Yep, she lied to me. Again. I don't know how I'm supposed to feel. Sad? sure. Angry? Hell yeah. Confused? Not sure. Why did she even bother lying anyway. Its not like its anything new. Maybe she's just tired of me butting into her life. I wonder if she really hates me as she says she do. God, maybe she really does. 1
Oh yeah, nobody knows what I'm rambling about. See here, I've got a friend, who has a "friend" (fuck him) who cuts himself and spews all sorts of misanthropic nonsense. I hate hate hate him. My friend here IDOLIZES him. I have no idea WHY, though. I think its because he's DIFFERENT from the rest of us. Point is, she tried to kill herself. Twice.2
The first time she did it I didn't have an inkling. Months later she did it again. I found out. She was hospitalised. It was hell. Enough bout that. So what happens now is, this "friend" of hers is back. He's like 2 freaking years over the age limit for school. He kept dropping outta school and then suddenly pops back. Yep, he's BACK. I was minding my own business at the assembly, and there he is. 3
Did I feel sick? Absolutely. Wanna yell at him? Yep. Wanna kill him? Everyday mate. Sometimes when he walks past me at school I get this horrible urge to hurt him. Makes me feel sick. The thought of being near the guy who messed up HIS life and my FRIEND'S life WITHOUT knowing it just pisses me off. I mean, wouldn't anybody?4
I talked to my friend. I asked whether she still kept in contact with him. She looked at me and said, "No." I said, "Good then." End of conversation. Just like that. LIE to my face. I knew that she still texts him. Ugh, whatever. At the moment she's not returning my calls and texts. She's at a boarding school now. I don't know...things are just messed up. I don't want to cry all night like I did before. No more tears. God, I'm SICK of crying. 5
I've come to set some limits. To not get too close. It'll just hurt like hell later. Shit happens. Deal with it. Yeah, I say that but its really really hard to put limits when it involves someone you simply love too much. Sometimes I DO wonder whether she considers me as a friend. 6
Man, she'll definitely KILL me if she ever reads this.
Author notes
bastard, die already.
TRUE FRIENDS HANG ON THREW THE UPS AND THE DOWNS CAUSE THEY GOT SOME ONE TO BELIEVE IN
sometimes the "DOWNS" dips very VERY low, just...gotta hang on I guess.
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I loved it!!! great job!!!!!!!!
♥ Good Bless
cait
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Love it!
This is the CUTE JuiceBox voice! And it IS lovable...and some of the devices you employ work very well. Like a good spice, however, it cannot be used to excess. For example, the first (and only, actually) "Fuck him" line...perfect. But then, don't use it anymore...and don't use an obvious substitute like "freaking" later on.
A few more comments, if you don't mind:
Hell, (comma) yeah. Same later on with: "I have no idea why, (comma) though."
You don't need: "out of his mouth." (from where else?)Do you need: "from the rest of us?" (Toss up, here)
You don't need: "she did" (after "the first time")
You don't need: "at all" after "inkling" (that's what "inkling" is)
Don't say "bout"...use about.
"So what happens now..." new sentence.
Suddely popS back.
Describe or define "assembly." (To an adult reader out of school...it could be an assemblage of anything!)
Lose "duh." The word is too ugly and indicative of dopey users. You are NOT that. Neither is your character/narrator.
"near the guy WHO messed up..."
"I mean, wouldn't anybody?" Wouldn't they WHAT? You meant "wouldn't IT piss off anybody?...easy to clear it up.
WHETHER.
I didn't like "ain't" here. Doesn't ring true. Doesn't sound right. Say "She's NOT."
Don't use the "sigh" bit. It belongs to a genre separate from story writing.
New paragraph! ("I don't know...")
Wonderful ending. Your talent reigns!
Just fix the glitches.
Behave!
GA
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Eeeep =/ I'm like your friend's friend. Just not the whole school thing. The other things. -backsawayslowly- you're going to kill me, aren't you?
Ehhh. I'm kinda scared now. You're not talking about me, but I'm taking it like you are ._.
You're just a tad little bit mad at him, aren't you? -pats-
Veryyyy personal & emotive.
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oh I noticed that AGES ago. That you're kinda like my friend's "friend" the whole point I'm risking my neck. You're kinda an outlet or smthg. Makes me feel a bit better. ^_^
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oh thanx.
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Don't push it mate.
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You mean, because I'm overacting or because you do? xD
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Its just me. Now, you're REALLY pushing it.
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I'm just going to keep 'pushing it' by commenting on how good your piece was, ya know. -
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BOXOFJUICEHATESME!
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Dude, I may just hug you to DEATH.
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Why do you hate me?
seriously now.
What is it that's so bad about me and this guy?
This isn't supposed to be a paradox of me is it?
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ohohoho that does it. I'm going now. I can't deal with stuff like this right now. Good bye.
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I'm so confused
You're the one saying you hate me.
And I haven't buggered off.
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