Rand knew he was not supposed to go into the forest. His parents drilled this into his head every day.
"No playing in the forest! Many creatures are in there, and most of them dangerous!"
His mothers words were now racing through his head and he had a rush of adrenaline flowing through his veins becuase of the fact that he was disobeying her orders. As he got closer to the edge of the forest, Rand began to slow down. Doubts began to enter his mind
"What will my mother do if I go in here?"
Then another thought came into his head.
"If I don't go in here then I will never know whats really there."
On that note, Rand stepped into the shade of the forest.
As soon as he entered the forest, it was like entering a different world. The sunlight was faded and took on a dull green shade. The noise of the world he was used to petered out, and sounds that were exotic to his ears were being blasted all around him. Looking around at all the trees, Rand could not understand why his parents would not want him to venture into somewhere as beautiful and peaceful as this. Looking at the ground, Rand noticed that amongst the fallen leaves and bugs, there seemed to be a path that lead deeper into the forest. Rand soon fell into step with this path, following it to who knows where. After walking for about a half hour, Rand came into a clearing. It was the most beautiful sight he had ever seen. Flowers of every color were growing all over the field of soft green grass. In the middle there was a magnificent apple tree. Flowing beneath the shade of the apple tree was a small brook, and amidst the brook there was the shine of the scales of plenty of small fish. Rand went to the tree and sat down underneath it. Grabbing an apple, he contentedly began to eat.
"It's not nice to steal you know."
Startled, Rand jumped up and looked around.
"Wh-Who's there?" he stammered.
"Well, if you keep looking around the ground you will never see me. Now, if you were to happen to take a glance upward..."
Looking up Rand was shocked to see a pale white face staring at him from the branch of the apple tree.
"You are a strange looking animal. You look like me, yet your ears aren't pointed like mine. And you also take things without asking." said the face looking at Rand.
"You also smell kind of bad."
"Hey!" exclaimed Rand.
"Who are you to be making fun of me! Your the one who looks strange!"
The face dipped up into the tree, and soon after a combonation of legs, arms, and feet were dropping out of the tree. Soon enough Rand found himself looking at a tall, pale, blonde haired boy with pointed ears and a seemingly unnatural grace.
"My name is Galdinol and I am a wood elf. Now that I have told you my name it is your turn to explain to me what it is you are exactly." said the elf.
Astounded, Rand looked at him in disbelief. An Elf! Elves are real? He could not believe his eyes.
"My name is Rand. I'm a human being."
"Ahh a human! And tell me human, are all of your kind as rude as you? And do they smell as bad as you do?"
Now Rand was getting angry.
"Who are you to call me rude! I did not do anything to you!"
"You stole from my tree!"
"Unintentionally!" exclaimed Rand. "If I had known this tree was owned by anyone i would have never done it!"
The elf, looking at the human realized the one fault all humans have. Taking without asking and without thinking about consequences and then asking for forgiveness later.
"Well human, its allright I suppose. I think though you need to go home. It's getting dark and all the bad things come out at dusk."
Rand, looking around realized it was getting dark and he probably should get home. He was in enough trouble as it is without having to worry about missing his curfew.
"Would you mind if I came back to visit some time Galdinol?" asked Rand hopefully.
After looking at Rand for some time Galdinol smiled.
"Anytime! Just make sure before you take anything, you ask me."
"Ok!" said Rand as he turned and made his way back to the path.
Rand knew his life was going to be changed from this point on.
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Comments
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I wonder why his parents didn't want him in the forest? Is there something hidden deep inside the forset that is dangerous? Why can't he go there?
I'm interested... and I like it.
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Nice story, but I caught a few grammar errors.
"mothers" should be "mother's."
"Now that I have told you my name[,] it is your turn to explain to me what it is you are exactly[,]" said the elf."
"Ahh[,] a human!" Usually, only one h is used when "ah" is meant to represent excitement; "ahhh" normally indicates fear or pain.
Avoid repeating words in a very short space, especially adverbs: "forest, Rand began to slow down. Doubts began to enter his mind." Use "began" only once.
Other than that, I really enjoyed the bits of humor in this piece. The elf's comment on humans "smelling bad" was priceless. :-)
Thanks for entering the contest, and good luck!
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I quite liked it. I could see the forest, and you used some good images. Sorta funny as well, really great!
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This is really good! It takes me back to stories like LOTR and Chronicles of Narnia! great job, and good luck in your contests!
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awww
i like it!
its really nice and exciting and i totally loved the innocence that surrounded that scence. Also you described very well too and i like it a lot!
You should have described the feelings that were going on in Rand in the later chapter because you did it in the beginning.
i like it though, it has expression and is exciting...
good luck in the contest!
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this is good. Thanks for entering my contest. you have an ok chance of winning
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awwwwwww an Elf! thats so cute!!!! Im starting to like this story. I will now go read chapter 2. Keep up the great work!
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weeeee!!! I love elves!!!! Thanks for entering this into my contest!!!!
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I liked it! It was a good read and very entertaining!
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Wow. I really like this. I love fatasy and fiction so this made we want to read.
I think if you descrided Rand a little more it be alot more visualistic. either way i enjoyed it alot=]
I can't wait for part 2!beginning: 4, language: 5, plot: 4, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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