Love`s like faith ;;
it`s believing in something you can`t see,
believing in something you can`t touch.
It`s about sacrificing
yourself for the ultimate goal ;;
about overlooking what everyone else refuses to see.
It`s like a game of chance ;;
a game of strategy cause sometimes we don`t make the right
moves or even the right choices.
It`s about learning what those right moves are.
Love`s complicated ;; it`s full of expectation cus it`s complex & draining,
asking you to give yourself to someone when you`re afraid.
It`s about giving someone the ability to destroy you, & trusting them not to.
A contest entry
- Conversations with my 13 year old self... by artemis the hunter.
190 points, ended October 26, 2007, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - Anything and Everything by Frozen Angel.
225 points, ended November 8, 2007, 36 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I really liked this and I totally agree with you. All I have to criticize is the word "cus" in the third to last line. It's bending the rule "write intellegently," but it's a fantastic poem! Thanks for entering my contest.
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aww so sweet!! it flowed together so gud!! aw keep up the great work
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This flowed well, enjoyed reading this, good luck in the contest.
Sarah.
beginning: 3, language: 3, plot: 3, ending: 3, dialog: 3, characters: 3.
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I loved this. It is so true. It flowed really well. I like the background as well. Good luck in my contest!
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5.
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Good ending for this, closes it well and speaks alot of the missing trust that seems to always come with love.
Goodluck.
~Ebb.
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