HER TEARS flowed down her face joining the blood on her mouth, turning it a lite pink. The clicking of the lock on the door ends her hope of escape. "How could this happen?" She needs to remember.
The pain is everywhere. Darkness surrounds her, she can't fight it as it over comes her. She gladly gives in to it. Just alittle release from the pain. She think's "rest" that's what I need. Regain your strength. She know's he'll be back and she has to be ready...
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Ok I see that this has chapter so ill give out help then give my comment. The beginning has HER TEARS is it supposed to be like that or was it by accident. turning it a lite pink, should be light. The lock on the door ends her hope of escape should be ended her hope of escape. She needs should be she needed I think. Im not quite sure. Also the part she speaks shouldn't have quotes. Thats for when someone speaks. Just alittle should be just a little. same thing with rest with the quotes.
I like this it draws me into it and I want to read more. I cant wait to read chapter one. Ill be doing it now. GREAT WORK!!!!!!!!
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