they walk the nights1
just to give us frights2
they sink there fangs into your skin3
your body fills with little pins4
numb you go5
if they care it doesnt show6
the taste of your blood feeds there soul7
your under there total control8
it feels like forever9
pain you wont endever10
time ticking11
your blood dripping12
left to fate 13
from the one you hate14
Author notes
oki think its done maybe a few changes later but now its ok
music
ther you go babe
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WOW! This is great! You really made it scary, but amazing! -
ah youll get over it well except if you get bit then itll haunt you well that wont be a long time till that happens mawhahaha!! oh well later im glad you liked it
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Another dark vampire write. Damn and I've been listening to U2 so now the words ' fingers slipping, blood is dripping' will haunt my dreams and I will probably have the images to match.
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Excellent job here, i joined the poem although you have some selling errors. Other then that I thought the poem was great, sending chills up my spine.
-karr
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thanx for the comment
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this was a good poem, well written indeed. it is very poetic and pretty...well not pretty but i cant think of another word right now to describe it...well cheers on the contest -Grace
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This is a very good poem. It has a nice flow and image of a vampire. A little startling in fact. lol
Excellent write!
Kayla -
im havin a lil prob with my mom at the moment ill try and get back to it soon. later!!
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Truth has been told, good job and dont worry I wont give you an A just because your my bf. Well love you.
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