crease of the skin on his neck. He gasped and a shiver went up his spine. He blinked his eyes furiously and tried to focus on his plans for the evening. His body was rigid within her gripping embrace. She pulled him to her and shook her soft golden curls out of her face."
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Absolute perfection, I love everything about this..I now look forward to reading more of your work...good luck in this contest
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Wow this is amazing!!! I love it!!! Just everyting was so captivating!!! Thanks for entering and good luck
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OMG..absolutely kick ass.. loved it
dark & very vampirish!! *Good Luck*
$Mark$
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Wow..... this was great!!! I like your talent in storytelling, this had me not wanting it to end!!! Nicely done
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OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!! Wow!! I really like the way you wrote this. It's so... so...
I can't find the word.
I really, REALLY liked this. It's so dark, and so vampire0-y, and...
Ok, now I'm just rambling.
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This is a nice dark write. I like the dark vamp writes. I've only posted one in all the time I've been on this site but I do enjoy reading the writes of others. Thanks for entering the contest and good luck.
Victoria Lin
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