I sit alone in the darkness. Waiting.Waiting for him to come back to me. Can he Hear my cries? Can he Feel my tears? Can he sense my breaking heart? God only knows such a fact. How can this be that he cant see me? Is it because im sitting alone in the darkness. I just walk past everyone as if im invisible. Can he see me now? Can he see the pain hes caused me? Or does he look past it? I think I should move on, something tells me to. Wait its my heart. Ill give him one last chance.He needs to Prove his love to me, as i return to sit alone in the darkness..... Waiting.....
A contest entry
- Hearts wrapped in evil energy by Jack Necron.
100 points, ended October 14, 2007, 13 entries
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WooT!
I felt like this a few days ago. I know those emotions are deep. And I really enjoyed reading this. Fantastic write.
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Great write. Welcome to story write. I hope to read more of your work soon.
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Very good. You can feel the emotion in this small piece greatly.
Good luck in the contest.beginning: 5, language: 3, plot: 3, ending: 5, dialog: 4, characters: 5.
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There is something behind your writing that speaks of being left behind by a lover or someone you love in secret.
It makes for good reading, and for getting out unspoken words.
Keep it up.
~Lady Madeline.
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