I was walking down the Seven-Eleven, when I saw this really hot guy. He had long, brown hair, a katana, and nothing else. The rest of his body was see-through. I don't even see his face, because he's so hot.
I walked up to him, and talked to him for a little bit, we both exchanged conversation about Mega Man Battle Network 4, and even tried to play Kingdom Hearts 7. But, unfortunately for us both, we had only a Game Gear, and a pirated copy of Street Fighter III: 3rd Strike.
So, we both bid farewell, and left the area. I didn't leave, and kept following him. He didn't notice me, because nobody notices people when they're being following. The boy kept walking, until he found a pink house, I think it's his house. He went inside, and started watching YuGiOh: The Abridged Series, on MAX Volume, with no earphones on. Did I mention I was behind him, and squealing with glee? No.
I have ten.
I tapped the hot guy on the shoulder, and he started screaming, but it was a hot scream, because he did it.
I finally told him to touch me on the chest, but he punched me in the jaw, really hard.
Dragging me by the ear, he threw me out the door, and said one last thing:
"What the fuck is your problem? I don't go out with guys!"
Author notes
If you think I was actually trying when I wrote this, please die. This is supposed to make fun of every romance story made, ever.
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ROFL!!!! That was so fuzzing funny!
Random and creative. Great job! 
~*Princess*~
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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I really like this and wish u luck!
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Ha Ha lol, I guess you done the purpose of your story lol.
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lol ha ha ha. That was freakin hilarious. No joke. I have a gay friend and he always talks about how hot some guy is and i always make fun of him. lol. thank you for entering.
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Amusing
Okay, this was just...amusing. I'm not sure it was quite right for my contest, but it's definitely the most unique story submitted
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Hahahahaha.... nice.
I approve. It's short and it's not deep at all, but it certainly makes a point and made me giggle.
So thanks, and good luck!
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Well... if you are not taking your story seriously how do you expect others to, especially when it is entered in contests...Anyway i don't like being rude. If you meant it to be funny, it kinda is, i actually found it amusing. But it couldn't stnad succesfully as a parody of every love story written. I have to say i didn't see the twist in the end coming, i laughed with that.
Anyway...i wonder if that's how you always write or if this single piece was meant to be like this. -
I don't think you understood the rules.
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Or read them.
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"I have ten" ?? ummm huh? ten what?
I actually read this aloud with a valley girl accent and it was quite amusing. Good luck in the contest -
Okay I get that you didn't actually try with this and you are making fun of romance stories...fair enough...just not seeing the disturbing factor of it. It all just seems a bit too random. If it's a "I don't give a crap how this turns out" story...not sure why your entering it in a contest...but okay then lol
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Wow, this is so random. Very interesting. I have no idea - why in the world was the guy walking around with a sword? Heh.
Very interesting. Dude's such a stalker. -
I like the idea that the person following the guy is a guy, but it really needs some work, for me there a lots of comas, some not needed, (I am no expert so I could be wrong on that part.)
But I do think this story could be great, just really needs work. It's supposed to make fun of romance stories, how, I didn't get it, if it did.
He had long,(delete coma here.) brown hair, a
when they're being following(followed). The
have ten.(have ten, what?)
Sarah.
P.S...my style is teenage romance....
beginning: 3, language: 3, plot: 3, ending: 3, dialog: 3, characters: 3.
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The last part was kind of funny, but the rest of it was mainly romance...it was pretty good. Could use a little tweaking but it was still pretty good.
Keep up the good work! It would be best fit if you added a bit more description to this story...
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What in the world???? lol
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Wow, that's great that you had fun writing this story. However, I must ask you, politely this time, to please go back to my contest site and take a gander at some of the rules. You're breaking them. If you fix nothing else, at least fix the word count as the minimum is 500, and I know you can extend this to that, if not more.
You have one day to fix it or message me and let me know you're working on it. In the event that you do neither within the alotted time, you will be disqualified.
Thanks for the contest entry.
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