Dear Raj,
How are you there? Is it beautiful there? Do you miss me? I ask you the same questions every time I write to you. I know you read my letters; I know someday I will get all the answers. With every passing day that day is approaching.
I will never forget that last movie we shared. I still laugh when I think of it. We both watched that movie for a second time thinking the other person was watching it for the first time. Then a comment made by you, got you caught, and made us laugh when we realized we had wasted our money on a stupid movie for nothing. It’s only that nowadays when I laugh tears come to my eyes.
I still wish I had died in that blast which killed you. If only I had reached in time we would have been together. Why did it rain that day? why did the auto get stuck in traffic? why did you reach the eatery early? Was it all a cruel game of taking you away from me? They say all good people go to heaven early; maybe I wasn't better than the 42 people who were killed in the blast.
I know you are there Raj, watching over me; because that is what you have always done. You have always taken care of me, never left me alone. I hear you whisper to me when I go to bed at night. I love you and I know you are reading this letter right now. Just be with me always Raj.
Love,
Asha
Author notes
I actually knew a guy who wrote letters to his dead girlfriend. And 'the blast' that I have written about is one which occured in Hyderabad(India) on 25th of August(Actually there were two blasts).My prayers for all those who passed away. I know this letter is a bit depressing, tell me if its not fit for your contest and I will remove it.
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Touching,
really sad and touhing...you touched my old wound and i'm really feeling like too cry right now...great thoughts .keep writing dear .good luck for contests.
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Very meaningful. The subject matter is powerful stuff, but the letter is simple. It's nice, yes, but you'd think with such complex emotions stirring there'd be a bit more than an anecdote and a brief recollection. A nice piece, well written, meaningful. I enjoyed the read.
Thanks for entering and good luck!
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Wow. This is an amazing piece. Thanks so much for entering my contest and good luck.
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Ok. This piece lacks a few things that were aptly present in the 'homework' story. Grammar seems out of order at a few places, so is the punctuation. You could have added a little more-- like describing the scene, or perhaps a little more about your feelings. The idea is good. You can brush it up a little to make a good piece.
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I liked this letter. But frankly, this letter does not quite show off great writing skills. I cannot quite conclude why I liked this piece because it is not much of a story either. I think it is just that the idea of someone writing to a dead boyfriend is unique.
Keep writing
Ankita -
You have a rich vein of writing skills, which I admire greatly. I loved this very much.
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hmm... the whole writing letters to the dead girlfriend is slightly creepy but at the same time completely understandable, and so I'm not sure how I feel about it. meh.
This was well written. Until the part she said why couldn't I have died in that blast like you I was actually thinking he was in the military or something. hmm... great job.
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I loved it . It so was intense .
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i like it. It is quite good. Keep writing.
beginning: 5, language: 4, plot: 4, ending: 4, dialog: 4, characters: 4.
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