There is something different about you, like what’s on the outside is masking who you are on the inside, who are you? How come you hide beneath this demeanour of coldness and cruelty, I can see who you really are on this inside, I don’t understand what happened, but I need to save you. That is all I know. You aren’t like that because you want to be. Please tell me more about you.
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Lady Madeline.
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A contest entry
- Short and Sweet by abba12.
175 points, ended October 2, 2007, 38 entries
Honorable mention
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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its short, and well done. i only know one other person who writes in a similar style but since i read alot of her work i can appriciate the dificulty of pulling this off effectivly. I know someone who has said similar words to me and i think everyone wishes at one time or another to have these things said. its very well done. unfortunatly its technicly not a story, its prose, and this is particuarly a story contest because its easier to potray things in poems and prose. but this is certainly worth something. good work!
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I think all of us wants to be saved, one way or another
the notion of a savior thrills me, excites me... you write of true things. Most of the time, people are not like books that you can easily read. Reading between the lines may get us to be understood better, "seen" better...
I'm sorry I just ranted about my emotions
Ahhhh, Ebb, I enjoyed this... short but really, it made me think of so many things Thanks for this ^_^
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how short.. and different.. i realy like it.. its short enough for me to read and gud enough for me to read AGAIN! lol keep up the gud work angel xoxox
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I like you r story keep it up!!
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