I woke up that morning hating myself as usual. This time I hated myself even more because it was the first day of high school. Let me tell you, being a freshman sucks. Especially when you're me. Going to the same high school as all your 'friends', the perks of living in the suburbs, right. Wrong! I wish I could get away from them, but I can't.1
My morning routine. That, well... it's the same every morning.(DUH!) I wake up, look at myself in the mirror, and say 'I hate you.' I go take a shower, get dressed, don't even bother to fix my hair, and look in the mirror and say 'I hate you'.2
However, the whole point to the story is to tell you about the weirdest thing that happened to me that morning. My reflection said "I hate you too," then she laughed. I know what you're thinking, 'send out the loony truck,' right. Well, I'm not crazy. 3
"What did you say?" I asked anxiously. 4
"I said, I hate you too" my reflection replied. I blinked. Then my reflection completely changed. She looked prettier and neater. This was weird. So weird that I decided it was a sign telling me not to skip school, so I went to school.5
I think it's weird how people stare at you when you wear all black. Eh... never understood that. 6
School was a pain. It's like they were waiting to come into the bathroom and tease me. 'They' are Josie and her henchmen, Lisa and Morena. 7
"Hello! Samantha, how was your summer." Josie asked me.8
I gave no reply.9
"Aw. Samantha's trying to be a big girl. Isn't that just adowable!" Lisa and Morena said in the most annoying voices. 10
My reflection seemed to frown and then sigh. "Oh my gawd! That Josie is just so annoying, don't you think?" 11
I was in such a state of shock, I had to force myself to nod. I whispered "can't they hear you?" 12
"Who?" she asked. I turned around. 13
They were gone.14
The bell had rang. I was late for Science, so I decided I might as well skip class. I sat looking at the mirror waiting... just waiting for something to happen. I knew that beautiful girl in the mirror would talk to me. 15
"What you waiting for?" she asked.16
"Um, Are you real? How come you don't look like me? How come you talk? Are you real?" I asked, trembling a bit. 17
"Hello, Einstein, I'm you. You can become me if you start believing in yourself." she smiled warmly. 18
I frowned. "What is that supposed to mean," I shouted, "Don't insult me!"19
"Calm down, sorry. I'm here to help you through this school year. Now let me tell you, this school year will be hell, but..." she grinned "I'll help you get through it."20
Wow, I thought to myself. I was in total shock.21
"Now go to class, it's better to be there late than not be there at all." She told me impatiently. She grinned. I grinned backed, knowing this would be an exciting school year. 22
I actually went to class. On the way, I even thought about fixing my hair after Science class.
Author notes
i hoped you like it
BTW Im new at this
I corrected what i saw, i saw alot. hope you like it better knowwww
huh, HUH???
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Very good
This is the second start of a good story, I like this one, believe it or not I well remember the first day of high school, I went to a scool where I knewonly about four people. this girl needs to listen to her alter.
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write more PLEEEEEEEEEEASE!
this was soooooooo cool!!!!!!!!!!
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this started off in a typical middle school emo fashion but I liked the twist you have. It's not the subtlest delivery I've ever seen but I did like it. The end was good. surprising for me, I'm glad I didn't just stop after the first paragraph.
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Good Job
It reminds me of a strange type of pingpong
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Intresting. That was a great idea for a story, totally origional. I wish I had an alter ego talking to me from inside a mirror... What fun that would be! Great write. Well done.
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This is awesome!! Are you writing more? Cuz I'm hooked! I like this a lot, it's wierd yet cool. Great job no complaints
Illuminated *KT*
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But the whole point that I am writing this story - I would change this to "The whole point to this story is" do not use but at the beginning of a sentence. This is very good I love the story idea plus the fact your main caracter has my name is a plus lol. This story was easy to follow and very intersting - nice job
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quite good for being new at this. i hope you keep writing, because you can only get better from here.!
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Huh, intriguing. I get the impression the girl in the mirror is her alter ego, an unconscious version of herself that she wants to be on some unkown level but needs some kind of impetus to achieve. If that makes any sense... *laughs* A very interesting story - I can't tell if you plan on continuing it or not, but it definitely has potential. Nicely penned!
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Cool concept =)
Are you writing more?beginning: 1, ending: 5, characters: 5.
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if your alter-ego is trapped in the mirror i would bring a small pocket mirror to school so it can tell me all the answers and stuff.
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Creepy
But a fantastic story. If you wanted to, this could be the beginings of a good Novel.
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I woke up that (the-romove) morning hating myself as usual. 1
(")What did you say,(") I asked anxiously . "I said I hate you too" 3
Well, that was a little creepy... Origonal yes. It could be a little smoother though, it seems a little off in a few places (wording), but otherwise a very good piece.
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noice
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This needs some grammar and punctuuation work, especially around speech. Apart from that, a highly original story! Write more of it, I really enjoyed it.
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Thank you. I'll start revising it when Homework ain't killing me.
h.w sucks. Any way, glad you enjoyed it.
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It's pretty interesting, and while I've never read a story about a girl who talks to her relfection (who also talks back), I have read stories similiar to this with the same point and theme. Grammar and spelling are decent here, but could be worked on. For a start, this is a pretty good story. Thanks for sharing and keep working.
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thanks. I know the punctuation is a complete mess. Its much easier to just type it as it coming to you. Stopping and correcting is such a hassle. lol. glad u like it. _nora
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I enjoyed it. Though, it's a little fragmented at places. You can work on grammar and punctuations as well. At some places, it's not clear who is speaking, so you might want to fix it. anyhow, a good read.
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thanks, I know that my punctuation isn't peachy keen. LOL its like I can Tell The whole story but I cant write it down (or type). Thanks for the comment, I'll look over it when I dont have so much h.w . Thanx _nora
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The ideas are great for this story, so seeing herself one way, may make her be that way...well thast what I get from this, just a few nits below.
reflection said I hate (you) too, then laughed
School was (a) pain. Its like they were
I even though(t) about
Sarah.
beginning: 3, language: 3, plot: 3, ending: 3, dialog: 3, characters: 3.
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Thanks! Glad u enjoyed it. I cant even believe I missed that, I read 1000x LOL thanks _nora
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Awesome!!!!
this i g storythat is well deserving of its own series. i mean wow this is good.i cant even find anything slihtly wrong with this thing! i realy hope you turn this to a series.!
Keep writin!~Z
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Thanks. Glad u enjoyed it. Goin on shameless actually works LOL _nora
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