Repeating the Cycle

            The single warrior walked along the road, oblivious to the monstrous chain of men coming in his direction, but not for him.  They marched along the road, knowingly walking straight to their doom.  The single man stopped for a moment and looked at them, shaking his head ever so slightly.  As he did so, a man stepped forward from the crowd, an officer who just happened to be the most idiotic man on the face of the earth right then, as far as the warrior was concerned. 1

            “HEY!!  What the hell are you doing soldier?!” 2

            The man stood there and stared at him, empty eyes simply filling in for what might as well have been empty sockets. 3

            “I’m retreating,” he stated simply. 4

            “What?  You can’t retreat!  Where are your men, why aren’t you still fighting?” 5

            “My men were slaughtered.  All of them.  So, I’m retreating,” he again replied simply. 6

            “I command this force you see here.  I ought to have you court-martialed for cowardice!” 7

            “Go ahead.  It won’t matter, not after what I just saw.  All those enemies…they just appeared…and surprised us.  Well, you can guess how that went.” 8

            “That doesn’t matter.  You fight to the death!” 9

            The man simply shook his head, as he realized this was getting him nowhere. 10

            “You don’t understand.  You want us to fight to the death.  To do so requires one to lose his humanity, and I cannot allow this to happen to me.  I will not turn into some animal forced to fight just so you can stay in command of your troops so you can get them killed just like mine were.  Every one of my men, I saw it happen to them.  They became animals, fighting just so they live for another second longer.  They had lost their humanity, and I decided that I could not let this happen to me.  But you would not understand.  Have you ever stepped onto a battlefield?” 11

            The second man simply stood there, dumbfounded.  He hadn’t expected this, and the man’s question had caught him off-guard.  He had no answer, and the first man noticed this immediately. 12

            “No, you haven’t.  How can you know what happens on the battlefield when you are not there?  How can you possibly have any idea at all what goes on, what happens to men as the battle progresses?  It never matters if they’re winning or not; if they’re winning, they become animals because they see victory in sight.  If they’re losing, they become animals because they know they have nothing left to lose.  It never matters, really.  But you wouldn’t know about any of that.  You’re just a fool looking for glory that rightly belongs to your men, and not you.  You’re just a political scumbag hoping to make yourself look good in front of our nation’s leader.  13

            “I remember when I was like you.  A general once told me exactly what I’m telling you, and as you’re walking back after seeing your men die for you after no longer being men, you will tell the next man in line, and he will not believe you.  I just hope your political aspirations are more successful coming through that your military ones will be.  I wish you, and your men, well.  May they rest in peace, as well as your soul.” 14

            And with that, the single warrior, his name unknown, even now, turned away from the second man and walked away, his sword dragging along the ground and never saying another word to anyone else in the column.  The second man looked at his back, bewildered at first, then shrugged, and joined in the column again, and marched forward, to repeat the cycle the lone warrior had spoken of.15

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I wanted to write another (very) short story about war, but I wasn't sure just what to write it about.  So, I just wrote what was on my mind, and just let the words flow.  I hope you enjoy it.

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  • -BlackKnight-
    October 23, 2005
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    Yeah, my stories early on were a lot better than my early poems, and there are a few I'm still quite proud of; I doubt I'd ever be able to get them published, but I enjoyed writing them, and even enjoy reading them from time to time.

  • p b without the j
    October 23, 2005
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    You're just glad it wasn't you in that bunny suit.
    This was a little bit more you!! I've deciphered that you're more you in your stories than in your poems right now.
    I liked this. YES! I DID! Your stories are really amazing.. War is always debateable, always icky to talk about.
    But life? Life is inevitable.

  • -BlackKnight-
    March 27, 2005
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    I've never read anything of Hemingway, though I have his book here, For Whom the Bell Tolls. I haven't had a chance to read it just yet, though I do plan to...eventually lol. I'm glad you liked this, and thanks for the suggestion; I've been thinking for a while of going back and completely re-writing all of my old works, though I haven't decided anything, since something like that would take quite a while.

    Speaking of Easter Bunnies, we had an Easter Brunch at the country club I work at; one of the servers put on the whole Easter Bunny suit and everything. From what I hear, some of the kids didn't find him too popular, but I imagine there were others that thought the whole spectacle was cool.

    Anyway, Happy Easter; I sure wouldn't mind some chocolate right about now, that's all I can say. Preferably Hershey's, but German chocolate would do quite nicely.

  • lordoftherings
    March 27, 2005
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    I was reading the other story Dear John and lost that one somewhere in cyberspace and was re-directed to this one. Both stories are well-written, full of imagery and character development, the other more because of its length and setting, this one is sort of Hemingway...you need to grasp the character from what is in their dialogue. very interesting approach, but I would develop the second character a little more to give them an equal balance in the story.
    Winnie-the-Pooh is sending out his Easter s and leaving you a nice big basket of dark chocolate candies full of oxidants. Don’t eat them all at once or you’ll be an Eveready Easter bunny!

    Gregg Happy Easter ♥

  • -BlackKnight-
    October 21, 2004
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    Thanks a bunch. Congrats on getting 1st; I'll have to check that story out of yours.

  • -BlackKnight-
    October 21, 2004
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    Thanks.

  • Touchof1der
    October 21, 2004
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    I have not yet read one story that I didn't like from your pen my very talented and very creative friend! This is awesome as always. You have hined your skills very nicely. Good luck in the contest!

  • NotMyShadeOfGray
    October 21, 2004
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    wow, this story is awesome! i really like it! good luck in the contest and thanks for entering!
    electric thrills,
    Bleezie

  • -BlackKnight-
    September 12, 2004
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    Lol, you're not stupid. I'm glad you liked, and please, point out any errors I made; I'd rather know than, well, not know.


  • September 11, 2004
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    'WOW! You have major talent I am speechless. Great write, I saw the title and feel in love at first sight and HAD to read this, and I am so glad I did. Great imagery, and meaning, and I liked the points you were got to get across. Great job, and keep writing, wouldn’t want the world to collapse without your brilliant mind! Best of wishes and great great job!!!!!!!!!!
    Don't worry, I overlooked the errors, though they're were a few I won't mention them because the story was so so great! I'm not good at editing anyways hehe it could be perfect and I'm just stupid. Anyways, great story!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    ~~~Hannah

  • -BlackKnight-
    September 1, 2004
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    Wars are both human and inhuman; they're human in that, more than any other species, we wage it the most. They're also inhuman since, let's face it, all species of animals wage in various ways. Keep in mind that the effects of war are not just limited to the battle itself; they last a lifetime. There are cases of soldiers not just suffering from shell shock, but from all sorts of mental and physical disorders that change their cognitive capabilities and forever alter their psyches. It's a sad fact, but a true one. Thank you for considering me a talented writer, though I don't really believe I am. The real question, though, is not, "What is inhumanity," but rather, "What is humanity?" Defining just what we are, and why, is probably the most important thing we humans will ever do.

  • I Divided By I
    September 1, 2004
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    yeah, I know, but I'm feeling kinda contradictional towards this subject, as on part of me thinks war is inhuman, but another tells me thats it a part of the human nature and humanity as a whole. What you're saying about driving people insane, I think it's all about the survival instinct. You go to war to defend your beliefs or defend your country, and have to kill or be killed. It's like that rock climber that got his hand stuck between two rock and after being stuck for three days he chopped and gnawed his hand off. Some would say that such an act is almost inhuman, but it only shows that the survival instinct are just as big a part of humanity as anything else related to being human. The question, I think, is what is really inhumanity?, is it when the survival instincts takes over, and if so, is that really insanity?. Aren't instincts what makes us survive and reproduce? with the exception of common sense, higher intelligence and perhaps maybe a soul, humans are just like animals, driven by instincts. But in the end, my oppinion are just thoughts based on what I've heard and my moral outlook on life. I amy be way off, but as for now, this seems to be my oppinion.An actual war experience would maybe change my view completely. (But I pray I never will, of course)

    Anyways,he fact that this my third comment on this theme and on your write itself is a testament to your talent as a writer, you've got me thinking about this a little more than I actually should. And now I'm tired, so I apologise if this didn't make much sense.

  • -BlackKnight-
    September 1, 2004
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    Well, I've never been involved in war, so my opinion doesn't count nearly as much as a veteran's would. War can cause someone to lose his humanity, though, like you said, this isn't always the case. However, it has been known to drive people literally insane, to strip them of their humanity so that they're only operating, really, on base instincts. I see what you're saying though.

  • I Divided By I
    September 1, 2004
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    What I ment is, war isn't black and white, like the history books. Your oppinion, or most important argument in this text is that war makes one lose his humanity, become animalstic. But war has always been a part of human history, it's just as much a part of humanity as hunting for food and reproducing. I agree with ya to some extent, but not in every aspect. Anyways, that being said, I think war is horrible and unessesary, an act that as a whole doesn't benefit anyone. I could write so much more about this subject an my oppinion, but thats not whats important. Ya wrote a great write and had good arguments to back up your oppinion, so that I don't quite agree doesn't really matter. Ya have your oppinion, I have mine. Lets agree to disagree, in harmony, unlike so many people written down in history. -Peace, love, empathy-

  • -BlackKnight-
    September 1, 2004
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    What's there not to agree with? Of course, not every opinion here is mine, but I can understand why some would feel this way. Thanks for your praise of this write.

  • I Divided By I
    September 1, 2004
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    I really liked this write. Although I don't agree with every argument( assuming that your oppinion reflects the oppinion of the lone warrior) , I think it was a pretty well-written story, which makes ya think. good job

  • -BlackKnight-
    August 27, 2004
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    Lol, would this be a good thing? You've surprised me a bit yourself; your page seems pretty well organized, considering you're only 13. I'll have to take a look at some of your stuff.

  • illusionist
    August 27, 2004
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    *Blown away* You never cease to amaze me. I think you're my idol...

  • -BlackKnight-
    August 27, 2004
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    The story doesn't just tie into modern events, you know. Arrogance and blindess due to pride have been evident throughout human history. Just look back to the first two World Wars, the American Civil War, the Napoleonic Wars, and, indeed, back into ancient times with the Roman battles against Hannibal and Spartacus, or the Battle of Thermopylae with the Persians versus the Greeks. The Persians lost well over 10,000 men to the Spartan and Greek force of under 1000 men, yet the Persians continued to send men to die for three days until the enemy was finally destroyed. The Romans lost tens of thousands of men against Hannibal, and it took them 15 years to finally defeat him. The same applies to the battles against Spartacus, who took two years to be defeated. Napoleon invaded Russian with his "Grand Army" of 400,000. By the time he was forced to retreat back to France due to frostbite, starvation and death amongst his troops, his force had been annihilated down to 20,000. In the American Civil War, meaningless attacks such as "Picket's Charge" cost hundreds of lives. World War I cost more battle casualties than any other war in history. In 1916 alone, during the Somme and Verdun campaigns, over a million troops were lost. Both sides of the conflict lost more troops in the final year of the war, 1918, then all the other years combined. In World War II, the Russians simply threw whatever troops they had at the Germans advancing upon them, and if any retreated, were shot and killed because of an order Stalin had passed which forbade retreating in any form at all. Careless actions by both commanders and troops alike throughout history have cost so many lives, and not just today. In fact, the last 15 years have revolutionized warfare, as far as the U.S. is concerned, because the amount of troops that have been lost is minute compared to the casualties that have been suffered in the past. Still, though, I'm glad you liked my story, because I think, in a sense, it represents a little of the frustration some feel towards proud, foolish leaders who are more interested in their own careers (militarily and politically), than the safety of their own troops. Thanks for reading and commenting upon this.
    Edited on Aug 27, 4:03 p.m. because ''.

  • illusionist
    August 27, 2004
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    I can't believe it. You are amazingly gifted. This story ties into modern events so perfectly it makes me sick... just because I can't stand the state the US is in, that's all.

    Well, another fantastic write, BlackKnight, and I must say I'm more than impressed. You are down-right amazing!

  • -BlackKnight-
    August 25, 2004
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    Thanks.


  • bigcountry
    August 25, 2004
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    Well this is great im mean wonderful. You just wrote what came to you i can believe for that is how i write. This story though is wonderful. BEAUTIFUl!!!!!!(and many other big words i dont know that go along this line)!!!

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