Strength

“True Strength is being able to hold it all together when everyone else is expecting you to fall apart.” She told me and walked away. Well, Screw it. Who even cares anymore? Not me, that’s for sure. I’m sure later I would regret letting myself go and end up hating myself for it, but right now I couldn’t care less. I didn’t care if she knew she had broken my heart or if she knew I would never get over her. Couldn’t care less. I actually kind of wanted her to know how much she hurt me. 1

I felt my body easing to the hard concrete ground. I sat down in the middle of the universe, it felt like. I felt a tear forming in the corner of my eye, but I didn’t wipe it away. I wanted the tears to come; I wanted sadness to overcome me. For me, it was the right thing to do. It felt good. Several more tears ran down my lightly tanned cheeks. I swiped some hair from my face. I leaned up against my school’s outside walls. I knew I should stop crying. All sorts of people could see me crying to my heart’s content, but I couldn’t stop myself. I didn’t want to stop. I saw people give me weird looks. Sympathetic looks, as if they wanted to come sit with me but they didn’t. Pathetic looks, looking down on me as of I were the most pathetic thing in the world. I wasn’t the most pathetic thing though, I wasn’t pathetic at all. I had gotten my heart crushed, just like any other person. I just chose to express my feelings in public, for my fellow students to see. I sat there for awhile, just crying. Crying until I had nothing left in me. I was never one to cry, but today that wasn’t the case. 2

Through my tears I saw faded yellow buses driving off in the distances, along with my heart. 3

Author notes

Something I thought of, on the spot. Just wrote it down. One of the only short storie (thingys lol) I have. thanks for readin :]]

"True Strength is being able to hold it all together when everyone else is expecting you to fall apart.” -Not sure who said it though. =D thanks.

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  • Silver Dancer silver member
    January 19
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    ow....... poor guy i feel sorry for him great story


    • Melli
      January 19
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      yes, he is quite unfortunate. Haha. Well, thanks for reading, commenting, and hosting the contest. mmthanks.


  • On.Cue
    March 30, 2008
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    That was sad, but I think you could have written it in a way that emotions were stronger or in a way that the story itself gave a much bigger impact on the readers.

    I'm not sure what category this fit into.
    I did clearly state to put what option your story would be in and gender, age, and favorite quote. Reading does pay off sometimes...

    Thanks for entering =)


  • Greeneyes15
    March 16, 2008
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    omg... u have no idea but this seriously like just happened to me in realy life! wierdness! anyway, great job! it was an enjoyable read and i liked it alot. i loved the quote too, i might just have to write that one down in my quotebook!thank you so much for entering my contest and good luck!

    peace&love,
    greeneyes


  • beezy92
    January 26, 2008

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    I liked the quote at the beginning. You've entered this in another of my contests...for some reason I liked it better this time. Nice read. Good job and good luck in the contest. Thanks for entering (=


  • Ayesha Raees
    December 26, 2007

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    AWWWW
    very sad and touching
    wanted me to rush to the crying person and comfort him!
    lolzzz

    good job!
    though, a little more description would have been great!


  • IxLovexElphiex
    December 24, 2007

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    really good

    This was full of emotion and I loved it! Just long enough to get the point across! Great grammer, thanks. Thanks for entering and GOOD LUCK!


  • lia.
    December 20, 2007

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    great

    that's so sad. you did a great job writing this story, even though it was sad i though it was great that you added that she was crying in front of everyone instead of by herself. keep on writing!


  • beezy92
    December 11, 2007
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    aw

    that's so sad. but well put.good job, no mistakes that I could see. good luck in the contest!


  • Kevan gold member
    December 11, 2007
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    This was good, and I actually really liked it but I don't think it's right for my contest. I had wanted a story about gay sex between a female and famale or more preferably, a male and male... however this wasn't very, well.. erotic, haha.
    Anyways, good luck in your other contests.
    -Kevan

  • LauToTheRen
    September 15, 2007

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    So good

    your a great writteri don't know why i have to kepp telling you!
    this is a great example on how you've grown as a writer and as a person. Keep writting stories like this its were your strenghts lay.


  • asthray.heart
    September 13, 2007

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    This was really good, sad Emotional how she sat and cried in front of everyone.

    ~Lady Madeline.

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